Fine web
5-7-5 poem22 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Much to love about this 5-7-5. The juxtaposition between the delicate dew "studded" on the web is so original. I could imagine myself coming upon such a natural "gem" and marveling at the art of nature. Your final line anchors the image with style.---Karenina
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Much to love about this 5-7-5. The juxtaposition between the delicate dew "studded" on the web is so original. I could imagine myself coming upon such a natural "gem" and marveling at the art of nature. Your final line anchors the image with style.---Karenina
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Thank you very much.
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You are most welcome!--Karenina
Comment from lyenochka
Beautiful picture and the poem describes the charm of the lovely dew-jeweled spider's web nicely. The last line feels like the verb should be 'entices' but you can't have any more syllables. Perhaps "tempts" or "lures?"
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Beautiful picture and the poem describes the charm of the lovely dew-jeweled spider's web nicely. The last line feels like the verb should be 'entices' but you can't have any more syllables. Perhaps "tempts" or "lures?"
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Thank you very much.Thank you for the idea .I think I will look into it. I was away .so I could not read the reviews earlier.
Comment from Mastery
Wow! Excellent use of imagery here, Santha. It is perfection from stat to finish and I wish you well in the contest. There are so many of these 5-7-5 contests always going on, one has very little chance of winning, but you certainly do with this one. Bravo! Bob
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Wow! Excellent use of imagery here, Santha. It is perfection from stat to finish and I wish you well in the contest. There are so many of these 5-7-5 contests always going on, one has very little chance of winning, but you certainly do with this one. Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Thank you very much.no. I never win ,but I don't worry about it.Thank you for these beautiful stars.
Comment from Donka Kristeva
I enjoyed this poem very much. It has creativity, forceful and descriptive words and effective images. Great contest entry
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I enjoyed this poem very much. It has creativity, forceful and descriptive words and effective images. Great contest entry
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
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Thank you for these beautiful stars.I feel honoured.
Comment from Gail Denham
it is amazing how crafty is the spider. God made so many incredible creatures, and of course all the unusual trees, flowers, etc. We were driving in Nevada few weeks back - saw some trees I'd never seen - most unusual shapes. All these God created. (I don't like spiders at all - but give them credit for creativity)
Good poem.
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it is amazing how crafty is the spider. God made so many incredible creatures, and of course all the unusual trees, flowers, etc. We were driving in Nevada few weeks back - saw some trees I'd never seen - most unusual shapes. All these God created. (I don't like spiders at all - but give them credit for creativity)
Good poem.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
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I know,God has given certain astounding abilities to these creature.The webs they spin , they are so symmetrical!
Comment from Mark D. R.
This is my style too.
Like your verse combined with illustration and background color. Your last line is the best of the three.
Unsure if your poetic style requires a period for your poetry or not. If not, then the cap for 'Fine' might be changed.
Good luck in this contest.
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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This is my style too.
Like your verse combined with illustration and background color. Your last line is the best of the three.
Unsure if your poetic style requires a period for your poetry or not. If not, then the cap for 'Fine' might be changed.
Good luck in this contest.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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they say no punctuation needed. may be no capitals too.Thank you very much for these comments.
Comment from Kathleen S.
Perfectly put together poetry and accompanying photography, that indeed could have more than one meaning. Many things allure one's soul, but lucky not everyone gets stuck in the web. Crafty and beautiful web it may be.
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Perfectly put together poetry and accompanying photography, that indeed could have more than one meaning. Many things allure one's soul, but lucky not everyone gets stuck in the web. Crafty and beautiful web it may be.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
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thank you very much.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Sanku, this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 poem contest. The look of a dew bejeweled spiders web is always eye catching.... and bug catching. I did ponder on the last word - entice - and thought perhaps - decoy - read smoother. Just food for thought. Best of luck in the competition. ~DD
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Sanku, this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 poem contest. The look of a dew bejeweled spiders web is always eye catching.... and bug catching. I did ponder on the last word - entice - and thought perhaps - decoy - read smoother. Just food for thought. Best of luck in the competition. ~DD
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much.
Comment from RodG
I have not seen a spider web this size in ages. Indeed they are fascinating to young and old alike, especially in the early morn when spotted with drops of dew. Rod
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I have not seen a spider web this size in ages. Indeed they are fascinating to young and old alike, especially in the early morn when spotted with drops of dew. Rod
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love the sentiments here of making the web pretty and enticing for the flies! I am not sure it works quite like that though because the idea is that the fly does not see the web! He he he, but it has charm for the human onlooker, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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I love the sentiments here of making the web pretty and enticing for the flies! I am not sure it works quite like that though because the idea is that the fly does not see the web! He he he, but it has charm for the human onlooker, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Thank you. Yes humans can give any tilt to this.