Gathering Storm
5-7-5 Poem26 total reviews
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
A well-written and powerful little 5-7-5. I appreciate poems with poignant messages. "Dark battalions" is a perfect word choice. Hmmm...shall we fear the flood? Great commentary of our current times. I wish you lots of luck in the contest. This is top notch.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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A well-written and powerful little 5-7-5. I appreciate poems with poignant messages. "Dark battalions" is a perfect word choice. Hmmm...shall we fear the flood? Great commentary of our current times. I wish you lots of luck in the contest. This is top notch.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Cindy, thanks for the kind words
We should definitely be on guard against the possibility of the 'flood'.
Steve
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your contest entry. I have a feeling you're making a statement on the ills of our society. We are in a mess and it seems to keep getting worse. Good luck with the contest.
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry. I have a feeling you're making a statement on the ills of our society. We are in a mess and it seems to keep getting worse. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Barbara. You are right - the woes of the world were on my mind when I wrote this.
Steve
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello!
What a moving and visually descriptive 5/7/5 poetic offering! Of course, there are both literal and symbolic interpretations that can be affixed to your offering - which is no easy task to have accomplished in such a short work. Emotive and artistically appealing!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Hello!
What a moving and visually descriptive 5/7/5 poetic offering! Of course, there are both literal and symbolic interpretations that can be affixed to your offering - which is no easy task to have accomplished in such a short work. Emotive and artistically appealing!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Diane, thanks so much for the thoughtful and positive review.
Steve
Comment from tbacha58
Hush. Hush. Hi, if the whole world would read this phrase, our today would always be a very happy and prosperous one. Your phrase is so down to earth, so positive, and I definitely enjoyed reading it. As usual when i can I am offering you a six star. Thank you. Terry xoox
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Hush. Hush. Hi, if the whole world would read this phrase, our today would always be a very happy and prosperous one. Your phrase is so down to earth, so positive, and I definitely enjoyed reading it. As usual when i can I am offering you a six star. Thank you. Terry xoox
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Terry, thanks so much for the lovely review.
Steve
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Steve,
I enjoyed reading your 5-7-5 poem this morning. You write about a rain storm, but I pick up on a hidden meaning of many other kinds of storms. I'm fascinated to see you use specific punctuation and capital letters. It is a contrast compared to the form's older cousin, haiku, which doesn't use punctuation or capitals unless for proper names. Your picture really brings out the imminent, "deluge". Best wishes in the contest. This is a fine entry.
Joy xx
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Hi Steve,
I enjoyed reading your 5-7-5 poem this morning. You write about a rain storm, but I pick up on a hidden meaning of many other kinds of storms. I'm fascinated to see you use specific punctuation and capital letters. It is a contrast compared to the form's older cousin, haiku, which doesn't use punctuation or capitals unless for proper names. Your picture really brings out the imminent, "deluge". Best wishes in the contest. This is a fine entry.
Joy xx
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Joy, thanks for the kind words.
Yep, I prefer forms where I can use punctuation.
Steve
Comment from Mark Valentine
I'm not up on the politics of your part of the world, but here in the U.S., we have a leader that sounds very much like Louis XV - Trump is warning that if he is impeached, chaos will follow. These are dark, turbulent times indeed, and your brief poem captures that turbulence.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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I'm not up on the politics of your part of the world, but here in the U.S., we have a leader that sounds very much like Louis XV - Trump is warning that if he is impeached, chaos will follow. These are dark, turbulent times indeed, and your brief poem captures that turbulence.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Mark.
Yep, I was thinking more of your politics than ours. Ours is certainly dull compared to the human headline you have in charge!
Steve
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Every syllable is effectively employed in this 5-7-5. I also read the
notes and realize this piece is versatile enough to describe coming storms
of various types.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Every syllable is effectively employed in this 5-7-5. I also read the
notes and realize this piece is versatile enough to describe coming storms
of various types.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Janice, thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from humpwhistle
The calm before the storm? Not so calm. So many hot and cold fronts colliding at once. Your poem looms dire. Having lived the cold war, perhaps I should be accustomed to instability. But this feels worse to me. To many actors with too many weapons (and not just the kind that go bang). Our house is filling with gas . . . one careless spark. And it could come from anywhere.
Your seventeen syllables speak volumes. Louis XV got nothin' on us.
Best of luck, Steve. Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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The calm before the storm? Not so calm. So many hot and cold fronts colliding at once. Your poem looms dire. Having lived the cold war, perhaps I should be accustomed to instability. But this feels worse to me. To many actors with too many weapons (and not just the kind that go bang). Our house is filling with gas . . . one careless spark. And it could come from anywhere.
Your seventeen syllables speak volumes. Louis XV got nothin' on us.
Best of luck, Steve. Peace, Lee
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Lee. Let's hope the powder keg doesn't blow the lot of you to smithereens! Trump is nothing if not unpredictable. If it comes to the point where he's going down, anything could happen - and there are enough loonies who support him to cause real trouble.
Steve
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a striking poem in its dark and impending fury - well presented in word and presentation, with a perfect image to complement its succinct verse - fully compliant with the prompt. Best of luck in the contest...
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In my opinion, a striking poem in its dark and impending fury - well presented in word and presentation, with a perfect image to complement its succinct verse - fully compliant with the prompt. Best of luck in the contest...
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much for the kind words.
Steve
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You are very welcome, Steve...Eve
Comment from Miss Sherry
Made me think...love all the explanations offered. Your artwork gives this readers shivers. Would be a poem about certain politician who shall remain nameless. Very good offering and I love it.
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Made me think...love all the explanations offered. Your artwork gives this readers shivers. Would be a poem about certain politician who shall remain nameless. Very good offering and I love it.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Thank you. I don't mind naming the walking headline who is Trump - hope he falls with a thump, without bringing too many down with him.
Steve