Woodland Lullabye
Florette poem, variation #236 total reviews
Comment from Air Spirit
This is a beautiful, visual and vivid poem about the beauty that nature holds.. and how it can 'soothe the savage soul.' The picture is exquisite, and the font, coloring and harmonious blending of colors of the two create a visual and stunning effect... I think my favorite stanza is "...The creatures sing their woodland song,
a giggling brooklet plays along,
while pine trees whisper hush-a-bye,
their dulcet keys a lullaby,
the forest gently wrapped in moonlight's soft sarong..." 'giggling brooklet' is such delightful imagery.. it is both emotionally stunning but personifies the brooklet and assigns it human characteristics.. This 'form' of poetry however, is not one of my favorites... its flow is not as smooth and flowing as many are -- perhaps because of its the odd number of lines in each stanza, that it interrupts the flow and rhythm of the poem... but then, this is the form, it has nothing to do with your abilities whatsoever.. your poem is vivid, descriptive, soothing, and stunning...
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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This is a beautiful, visual and vivid poem about the beauty that nature holds.. and how it can 'soothe the savage soul.' The picture is exquisite, and the font, coloring and harmonious blending of colors of the two create a visual and stunning effect... I think my favorite stanza is "...The creatures sing their woodland song,
a giggling brooklet plays along,
while pine trees whisper hush-a-bye,
their dulcet keys a lullaby,
the forest gently wrapped in moonlight's soft sarong..." 'giggling brooklet' is such delightful imagery.. it is both emotionally stunning but personifies the brooklet and assigns it human characteristics.. This 'form' of poetry however, is not one of my favorites... its flow is not as smooth and flowing as many are -- perhaps because of its the odd number of lines in each stanza, that it interrupts the flow and rhythm of the poem... but then, this is the form, it has nothing to do with your abilities whatsoever.. your poem is vivid, descriptive, soothing, and stunning...
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Thank you for a truly stunning review. That last stanza is my favorite, too, so I'm glad it's yours. Thank you so much for all these great comments.
I felt the same, at first, about that longer fourth line, but after a while, it just seemed to fit.
Comment from Pantygynt
I think the cross rhyme that is not required but may be used in this version of the Florette is what makes it something special and something more challenging. Having said that the imagery contained in the final line of this post is something else again. it is absolutely beautiful and original.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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I think the cross rhyme that is not required but may be used in this version of the Florette is what makes it something special and something more challenging. Having said that the imagery contained in the final line of this post is something else again. it is absolutely beautiful and original.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Wow! Thank you, Jim. You've made my day.
Comment from Anne B Francis
Oh this is so beautiful loved every word, and the picture is breath takingly stunning.
Giggling brooklet what a great expression - the kind of picture I would love to grace my wall
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Oh this is so beautiful loved every word, and the picture is breath takingly stunning.
Giggling brooklet what a great expression - the kind of picture I would love to grace my wall
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much for this great review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Florette no 2. The woods speak with their own language and at night they sing a lullabye to the animals that go to sleep when the sun sets and the moon stands guard.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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A very well-written Florette no 2. The woods speak with their own language and at night they sing a lullabye to the animals that go to sleep when the sun sets and the moon stands guard.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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I'm glad you see it as I do. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Yvonne. I do like your florette as it creates a woodland feel and the image compliments your words very nicely. this style is an interesting one bit lends itself for a well written verse like this one Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Hi Yvonne. I do like your florette as it creates a woodland feel and the image compliments your words very nicely. this style is an interesting one bit lends itself for a well written verse like this one Cheers Christine
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Thank you, Chrissy. What lovely compliments.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Although I don't see it used much, I have always had a soft spot for this rhyme scheme and you have done such a beautiful job with you word choice and combinations that a pic was just a bonus...your visual imagery was awesome! I can almost here the little brook! ;) ;) Thank you for sharing today! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Although I don't see it used much, I have always had a soft spot for this rhyme scheme and you have done such a beautiful job with you word choice and combinations that a pic was just a bonus...your visual imagery was awesome! I can almost here the little brook! ;) ;) Thank you for sharing today! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Thank YOU for this wonderful review, and for the beautiful comments.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Woodland Lullaby", is an exceptionally well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is certainly a six. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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"Woodland Lullaby", is an exceptionally well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is certainly a six. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Duchess, thank you for such a stunning review. You've made my day.
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damonny, I'm delighted to know I've made your day.
Take care, God bless you and best wishes,
the Duchess
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You have excelled yourself again, Yvonne, with this really magical poem. You've captured the delight of the woodland scene, bringing in the proud, majestic Oak. My favourite tree. The imagery in, gnarled and scarred, fits perfectly, as does, rustling it's branches, in reply. The next stanza gives us the playful mood of the giggling brooklet, and the soft whispering of the lovely scented pine. Altogether, you have created a beautiful relaxing scene which equals the picture above it. Well done, my friend, a treat to read! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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You have excelled yourself again, Yvonne, with this really magical poem. You've captured the delight of the woodland scene, bringing in the proud, majestic Oak. My favourite tree. The imagery in, gnarled and scarred, fits perfectly, as does, rustling it's branches, in reply. The next stanza gives us the playful mood of the giggling brooklet, and the soft whispering of the lovely scented pine. Altogether, you have created a beautiful relaxing scene which equals the picture above it. Well done, my friend, a treat to read! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Oh my goodness, Sandra. What an absolutely lovely review. Thank you.
Comment from meeshu
very nice, Yvonne. I've been waiting for someone to use "Sarong". a really lovely nature poem with great rhymes and perfect flow..................meeshu
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very nice, Yvonne. I've been waiting for someone to use "Sarong". a really lovely nature poem with great rhymes and perfect flow..................meeshu
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Thank you for a great review.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Yvonne. Your Florette is lovely. Really well composed with good rhyming, flow and content. The image, too, is perfect. Bierstadt's artwork is amazing with your words. Marilyn
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Hi Yvonne. Your Florette is lovely. Really well composed with good rhyming, flow and content. The image, too, is perfect. Bierstadt's artwork is amazing with your words. Marilyn
Comment Written 15-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Thank you. I really like his art. I'm glad you did, too.