Perennials of War
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Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Barbara,
Poor Shana. Poor Drew. Poor Jeff. Oy, things are really messy, and they shouldn't be. However, I've been around enough Orthodox Jewish families to understand the dilemma. (What about keeping Kosher? - I would think Shana wouldn't be able to cook in Susan's kitchen.)
Anyway, I'm looking forward to the last chapter and I hope Shana finds a way to follow her heart AND keep her father a part of her life,
~patty~
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Hi, Barbara,
Poor Shana. Poor Drew. Poor Jeff. Oy, things are really messy, and they shouldn't be. However, I've been around enough Orthodox Jewish families to understand the dilemma. (What about keeping Kosher? - I would think Shana wouldn't be able to cook in Susan's kitchen.)
Anyway, I'm looking forward to the last chapter and I hope Shana finds a way to follow her heart AND keep her father a part of her life,
~patty~
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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She didn't the meal was catered. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from giraffmang
Shana's lot is not an easy one and here we can see her being torn between love and duty/obligation. drew seems prepared to relinquish, but will he?
Michael nodded toward his son's.- just a plural here so no apostrophe necessary.
He removed her hands from the back of neck - his neck?
Its evidence, but once the trial is over - It's.
"I don't want the painting." Shana's tears flowed heavier / "But..." Her tears flowed heavier. - exact same description here twice fairly close together.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Shana's lot is not an easy one and here we can see her being torn between love and duty/obligation. drew seems prepared to relinquish, but will he?
Michael nodded toward his son's.- just a plural here so no apostrophe necessary.
He removed her hands from the back of neck - his neck?
Its evidence, but once the trial is over - It's.
"I don't want the painting." Shana's tears flowed heavier / "But..." Her tears flowed heavier. - exact same description here twice fairly close together.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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I have made the changes. I hope I got them corrected. I appreciate the help.
Comment from judiverse
I'm waiting for Shana to tell her dad to buzz off. She's old enough to make her own decisions. It does sound like the threat from the Russians is almost at an end, and it seems like Shana is determined to go back home. The thing that might change her mind is for something to happen to Drew that would make her come to her senses. If she leaves him, it will be a decision she'll regret. (Not to mention not being allowed to have pets in her apartment.) Great work. We really see Shana's agony over her choice. judi
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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I'm waiting for Shana to tell her dad to buzz off. She's old enough to make her own decisions. It does sound like the threat from the Russians is almost at an end, and it seems like Shana is determined to go back home. The thing that might change her mind is for something to happen to Drew that would make her come to her senses. If she leaves him, it will be a decision she'll regret. (Not to mention not being allowed to have pets in her apartment.) Great work. We really see Shana's agony over her choice. judi
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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I was hoping to show Shana's agony and Drew's compassion for the situation. Thank you for understanding.
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You're very welcome. Great job! judi
Comment from apky
The story has moved forward and Shana and Drew finally don't treat each other like they were infectious.
There was more emotional investment from both Shana and Drew.
Michael nodded toward his son's(what?).
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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The story has moved forward and Shana and Drew finally don't treat each other like they were infectious.
There was more emotional investment from both Shana and Drew.
Michael nodded toward his son's(what?).
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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I have fix the strange sentence LOL I was hoping to show Shana's agony and Drew's compassion for the situation. Thank you for dropping by.
Comment from tfawcus
A very well written chapter. Things are coming to a head, but you still leave us guessing, right up to the last instalment. I thought you handled the emotions of the characters particularly well in this chapter.
Just one thing - and I'm not sure about it. Should ""How..." have a question mark?
"How... ?"
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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A very well written chapter. Things are coming to a head, but you still leave us guessing, right up to the last instalment. I thought you handled the emotions of the characters particularly well in this chapter.
Just one thing - and I'm not sure about it. Should ""How..." have a question mark?
"How... ?"
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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I was hoping to show Shana's agony and Drew's compassion for the situation. I have added the question mark. Thank you for the generous review.
Comment from Tootsie55
So glad I still had some sixes available. This was yet again another top, emotional, teary, dramatic and absorbing chapter. Just one spag. Michael nodded toward his son[']s.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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So glad I still had some sixes available. This was yet again another top, emotional, teary, dramatic and absorbing chapter. Just one spag. Michael nodded toward his son[']s.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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I have fixed that strange sentence. Thank you.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
So Drew is just letting her go... helping her go sooner. Maybe being without him will be the kick in the butt Shana needs to confront her father.
Michael nodded toward his son's. <-- No apostrophe, just SONS, plural
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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So Drew is just letting her go... helping her go sooner. Maybe being without him will be the kick in the butt Shana needs to confront her father.
Michael nodded toward his son's. <-- No apostrophe, just SONS, plural
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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I'm confused. It's only one son??? And it's his back. Please give me more information. Thank you for the kind review.
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But the phrase ends with SON'S. THe word BACK is not there. Take a lootk.
nodded toward his son's <-- ends there before quote
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Now I see it. I have fixed it. Thank you for sticking with me. There is another place that has back in it.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
I 'm probably like other fanstorians anxious to know what is going on with the grandfather clock in the penthouse. It seems it's a stolen artifact.
and finally Anderson is worried if Shana going to agree with her father about
will follow her heart or her Jewish religion Gert
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Hello Barb
I 'm probably like other fanstorians anxious to know what is going on with the grandfather clock in the penthouse. It seems it's a stolen artifact.
and finally Anderson is worried if Shana going to agree with her father about
will follow her heart or her Jewish religion Gert
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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We'll find out next week. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
I am wondering how you will get around this. Your post is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very emotional read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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I am wondering how you will get around this. Your post is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very emotional read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rhonda Skinner
Another well-written, engaging chapter. Just noticed one typo, she kissed him on the check (cheek). Can't wait to see what her decision is. I enjoy your writing.
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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Another well-written, engaging chapter. Just noticed one typo, she kissed him on the check (cheek). Can't wait to see what her decision is. I enjoy your writing.
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Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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I changed that as I was posting. I messed up. Thank you for the catch.