Schizophrenic
Her ocean of mental illness31 total reviews
Comment from Six-Star Writer
My oldest brother had schizophrenia. He killed himself after a stint in Vietnam. I've read a lot of what you've written--both here, and on the forum (of course, I'm not allowed to contribute in the forum anymore, so I only eavesdrop). You are quite talented, but tend to ramble, and sometimes, I lose interest. Maybe that's my alleged ADD (see my book ADD and Me, Forty Years in a Fog on Amazon for more about this) keeping me from following following what you've written, or maybe it's simply that you try to write too much in one sitting.
Anyway, I just wanted to touch base. Most people here hate me for my honesty. But I don't care, as I'm an extremely gifted writer.
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My oldest brother had schizophrenia. He killed himself after a stint in Vietnam. I've read a lot of what you've written--both here, and on the forum (of course, I'm not allowed to contribute in the forum anymore, so I only eavesdrop). You are quite talented, but tend to ramble, and sometimes, I lose interest. Maybe that's my alleged ADD (see my book ADD and Me, Forty Years in a Fog on Amazon for more about this) keeping me from following following what you've written, or maybe it's simply that you try to write too much in one sitting.
Anyway, I just wanted to touch base. Most people here hate me for my honesty. But I don't care, as I'm an extremely gifted writer.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
Comment from DR DIP
Wow Jimi that is a very powerful piece. You have an amazing way with words
This says it all:
"There's nothing I can say.
I am mute.
I can't wrap my brain
around Schizophrenia
All I can do- is wrap my arms
around her worth,
even though I hate to feel
It's all too much to reconcile her darkness"
Thanks for sharing Jimi and good luck in the poem of the month contest.
xdip
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Wow Jimi that is a very powerful piece. You have an amazing way with words
This says it all:
"There's nothing I can say.
I am mute.
I can't wrap my brain
around Schizophrenia
All I can do- is wrap my arms
around her worth,
even though I hate to feel
It's all too much to reconcile her darkness"
Thanks for sharing Jimi and good luck in the poem of the month contest.
xdip
Comment Written 02-Aug-2019
Comment from Joy Graham
Hello jl,
I did find this poem before now, but the subject matter is tough for me. That is just me and my personal issues. I'm sure many readers would appreciate connecting with you.
Congratulations on the nomination, and best wishes in the voting booth.
Sincerely Joy xx
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Hello jl,
I did find this poem before now, but the subject matter is tough for me. That is just me and my personal issues. I'm sure many readers would appreciate connecting with you.
Congratulations on the nomination, and best wishes in the voting booth.
Sincerely Joy xx
Comment Written 02-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Joy,
I am sorry you feel this way. Is there something I said which offended you?
Thank you for your honesty.
I am unclear on what you mean by connecting with me
Respectfully
Jimi
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Oh no, no, no! I just have trouble with the emotions in this poem. You haven't done anything wrong. I think we all have certain subjects we like better than others. You have a very fine poem. I'm not criticizing you or the poem. I learn so much from ALL the poets and poems on this site. I'm just being honest that this is beyond my comfort zone.
Comment from Hitcher
It is a stunning write Jimi, stunning! A beautiful innocent soul that for whatever reason has been cursed/possessed/inflicted with a mind that walks many paths and has too many voices screaming to be free/heard.
Our minds are awash with emotions that at times we all struggle to control, I can't imagine having multiple minds and multiple emotions all in one soul.
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It is a stunning write Jimi, stunning! A beautiful innocent soul that for whatever reason has been cursed/possessed/inflicted with a mind that walks many paths and has too many voices screaming to be free/heard.
Our minds are awash with emotions that at times we all struggle to control, I can't imagine having multiple minds and multiple emotions all in one soul.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
Comment from strandregs
Because it is so captivating and pure and true
It is so sad.
Jimi
are you familiar with the work of Dr. Avraham Hopper?
He treated this with mega doses of B vitamins.
There is a dutch professor of psychiatry in Holland who treats
his 'mental' patients with Nutrients with great sucsess.
I enjoyed your writing style. :-))Z.
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Because it is so captivating and pure and true
It is so sad.
Jimi
are you familiar with the work of Dr. Avraham Hopper?
He treated this with mega doses of B vitamins.
There is a dutch professor of psychiatry in Holland who treats
his 'mental' patients with Nutrients with great sucsess.
