Comment from Dan Diego

Excellent

I must admit the science is a little over my head, but the yucks were fast and furious. I think I got most of them. Great job. The lines were tight, I could imagine an animation or parody. It did remind me of a few Woody Allen bits from the 70s. "Take a bowel for them" was genius.

I did look for spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors. I found none. After all the dust is settled, consider adding author notes to explain the subtext.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018

Thanks, Dan. I will be sure to drop some notes in for things like this. Bill

Comment from apky

Excellent

You really know how to come up with unique stories, Bill. I certainly enjoyed this one; entertaining and in a curious way also educative. The "characters" were so true to form, it made the story amazing, really.

Excellent. This definitely deserved a six, but I'm already all out.

AA: No, but your(you're - unless you deliberately want to write it like you did) getting on my last one.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018

My only excuse for that homophone fumble is that I tried editing this on my phone. It?s like target shooting from horseback on the trot over rough terrain. Of course, my father always said that only a poor craftsman blames his tools. Thanks for giving this a look. Bill

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

This was a very cleverly written script Bill that made me smile, you must have some sort of scientific background to narrate such a fine piece.
Mitchell

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018

Thanks, Mitchell, for the kind review. Bill

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

This is so clever and what a fun way to teach biology as well as puns:

I refer to them as Dis and Terry.

RBC: They started that movement down in Mexico.

AA: I'll take a bowel for them.

Dynamite ending line.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018

Thanks, Shari, for the very nice review. Bill.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very cute script you have penned about the amoeba. You always use such cute descriptive words and great imagery with your words. I enjoyed this. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018

Thanks, Teri

reply by Teri7 on 24-Jan-2018

you are so welcome my friend. You can write neat things about anything! You are talented!

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

They had all better split as I am sure 5.0 will soon be on location to bust up the party and take away all guilty parties. That is what 5.0 does. The cells could very well wind up in cells, behind Bars in stead of drinking in bars.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018

When I wrote ?oxy? I was referring to the oxygen that red blood cells carry. Five-0 won?t be necessary.

reply by nomi338 on 24-Jan-2018

Oh, OK. LOL.

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

I need my world six was very well written rich and seman well as imagery it flood well-read well with no grammar issues as well eject an object continents were both excellent trip to measure Sterling Place thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018

Thanks, Ricky

reply by Ricky1024 on 23-Jan-2018

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

LOL. I guess you were a biologist in your previous life? I disappointed in WBC for not working harder to stop the AA who's related to " Dis and Terry! " Cute humor here, Bill!

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 Comment Written 23-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018

Along with my Masters in Teaching and Learning I have an Associate Degree in Science, and a Mr. Wizard Junior Scientist card from the third grade.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Bill, Bill, Bill...

You scare me soooo much. My issue is that I have no idea how you can come up with the things you do -- unless you are truly, actually, really experiencing them.

But...just don't tell me what the truth is...I like wondering. *smile*

Thanks!



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 Comment Written 23-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018

Yes, I was once part of a secret government experiment that shrank me to a microscopic size and I was injected into a persons blood stream. It was a Fantastic Voyage. Gee, that is probably classified. Forget what I said.

reply by robyn corum on 23-Jan-2018

Oh! Well, I won't tell anyone. No worries.

But... would you mind tell me how to spell your last name (just in case the newspaper lady asks me)

Thanks!

reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018

C O R U M

reply by robyn corum on 24-Jan-2018

oops

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Exceptional

RBC: Any relation to Disraeli and Terrance Amoeba?
AA: Cousins. I refer to them as Dis and Terry.

LOL! Great stuff! Also like your spelling of bow (bowel). You have a very strange mind. That's a compliment. :)

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018

Thank you, Phyllis, for the terrific review and strange mind compliment. Bill