Stream Ten
free verse for the club15 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Ellijay it is so good to see you again and with a splendid, signature you, totally authentic and unique free verse.
Beginning with the powerful statement of self-deception that can be linked with our internal inability to "see" with clarity the truth of that which surrounds us. Sometimes soothing stark reality with love or alcohol. I did get a kick out of the cute nurse. lol
Now you can see with visual clarity.
A wonderful verse indeed.
Gloria
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Ellijay it is so good to see you again and with a splendid, signature you, totally authentic and unique free verse.
Beginning with the powerful statement of self-deception that can be linked with our internal inability to "see" with clarity the truth of that which surrounds us. Sometimes soothing stark reality with love or alcohol. I did get a kick out of the cute nurse. lol
Now you can see with visual clarity.
A wonderful verse indeed.
Gloria
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Then the new left eye tried to take over as the dominant eye. Double vision is scary when driving! Wow, six stars. I appreciate that. Sorry I took so long to reply. Not my best spring ever for writing...
Comment from damommy
It's so good to see you back, Red. That you wrote such a lovely in six minutes is amazing. I could relate to so much of it, especially the last stanza. Thank you so much for participating. Well done!
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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It's so good to see you back, Red. That you wrote such a lovely in six minutes is amazing. I could relate to so much of it, especially the last stanza. Thank you so much for participating. Well done!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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I like your jokes in the profile comments. Sorry I retreated into my shadowy self for so long. Only child, and moody, you know...thanks for reading my stream ten....
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Thank you. I'm glad to know you enjoy them. I'm an only child, too.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the Club Challenge splendidly as you deliver a well constructed Free Verse in the 10 Minutes allotted. I really like your use of imagery throughout - simple, but poignant. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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This meets the Club Challenge splendidly as you deliver a well constructed Free Verse in the 10 Minutes allotted. I really like your use of imagery throughout - simple, but poignant. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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I apologize for the long delay in replying. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my post.
Comment from humpwhistle
Some writes don't require much time, even less editing.
It can be a shock. To see a clearer is to see a little more.
'Overwhelming' is my foe, too.
Each day I try to make a dent. If I don't, I'll try tomorrow.
I hope you're feeling better.
Peace, Lee
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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Some writes don't require much time, even less editing.
It can be a shock. To see a clearer is to see a little more.
'Overwhelming' is my foe, too.
Each day I try to make a dent. If I don't, I'll try tomorrow.
I hope you're feeling better.
Peace, Lee
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Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Pills, years, and plastic lenses have me trying to orient myself in the real world. Thanks for reading my attack on free verse, Lee.
Comment from Elynn Icart
Grips you so that you have to finish it. Dramatic, yet the enjoyable humor within the second stanza. The details for the descriptions you used kept the motor revving. Loved it.
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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Grips you so that you have to finish it. Dramatic, yet the enjoyable humor within the second stanza. The details for the descriptions you used kept the motor revving. Loved it.
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Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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I apologize for the long delay in replying. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my post.
