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Deception

A husband's will

39 total reviews 
Comment from Mastery
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Great entry Steve. Sorry I am late reading this one., my friend. It appears to have the correct word count an dit is very clever writing. Good luck in the contest. : ) Bob

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2019

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
    Thank you, Bob, for the excellent review, my friend. I enjoyed the challenge.
    God bless
    Steve
reply by Mastery on 18-Sep-2019
    : ) Bob
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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This is a real pearl of a story. Totally unexpected for the reader as well as for Evelyn, although perhaps less of a shock. Will Evelyn contest the will? It's a shame there is no more space to find out. But this is the joy of flash fiction.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2019

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
    Thank you, Katherine, for the awesome review. You know Evelyn will try to contest the will but shall find it can't be done lol.
    God bless
    Steve
Comment from DonandVicki
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Now that is unconditional love and being able to stick it to the deceiving wife to boot. A quick and to the point short, short story. Very clever and Imaginative. Well done.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2019

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
    Thank you for the awesome review. I enjoyed crafting this one.
    God bless
    Steve
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
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Hello Neonewman. This is a very well conceived and written stories. It is a complete narrative in 80 words. My favorite line in the work is the last. She wanted money, not redemption, but she got the latter. Robert

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2019

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
    Right! Thank you, Robert. I enjoyed the excellent review and appreciate it much.
    God bless
    Steve
reply by Robert Zimmerman on 16-Sep-2019
    You're welcome!
Comment from Coco Jane
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Oh, nice turnabout here! Not at all what we expect from marriage or from a funeral.

Maybe instead of "What?" Evelyn can repeat the "Why?" of her funeral act--only this time it's sincere.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2019

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
    Thank you for the awesome review, my friend. I love the suggestions. Not sure about changing them once entered.
    God bless
    Steve
reply by Coco Jane on 16-Sep-2019
    You can edit an entry right up until the contest closes.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
    Awesome! I didn't know that. I did change the last what to why. Thank you.
Comment from Lobber
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Hi there,
A delight to read... a concise use of words with a wonderful twist at the end.. justice well served..of that we all could be so forgiving- Lobber

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2019

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
    Wow! I am happy to see this little piece so well received. Than you for the awesome six-star review.
    God bless
    Steve
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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You packed a great little story into your eighty words. Delivering the one-two-three punch via the attorney's reading of the will was masterful.
Bravo!

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2019

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
    Thank you, Janice, for this excellent review. I enjoyed the challenge and love that it is so well received.
    God bless
    Steve
Comment from Tpa
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Great ending, superbly done. You captivated a wonderful story with a limited amount of words. Your text need no improvement. WISHING YOU MUCH SUCCESS IN THE CONTEST

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2019

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
    Thank you, Tpa, for the awesome review. What fun I had crafting this little one. If I were to win, it would be a first for a contest such as this. Thank you for the encouraging words.
    God bless
    Steve
Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
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Oh my, the proverbial gold digger...well she received something valuable in the end, forgiveness.

This is a flash story with a good twist and I totally enjoyed it.

Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2019

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
    Thank you, Sandra, for taking the time to review and for the wonderful stars.
    God bless
    Steve
reply by Sandra Elizabeth Williams on 16-Sep-2019
    You are welcome, Steve.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Wow! This is a small masterpiece! The ending is PERFECT. Such an imaginative idea... sure wish I had thought of it. So far in the contest, this is the best entry I've seen. Hope you win. :)

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2019

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
    Phyllis, thank you. Wow! I am stoked at all the wonderful reviews and six stars this piece has received. I certainly enjoyed the challenge.
    God bless
    Steve