Consider the Oyster
A 20-syllable poem for the contest45 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
A lesson for all of us: to find a way to make pearls out of pain. Love the conversation tone of the first line. Alliteration with f sound, also w and p.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
A lesson for all of us: to find a way to make pearls out of pain. Love the conversation tone of the first line. Alliteration with f sound, also w and p.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Shari. Much appreciated. Best wishes for a happy Easter, Tony
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I like this. You've done a great job in describing the process of how the oyster creates the pearl. I like the wording, flow, and excellent artwork. Great job and well done Tony.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
I like this. You've done a great job in describing the process of how the oyster creates the pearl. I like the wording, flow, and excellent artwork. Great job and well done Tony.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Jeffrey. Much appreciated. Best wishes for a happy Easter, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
So well said, Tony! I always felt bad about wearing pearls thinking about the suffering of the oyster. But now I've come to enjoy the beauty and perhaps I should learn create pearls out my pain. Maybe that's what poets do.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
So well said, Tony! I always felt bad about wearing pearls thinking about the suffering of the oyster. But now I've come to enjoy the beauty and perhaps I should learn create pearls out my pain. Maybe that's what poets do.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Thanks for your review and observations, Helen! Of course, the wearing of pearls is not an issue for me, but I do sometimes indulge in a small plate of oysters, freshly shucked and lightly laced with lime juice!
Comment from johnwilson
Oh, Tony, everything you touch with words comes up flawless in my eyes, and I am well-read. This particular piece"wraps pearl around its pain" was the bit of wonder poets can do with words. It was the icing on the cake. Bravo! What can I say? What I can say is that I'm honored to be on a site where I can read work of this caliber for free! And as the group, 'Crash Test Dummies' stated in one of their songs, "and get to know the artist personally."
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
Oh, Tony, everything you touch with words comes up flawless in my eyes, and I am well-read. This particular piece"wraps pearl around its pain" was the bit of wonder poets can do with words. It was the icing on the cake. Bravo! What can I say? What I can say is that I'm honored to be on a site where I can read work of this caliber for free! And as the group, 'Crash Test Dummies' stated in one of their songs, "and get to know the artist personally."
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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I am humbled by your praise, but suspect that I am not quite worthy of it. However, I shall keep trying!
Comment from ameen786
Even in its brevity, the verse has a message, 'no pain, no gain,-an astute write my friend and a winner in my book; thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
Even in its brevity, the verse has a message, 'no pain, no gain,-an astute write my friend and a winner in my book; thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Many thanks for your review and encouraging words, Ameen.
Comment from Swampfox1
Good entry into the contest, and by the way, good luck in the contest. Very good for a short poem and it moves on ward with purpose. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
Good entry into the contest, and by the way, good luck in the contest. Very good for a short poem and it moves on ward with purpose. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks for stopping by to review, Swampfox. I am most appreciative of your kind comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from BeasPeas
An outstanding poem, Tony, worded so well. Image is perfect to accompany. Good luck in the contest, but I don't think you'll need it. It looks like a winner to me. Marilyn
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
An outstanding poem, Tony, worded so well. Image is perfect to accompany. Good luck in the contest, but I don't think you'll need it. It looks like a winner to me. Marilyn
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Marilyn, for your very kind words and supreme confidence in my ability to win the lottery! LOL
Comment from Katya
Very, very nice! Nice philosophical conception, nice wording, nice sound, nice picture too. Good luck on the contest! Yes, I'm in it too, but, hey, we BOTH deserve the best!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
Very, very nice! Nice philosophical conception, nice wording, nice sound, nice picture too. Good luck on the contest! Yes, I'm in it too, but, hey, we BOTH deserve the best!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your very nice review, Katya. Equal first, eh? LOL
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Tony,
I love the picture, title, and message combination of this short poem. I counted 20 syllables - yay! I wonder if a pearl is the equivalent to kidney stones in humans? Maybe somewhere in an alternate universe aliens collect human kidney stones for necklaces? Oh my, sorry about that. I went totally off topic. I enjoyed your short poem. Best wishes in the contest.
Sincerely Joy xx
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
Hi Tony,
I love the picture, title, and message combination of this short poem. I counted 20 syllables - yay! I wonder if a pearl is the equivalent to kidney stones in humans? Maybe somewhere in an alternate universe aliens collect human kidney stones for necklaces? Oh my, sorry about that. I went totally off topic. I enjoyed your short poem. Best wishes in the contest.
Sincerely Joy xx
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Interesting idea! I remember when I had my tonsils out as a kid, asking the surgeon if I could have them as a keepsake. He took me to the window, which had a gravel driveway, and said that what I thought was gravel down there was actually tonsils, and they needed to keep mine for some important repair work! I'm not sure what they used kidney stones for!
Comment from June Sargent
Yes, out of adversity something beautiful can be born. We just need to wrap some love around it. I believe this is the shortest poem I've read from you! Well done!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
Yes, out of adversity something beautiful can be born. We just need to wrap some love around it. I believe this is the shortest poem I've read from you! Well done!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, June. As always, I appreciate your review and comments. I don't usually bother with these short poem contests, but thought I'd give this one a go for a change. All the best, Tony