Paper Dolls and Toy Soldiers
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem. We can remember the things we enjoyed so much as children the best and we can never stop getting excited about the way it made us feel then.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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A very well-written free verse poem. We can remember the things we enjoyed so much as children the best and we can never stop getting excited about the way it made us feel then.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Thanks a million, Sandra. :))
Comment from frierajac
It seems like you have negative perception towards the second rope that replaced the first that was of natural fibers maybe hemp? this in itself says volumes about technocracy.
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It seems like you have negative perception towards the second rope that replaced the first that was of natural fibers maybe hemp? this in itself says volumes about technocracy.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
Comment from nomi338
Om my goodness, the mention of Arkansas woods bring back sweet memories of me and my cousins venturing out into the nearby woods near my grandma's place. We would go out early in the morning, eat wild berries, staining our t-shirts and then going skinny dipping in a nearby creek. After getting a spanking for ruining out t-shirts we learned to take them off before eating the berries.
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Om my goodness, the mention of Arkansas woods bring back sweet memories of me and my cousins venturing out into the nearby woods near my grandma's place. We would go out early in the morning, eat wild berries, staining our t-shirts and then going skinny dipping in a nearby creek. After getting a spanking for ruining out t-shirts we learned to take them off before eating the berries.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I don't know what's going on in your life, but I will pray about the situation. I've missed your poetry. I pray everything will work out. Thank you for sharing this poem. I had a rope swing, myself.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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I don't know what's going on in your life, but I will pray about the situation. I've missed your poetry. I pray everything will work out. Thank you for sharing this poem. I had a rope swing, myself.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Aww. You're too kind, Barbara. Just busy taking care of some folks. All is well really. Thanks for your concern AND giving this a look. Hope you are well. Blessings, mike
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a fantastic free verse, right to start to finish, Mav. And it does cover a lot of time and I'm certain most people have fond memories of the two rope swing soaring off into the future's sky.
Just lovely and well deserving of an exceptional rating.
and left it's (its) print on
I really like the green on black presentation too. It symbolizes renewal to me.
Ange
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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This is a fantastic free verse, right to start to finish, Mav. And it does cover a lot of time and I'm certain most people have fond memories of the two rope swing soaring off into the future's sky.
Just lovely and well deserving of an exceptional rating.
and left it's (its) print on
I really like the green on black presentation too. It symbolizes renewal to me.
Ange
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Thanks, Ange
You did catch a great portion of what I was aiming for. I missed the mark on some of it though, so I'm going to fiddle with it a bit and see if I can make it more clear. As always your too generous, but I love it, of course. Yes, the green on black was exactly that, renewal and growth. Fixed the "it's" that I do over and over again. Jeesh!
Mav
Comment from Teri7
Mike, I enjoyed reading and reviewing this very nicely written and well written poem about the rope and the oak tree. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery with the art work you chose. I used to swing on a rope when I was really young, early teens, and had a lot of fun! That was the good ole' days! Thanks for the memory! Blessings, Teri
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Mike, I enjoyed reading and reviewing this very nicely written and well written poem about the rope and the oak tree. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery with the art work you chose. I used to swing on a rope when I was really young, early teens, and had a lot of fun! That was the good ole' days! Thanks for the memory! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
Comment from His Grayness
Excellent artwork/photography used here to deliver the very emotional remembrances of the author. I enjoyed it very much and cannot offer any suggestions to improve this work in any way. HIS GRAYNESS;
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Excellent artwork/photography used here to deliver the very emotional remembrances of the author. I enjoyed it very much and cannot offer any suggestions to improve this work in any way. HIS GRAYNESS;
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
Comment from nordicgirl
About time I don't have to go dredging up your latest poems.
Wow. This is amazing, Michael.
I get it as a growing old, looking back type thing and it's quite beautiful as that.
But, it seems like much more to me. Secrets of the past that we bury, but they remain inside as part of us.
The two ropes, that is what makes me think. The old rope is from the past. Is it a hanging rope? That's what I feel. This is not just you, it's all of us.
Anyway, one of your best. NG
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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About time I don't have to go dredging up your latest poems.
Wow. This is amazing, Michael.
I get it as a growing old, looking back type thing and it's quite beautiful as that.
But, it seems like much more to me. Secrets of the past that we bury, but they remain inside as part of us.
The two ropes, that is what makes me think. The old rope is from the past. Is it a hanging rope? That's what I feel. This is not just you, it's all of us.
Anyway, one of your best. NG
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Damn!!! You are on to it a bit. I'll have to tinker with this as everyone missed my meaning entirely. A hanging rope, yes. I guess people are okay with the pictures I paint, but I suck at getting my meaning across. Thanks for the deep read. You are onto the gist of it. Yes! michael
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Mikey,
this is very deep. The old swing is still there A memory of time gone by.
But the new one as yet to build more memories. I think I understood what you writing but I'm not to good at trying to explain it. Either way I liked it.
Brenda:))x
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Hi Mikey,
this is very deep. The old swing is still there A memory of time gone by.
But the new one as yet to build more memories. I think I understood what you writing but I'm not to good at trying to explain it. Either way I liked it.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hey Michael. I was in the third grade 9 years old with a swing that felt like it would swing two stories and if you felt like you were gonna be lucky you'd let go at that highest point and fly. Landing is in the drive that has sand so hot it fries your breakfast eggs but, you don't care ... you know what it is to fly.
That's what this piece of writing did for me. That old rope so thick and knotty attached to an old oak ... giving way to the new because that is what we have to do eventually. I don't care if you respond or not Michael. I enjoy your way of writing as it feels like seeing what it would look like if I could tap into my own masculine as opposed to feminine side in order to write ... lol thanks for writing it.
xoxo deborah aka Kiwi
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Hey Michael. I was in the third grade 9 years old with a swing that felt like it would swing two stories and if you felt like you were gonna be lucky you'd let go at that highest point and fly. Landing is in the drive that has sand so hot it fries your breakfast eggs but, you don't care ... you know what it is to fly.
That's what this piece of writing did for me. That old rope so thick and knotty attached to an old oak ... giving way to the new because that is what we have to do eventually. I don't care if you respond or not Michael. I enjoy your way of writing as it feels like seeing what it would look like if I could tap into my own masculine as opposed to feminine side in order to write ... lol thanks for writing it.
xoxo deborah aka Kiwi
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Hi, Deborah
Yes, but I feel terrible not responding to such a thoughtful and helpful review. :)) AND I also feel bad for not reviewing your exceptional work even though I do read almost all of it. I'm just buried in work taking care of some folks. So no time, but I can't help but sneak some posts in. Thanks so much for your kind words and understanding. You've written a couple of awesome pieces of late. I intend to review, but if I don't. WOW. xxmike