I enjoyed your writing style. :-))Z.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
Comment from Laurel Legion
This is an excellent interpretation of mental illness and how it feels from someone who has it (in this case schizophrenia). The stanza that reads "Innocence set in stone, like the carved cherubs above a gravestone" is particularly haunting in how it reflects an undercurrent of suicide or an early death from having schizophrenia. The way you wrote the dialogue from the schizophrenic is also very accurate as to how chaotic that form of mental illness can get for both the schizophrenic and the people in their lives.
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This is an excellent interpretation of mental illness and how it feels from someone who has it (in this case schizophrenia). The stanza that reads "Innocence set in stone, like the carved cherubs above a gravestone" is particularly haunting in how it reflects an undercurrent of suicide or an early death from having schizophrenia. The way you wrote the dialogue from the schizophrenic is also very accurate as to how chaotic that form of mental illness can get for both the schizophrenic and the people in their lives.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
Comment from karenina
This is a powerful, no hold barred, naked truth free verse epiphany that comes about as close to touching the hem of schizophrenia as anything I've ever read. I did several years stint as a Psych RN and the fragile anger, the agony clothed in lace, the chipped tile of life's mosaic is all here...your writing is beyond supreme. Are you published? If so will you share the title of your book? If not will you begin to submit? I don't know much...but I know excellence when I read it. Shatteringly beautiful...
Karenina
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This is a powerful, no hold barred, naked truth free verse epiphany that comes about as close to touching the hem of schizophrenia as anything I've ever read. I did several years stint as a Psych RN and the fragile anger, the agony clothed in lace, the chipped tile of life's mosaic is all here...your writing is beyond supreme. Are you published? If so will you share the title of your book? If not will you begin to submit? I don't know much...but I know excellence when I read it. Shatteringly beautiful...
Karenina
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
Comment from Janetsue
This is a beautiful writing about a horrible condition. Through her sharing, we can obtain brief glimpses into her tortured mind. I think this is an important posting that can help others find a bit more compassion where, maybe, not too much existed for fellow humans having to live with this troubled situation. XO Spangle
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This is a beautiful writing about a horrible condition. Through her sharing, we can obtain brief glimpses into her tortured mind. I think this is an important posting that can help others find a bit more compassion where, maybe, not too much existed for fellow humans having to live with this troubled situation. XO Spangle
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
Comment from Richard J
Ohhh, Jimi!
How poignantly sad and beautifully spieled from your own mind, heart, and soul ~ into ours.
You've portrayed this poor being ever-so vividly I could be inside her skin with her, feeling all she does, empathetically, compassionately, distraughtly.
An amazingly presented piece, M'Dear, in color, artwork selection, format, and diction ... all combined to sweep through me, through my senses like a haunting breeze of hopeless dread, but with hoped-for hope, never ending.
In answer to your query: Yes, I do have a name for my demons; it's called "desire and hunger" ... deeply yearning passions to have what I know I, in all likelihood, never will.
Thank you ever-so gratefully for sharing the wonder of your incomparable skills ... warmest hugs to You! ~ Richard
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Ohhh, Jimi!
How poignantly sad and beautifully spieled from your own mind, heart, and soul ~ into ours.
You've portrayed this poor being ever-so vividly I could be inside her skin with her, feeling all she does, empathetically, compassionately, distraughtly.
An amazingly presented piece, M'Dear, in color, artwork selection, format, and diction ... all combined to sweep through me, through my senses like a haunting breeze of hopeless dread, but with hoped-for hope, never ending.
In answer to your query: Yes, I do have a name for my demons; it's called "desire and hunger" ... deeply yearning passions to have what I know I, in all likelihood, never will.
Thank you ever-so gratefully for sharing the wonder of your incomparable skills ... warmest hugs to You! ~ Richard
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
Comment from royowen
A wonderfully written free verse, sharing the horrors of schizophrenia, or any of the mental diseases that people, of course there's the autistic spectrum, a friend of has two children, they seek for all intents and purposes normal, but it's an affliction of genres, beautifully written Jimi, well done, blesskngs, Roy
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A wonderfully written free verse, sharing the horrors of schizophrenia, or any of the mental diseases that people, of course there's the autistic spectrum, a friend of has two children, they seek for all intents and purposes normal, but it's an affliction of genres, beautifully written Jimi, well done, blesskngs, Roy
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019