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Comment from WryWriter
Talk about being set up! So the hitman becomes the hit-and-run man, soon to be prisoner number blah, blah man, very soon after to be the prison hitman, and far too soon afterwards death row inmate number yak, yak until silenced man. The only thing missing was the, "One of these days...pow! Right in the kisser!" How life imitates art! LOL! Well-done! I'd say he was toast from the time he agreed to train. Oh well!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Talk about being set up! So the hitman becomes the hit-and-run man, soon to be prisoner number blah, blah man, very soon after to be the prison hitman, and far too soon afterwards death row inmate number yak, yak until silenced man. The only thing missing was the, "One of these days...pow! Right in the kisser!" How life imitates art! LOL! Well-done! I'd say he was toast from the time he agreed to train. Oh well!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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This story panned out differently than I had thought. I may need to follow Ralph into prison. So glad you caught the Honeymooners reference. Thanks for the six stars, WW. Bill
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hey, Bill.
My, my, aren't we the prolific one lately. Tryin' to get your rank on, hmmmmm?
Remember, slow and steady wins the race.
Well... generally speaking...
"The Teufel Grau Hunden guarantees that a job will be done fast, quietly, and well. "
"What happens after the job at the prison is done?'
"Best you consider what happens if it doesn't get done."
"This is beyond belief."
"Exactly, Mr. Cramdon. Exactly."
Somethin' smells fishy in Denmark, Bill, and it ain't the sushi neither.
Nice cliff-hanger style ending to keep your readers wanting more.
Good writing, a story filled with intrigue and dirty double-dealings. I'll be looking forward to reading more.
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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Hey, Bill.
My, my, aren't we the prolific one lately. Tryin' to get your rank on, hmmmmm?
Remember, slow and steady wins the race.
Well... generally speaking...
"The Teufel Grau Hunden guarantees that a job will be done fast, quietly, and well. "
"What happens after the job at the prison is done?'
"Best you consider what happens if it doesn't get done."
"This is beyond belief."
"Exactly, Mr. Cramdon. Exactly."
Somethin' smells fishy in Denmark, Bill, and it ain't the sushi neither.
Nice cliff-hanger style ending to keep your readers wanting more.
Good writing, a story filled with intrigue and dirty double-dealings. I'll be looking forward to reading more.
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Dean. Yes, I thought at get on all the boards to start the year. I?ve two more stories, four scripts, and some book chapters get off the ground. Lot# of reviewing, of course, to pay for it all.
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Well, good luck, Bill...
~Dean
Comment from lyenochka
Scary stuff, Bill. I thought it was just a dummy that was killed and it was part of driver training. But things got a whole lot sinister with a name like Devil (Teufel) (grau Hunden) Greyhound?
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Scary stuff, Bill. I thought it was just a dummy that was killed and it was part of driver training. But things got a whole lot sinister with a name like Devil (Teufel) (grau Hunden) Greyhound?
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thanks for giving this a look, lyenochka. Bill