Upon Stopping at the Mailbox
Remembering Mother's Cake20 total reviews
Comment from Marvin Calloway
This is a fine poem, in every respect. To create from scratch, (like some cakes) all the rhymes and thoughts that tell a story, seems like a major undertaking.
One wouldn't think an incomplete cake would be so welcome and cause so much joy. Only a mother who knows her offspring could make such a thing happen.
Marv
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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This is a fine poem, in every respect. To create from scratch, (like some cakes) all the rhymes and thoughts that tell a story, seems like a major undertaking.
One wouldn't think an incomplete cake would be so welcome and cause so much joy. Only a mother who knows her offspring could make such a thing happen.
Marv
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your expanded review. I'm glad it touched you.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. An unexpected package can be more excxiting than one we expecting. A package like this that bring so many good memories is priceless.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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A very well-written poem. An unexpected package can be more excxiting than one we expecting. A package like this that bring so many good memories is priceless.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your expanded review. I'm glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Shanbreen
It's a good story about a loving sister who is a mother figure or reminds you with her actions of what your mother did for you. But I do find it rather wordy. Some of the lines even seemed forced to me -- perhaps for the rhyme? For example, "Now some of you may be like my sister and me." How does this line progress to the next step of the story?
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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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It's a good story about a loving sister who is a mother figure or reminds you with her actions of what your mother did for you. But I do find it rather wordy. Some of the lines even seemed forced to me -- perhaps for the rhyme? For example, "Now some of you may be like my sister and me." How does this line progress to the next step of the story?
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Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your time in reviewing my poem. I appreciate that.
Comment from LaFrance
Your poem is an excellent example of this contest. The rhythm of your words as you journey after your package and discovery the contains is fabulous and fun to read. I'm going to look up tomato soup cake, it sounds interesting.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Your poem is an excellent example of this contest. The rhythm of your words as you journey after your package and discovery the contains is fabulous and fun to read. I'm going to look up tomato soup cake, it sounds interesting.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Tomato soup cake is like a spice cake only more flavorful. You may want raisins or not. You'll find the recipe in a very old book. We're talking the 50's. But they do still have the very recipe online.
Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you appreciated it so.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is a great memory. The poem is superb. You never miss a rhyme. The cadence is perfect. I wrote a poem about making a cake for my father when I was a child. I messed up all the ingredients, but my father ate it anyway and said it was the best cake he ever had.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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This is a great memory. The poem is superb. You never miss a rhyme. The cadence is perfect. I wrote a poem about making a cake for my father when I was a child. I messed up all the ingredients, but my father ate it anyway and said it was the best cake he ever had.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Do you still have the poem. It sounds like a keeper. I'd love to read it. Thank you for the expanded review. I'm glad you appreciated it so.
Comment from fm wright
You have proven that one can make the arrival of mail an adventure and into a hooking story line. Thanks for penning and sharing as a reminder that even the smallest of things can prompt memories whether they be good or bad.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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You have proven that one can make the arrival of mail an adventure and into a hooking story line. Thanks for penning and sharing as a reminder that even the smallest of things can prompt memories whether they be good or bad.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your upbeat elaborated upon review. I'm glad you appreciated it.
Comment from Nanny 6
This is a sweet story about receiving a special something to bring back comforting memories of love and compassion. Thank you for sharing this story in poem and good luck in the contest.
Judy
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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This is a sweet story about receiving a special something to bring back comforting memories of love and compassion. Thank you for sharing this story in poem and good luck in the contest.
Judy
Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Thank you for the upbeat review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks memories about mother's cake that how tasty that everyone in family enjoyed days but today she is no more may be smiling from above about ours remembering her; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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This speaks memories about mother's cake that how tasty that everyone in family enjoyed days but today she is no more may be smiling from above about ours remembering her; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Thank you so much for the uplifting review. I'm glad you appreciated it.
Comment from Donka Kristeva
Naturally flowing verses. There is suspense that made me read with interest till the end. Very nice poetic skill, make a long poem increasingly interesting. And the very story is heart-warming.
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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Naturally flowing verses. There is suspense that made me read with interest till the end. Very nice poetic skill, make a long poem increasingly interesting. And the very story is heart-warming.
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Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your comprehensive review. I'm glad you appreciated it.
Comment from Tootsie
Wow, well done. You expressed your thoughts so well and told a very
touching story. It was easy to read and understand.
Thanks for your efforts and keep up the good work
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Wow, well done. You expressed your thoughts so well and told a very
touching story. It was easy to read and understand.
Thanks for your efforts and keep up the good work
Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Thank you 1st of all for the 6 stars. I really appreciate it. Also I'm glad you appreciated my style of writing.