haiku (sudden frost blankets)
Contest Entry33 total reviews
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
haiku (sudden frost blankets), is short, succinct and very much to the point. Laying between each line of this talented poet's work are the golden threads of truth. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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haiku (sudden frost blankets), is short, succinct and very much to the point. Laying between each line of this talented poet's work are the golden threads of truth. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
A well-written and nicely formatted haiku. I love the message of the frost and the silencing of the crickets as the season faces change. "Crickets' chorus stilled," is a perfect ending. Great luck to you in the upcoming contest.
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A well-written and nicely formatted haiku. I love the message of the frost and the silencing of the crickets as the season faces change. "Crickets' chorus stilled," is a perfect ending. Great luck to you in the upcoming contest.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
Comment from rhonnie69
HELLO MRS. KT: I like your poem here. It is brief, and to the point. You've used so few words to tell us a complete interesting story. Good work, Mrs. KT. God bless you and yours. Cordially: rhonnie69,
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HELLO MRS. KT: I like your poem here. It is brief, and to the point. You've used so few words to tell us a complete interesting story. Good work, Mrs. KT. God bless you and yours. Cordially: rhonnie69,
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
Comment from lyenochka
Very nice, Diane! You start with a visual picture (not only in the image) in the first two lines of the frosted field flowers. Then you end with the effect the chill has on the insect life - the sudden silence.
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Very nice, Diane! You start with a visual picture (not only in the image) in the first two lines of the frosted field flowers. Then you end with the effect the chill has on the insect life - the sudden silence.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
Comment from Kelly Grim
Really lovely haiku! I love "lush with goldenrod" and then your third line just serves as the perfect a ha moment... reminding us that as winter comes, the wildlife we know migrates, hibernates or just don't survive the cold. Anyway, I loved this! Well penned!
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Really lovely haiku! I love "lush with goldenrod" and then your third line just serves as the perfect a ha moment... reminding us that as winter comes, the wildlife we know migrates, hibernates or just don't survive the cold. Anyway, I loved this! Well penned!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
The frost certainly does quiet the wildlife. I do like that it kills all the mosquitoes. I hate those things so much. I don't like the cold and I don't like that it's completely dark before five. Sigh. Can it just snow?
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The frost certainly does quiet the wildlife. I do like that it kills all the mosquitoes. I hate those things so much. I don't like the cold and I don't like that it's completely dark before five. Sigh. Can it just snow?
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
Comment from RGstar
I so love the word 'goldenrod' a poets dream are such words one seldom sees. Bravo.
Whether or not short or long, I always enjoy your writing.
Can almost feel the cold, such the imagery contained in but a few words.
Always good to read from you.
Best od luck with this.
RG
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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I so love the word 'goldenrod' a poets dream are such words one seldom sees. Bravo.
Whether or not short or long, I always enjoy your writing.
Can almost feel the cold, such the imagery contained in but a few words.
Always good to read from you.
Best od luck with this.
RG
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Hello Roy!
Another dear reviewer from "across the pond" mentioned that goldenrod does not bloom in England.
It is profuse here in northern Michigan. It grows two to three feet tall, is a glorious shade of yellow, and for some individuals, highly potent as far as allergic reactions are concerned. But I love it. The scene I am describing in my haiku is in a meadow directly below our home, which sits on a bluff...At the moment, the gales of November are blowing. No crickets; that is for certain.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review.
Always,
diane
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Best wishes, Dianne. I wish I could use that flower every day, almost, if not, as beautiful, and as expressive as the rose.
Comment from Mark D. R.
I like it Mrs. KT !
The verse and image are a great marriage. The yellow background certainly emphasizes your goldenrod. The peaceful scene implies a stillness that the chorus can't adversely affect. And yes, a frost does often blanket our Earth in early Spring or late Fall. Great job overall.
Mark
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I like it Mrs. KT !
The verse and image are a great marriage. The yellow background certainly emphasizes your goldenrod. The peaceful scene implies a stillness that the chorus can't adversely affect. And yes, a frost does often blanket our Earth in early Spring or late Fall. Great job overall.
Mark
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Nooooo!! I don't want to even talk about frost much less see it actually on the ground!! :) :) Been in the forties here at night and the poor crickets are already silent -- sleep with the window open, but now all of the insect chorus' have gone away until Spring...the nights are just almost silent here in the country. :) ;) This is a beautiful Haiku, Diane -- I love the contrast between the frost and the goldenrod - it sets up a beautiful 'double-take' for the mind! :) ;) And, yeah, those poor crickets...sigh. :) Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest! :) Yvette
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Nooooo!! I don't want to even talk about frost much less see it actually on the ground!! :) :) Been in the forties here at night and the poor crickets are already silent -- sleep with the window open, but now all of the insect chorus' have gone away until Spring...the nights are just almost silent here in the country. :) ;) This is a beautiful Haiku, Diane -- I love the contrast between the frost and the goldenrod - it sets up a beautiful 'double-take' for the mind! :) ;) And, yeah, those poor crickets...sigh. :) Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest! :) Yvette
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
Comment from dragonpoet
This tells of the end of fall and the coming of winter. I like the yellow background to remind us of the warmth of the sun
Good luck in the contest and keep writing
Joan
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This tells of the end of fall and the coming of winter. I like the yellow background to remind us of the warmth of the sun
Good luck in the contest and keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018