The Interview Part 5
Gunny wakes up in a MASH unit in the South Korea15 total reviews
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Okay, so now I am thoroughly confused LOL. Gunny is dreaming he's died in Korea and so now he is the ghost. I must need some coffee. I have to keep reading this to ensure I don't lose my sanity. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Okay, so now I am thoroughly confused LOL. Gunny is dreaming he's died in Korea and so now he is the ghost. I must need some coffee. I have to keep reading this to ensure I don't lose my sanity. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Reviewers wanted more. I had Guny down as dying, a murderer, his wife dead and the whole story ending with a reunion of ghosts. I thought an alternative life line might put a different spin on Dot and TJ's lives.
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It will ? I think the ghosts all being reunited is a great way to end it and can see your dilemma in getting Gunny dead in a way that makes sense.
Comment from Brenda Henderson
Beautifully moving segment. You're an excellent installment writer. You're particularly skilled at drawing on your audience and leaving them poised on the edge of their seats either in anticipation of what's to come or in reflection of what's just transpired. Well done!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Beautifully moving segment. You're an excellent installment writer. You're particularly skilled at drawing on your audience and leaving them poised on the edge of their seats either in anticipation of what's to come or in reflection of what's just transpired. Well done!
Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Brenda, for the generous review. Bill
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Patty Palmer
Following your chapters and I wasn't surprised that Gunny didn't make it through the surgery, but still felt bad. I did find one typo where Gunny has passed away and he walks up to Dot and TJ are sitting together crying. dressed is misspelled, hope you don't mind that I pointed it out.
Patty
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Following your chapters and I wasn't surprised that Gunny didn't make it through the surgery, but still felt bad. I did find one typo where Gunny has passed away and he walks up to Dot and TJ are sitting together crying. dressed is misspelled, hope you don't mind that I pointed it out.
Patty
Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Thanks, PP
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You're welcome! I'm a nurse and when I was still working in order to sign off meds was to sign our initials. So, when one of my aids needed me for something they would say Hey PP we need you! LOL
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
How terrible! You killed him off! Poor Dot. So sad. Why did you have to kill Gunny? Couldn't you let them operate and remove the bullet? What's the point of letting him die? I hate sad endings. I should give this only one star, but it's well written, so...
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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How terrible! You killed him off! Poor Dot. So sad. Why did you have to kill Gunny? Couldn't you let them operate and remove the bullet? What's the point of letting him die? I hate sad endings. I should give this only one star, but it's well written, so...
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Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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I created an alternate reality for Gunny and Dot. She and TJ live. I suppose I can send Gunny to a better hospital where he survives.
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Yes! Save Gunny!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
First of all this is an excellent presentation for a possible daytime weekly tv show. It could be in the genre of soap operas. You stage direction and scene setting and character description is excellent. It appears as if it took no effort for you to orchestrate this even though as a writer I know that would be untrue. You draw the reader in with the opportunity to see how a playwright works. You are a good teaching example for those readers who want to learn how to be thorough in their direction and how to set up the script. Well done.
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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First of all this is an excellent presentation for a possible daytime weekly tv show. It could be in the genre of soap operas. You stage direction and scene setting and character description is excellent. It appears as if it took no effort for you to orchestrate this even though as a writer I know that would be untrue. You draw the reader in with the opportunity to see how a playwright works. You are a good teaching example for those readers who want to learn how to be thorough in their direction and how to set up the script. Well done.
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Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Thank you, Liz, for the thorough review and positive comments. Bill