Where Jenny Lies
Ghost of a little girl57 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Excuse the pun, but what a haunting poem...
I've long believed many a restless spirit roams, pondering what happened and where they go from here.
I've experienced a few 'Jenny" moments myself ~ some in dreams, some I wish were dreams!
Your story is so well told, here, Willie. The photo caught on my heartsrings and wouldn't let go.
Karenina
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Excuse the pun, but what a haunting poem...
I've long believed many a restless spirit roams, pondering what happened and where they go from here.
I've experienced a few 'Jenny" moments myself ~ some in dreams, some I wish were dreams!
Your story is so well told, here, Willie. The photo caught on my heartsrings and wouldn't let go.
Karenina
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
Comment from nomi338
I am forced to contemplate the sacrifices made by the brave souls who ventured West in pursuit of the fulfillment of their dreams, their American dreams. Those of us today owe much to the ones who sacrificed all, and paved the way for us.
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I am forced to contemplate the sacrifices made by the brave souls who ventured West in pursuit of the fulfillment of their dreams, their American dreams. Those of us today owe much to the ones who sacrificed all, and paved the way for us.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
Comment from Monica Chaddick
This was quite sad, as well as beautiful. The loss of a child has to be the worst loss imaginable. I would imagine it is confusing to a small child when they die. You really did a great job, here.
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This was quite sad, as well as beautiful. The loss of a child has to be the worst loss imaginable. I would imagine it is confusing to a small child when they die. You really did a great job, here.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
Comment from Sanku
this is a heart rending poem about the little girl and her tragic death. her ghost is really wondering what had happened . very well written .the picture also is well chosen
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this is a heart rending poem about the little girl and her tragic death. her ghost is really wondering what had happened . very well written .the picture also is well chosen
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
Comment from Paul McFarland
That's a great story, Willie. You are very convincing in your telling it. Is this a true story? The spirit world is very interesting and very real. Hopefully, Jenny is at peace.
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That's a great story, Willie. You are very convincing in your telling it. Is this a true story? The spirit world is very interesting and very real. Hopefully, Jenny is at peace.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
Comment from Wendy G
A thoughtful, sad, and reflective poem, and almost haunting as she tells her story about those times. It was a strange glimpse into the past for the person who saw her.
Wendy
Suggestions: I think you need "and was wearing ..." in line 4, and perhaps line 12 would be better with "for just a few minutes" (not sure why you used "if"), and "And in a flash" (no capital needed for In")
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A thoughtful, sad, and reflective poem, and almost haunting as she tells her story about those times. It was a strange glimpse into the past for the person who saw her.
Wendy
Suggestions: I think you need "and was wearing ..." in line 4, and perhaps line 12 would be better with "for just a few minutes" (not sure why you used "if"), and "And in a flash" (no capital needed for In")
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
Comment from LisaMay
It feels very like it to me that you have just had a visitation from a nearby ghost, that of the young child. Your narrative poem is engaging and believable. Settling the West was fraught with danger.
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It feels very like it to me that you have just had a visitation from a nearby ghost, that of the young child. Your narrative poem is engaging and believable. Settling the West was fraught with danger.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
Comment from royowen
There's nothing like dealing with the ghost of a child, presumably seeking after peace from an age long past, seeking solace. Of course there's innocent children of today being killed in their innocence, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
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There's nothing like dealing with the ghost of a child, presumably seeking after peace from an age long past, seeking solace. Of course there's innocent children of today being killed in their innocence, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
Comment from Tom Horonzy
An interesting story but I need to ask where did that come from? It isn't close to anything I recall you penning previously. Am I wrong?
It was good.
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An interesting story but I need to ask where did that come from? It isn't close to anything I recall you penning previously. Am I wrong?
It was good.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a beautiful yet haunting tale of little Jenny McGee. I like how she visited you in a dream to tell her story. Beautifully written and a lovely presentation., Willie. Cheers
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This is a beautiful yet haunting tale of little Jenny McGee. I like how she visited you in a dream to tell her story. Beautifully written and a lovely presentation., Willie. Cheers
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023