Twin sisters
Very different lives55 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Why anyone would deliberately choose either life is a little beyond my ken. Well done, very cleverly crafted and with a smoothly flowing stream like fluidity in the narrative, very witty, contrasting lives, each desiring a little of the other's propensities. Scrobed in abcb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018
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Why anyone would deliberately choose either life is a little beyond my ken. Well done, very cleverly crafted and with a smoothly flowing stream like fluidity in the narrative, very witty, contrasting lives, each desiring a little of the other's propensities. Scrobed in abcb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 06-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018
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Thank you so much Roy. I really appreciate this review from such a great poet as you. Love Jen.
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Thank you and welcome
Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
Interesting story. Good rhymes, though not required. A bit of humour present.
The different lives of the twin would make a saint blush and a sinner sin.
Best of luck in the competition!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018
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Interesting story. Good rhymes, though not required. A bit of humour present.
The different lives of the twin would make a saint blush and a sinner sin.
Best of luck in the competition!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018
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Many thanks.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Hayley Zemontas
I found this poem very light hearted and amusing. It gave me a smile, and whilst I greatly enjoy deep and meaningful poems, I also think it's very important in life to have a joke and not take things too seriously, and this poem certainly injects humour into the world of literacy. The only piece of criticism really is that I would have liked the poem to be a bit longer so I could learn more about these 2 intriguing characters who seem to be both similar and yet extremely different. I also thought it was interesting how you implied that sometimes despite being content, perhaps the sisters wished for a piece of each other's lives- 'sometimes Jane longs for peace and quiet and Joan often longs for a lay'. A funny, light hearted poem.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018
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I found this poem very light hearted and amusing. It gave me a smile, and whilst I greatly enjoy deep and meaningful poems, I also think it's very important in life to have a joke and not take things too seriously, and this poem certainly injects humour into the world of literacy. The only piece of criticism really is that I would have liked the poem to be a bit longer so I could learn more about these 2 intriguing characters who seem to be both similar and yet extremely different. I also thought it was interesting how you implied that sometimes despite being content, perhaps the sisters wished for a piece of each other's lives- 'sometimes Jane longs for peace and quiet and Joan often longs for a lay'. A funny, light hearted poem.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from Mistydawn
This is a funny, well-written poem. I think the two are as different as they can be yet I bet they have a special bond, a connection that only twins tend to share. Great poem, humors last line, good luck with your contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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This is a funny, well-written poem. I think the two are as different as they can be yet I bet they have a special bond, a connection that only twins tend to share. Great poem, humors last line, good luck with your contest.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Many thanks. Glad you liked it.
Comment from l.raven
HI Jen, this toooo funny sweet girl...most twins do like to go their own ways...but one always seems to know what the other is all about...I love your poem you...thank you for the laugh...very well written...and a perfect picture...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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HI Jen, this toooo funny sweet girl...most twins do like to go their own ways...but one always seems to know what the other is all about...I love your poem you...thank you for the laugh...very well written...and a perfect picture...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 06-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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I love you too, Linda. Thanks for the great review.
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you are so very welcome sweet girl...Love xxoo
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. What a drastic difference and yet, it is quite possible. It's great that they do connect and share their experiences and both can learn from the other's life more about humanity and how to pray. Fun story in your poem!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Lol. What a drastic difference and yet, it is quite possible. It's great that they do connect and share their experiences and both can learn from the other's life more about humanity and how to pray. Fun story in your poem!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there,
I wonder if two sisters could be any different! I think you did a great job of portraying the sisters and their differences. Your last line pretty much summed up the life of a nun,
Good luck to you in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Hi there,
I wonder if two sisters could be any different! I think you did a great job of portraying the sisters and their differences. Your last line pretty much summed up the life of a nun,
Good luck to you in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 06-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Thanks for your great review
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job characterizing the twins. Your description of each is believable. Your lines flow smoothly. The ending was different but too unexpected. Best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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You did a great job characterizing the twins. Your description of each is believable. Your lines flow smoothly. The ending was different but too unexpected. Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 06-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for reviewing.
Comment from persevere
I love your poem. It certainly falls under the humour category. Your depiction of Joan having nothing around but fresh air is a perfect comparison to Jane's conducting business in the city. And your last line made me giggle.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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I love your poem. It certainly falls under the humour category. Your depiction of Joan having nothing around but fresh air is a perfect comparison to Jane's conducting business in the city. And your last line made me giggle.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Thanks for the great review
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Story Poem writing prompt.
Your story of the twin sisters is well written and well rhymed.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Story Poem writing prompt.
Your story of the twin sisters is well written and well rhymed.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 06-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Many thanks Sharon.