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Comment from LIJ Red
The loss of your son is a tragedy played out all over America for no reason. I read that accidents are now the number three cause of death in the US, and that they think this is linked to the dope crisis, opioids and others. Strongly felt emotions show here. Excellent post.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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The loss of your son is a tragedy played out all over America for no reason. I read that accidents are now the number three cause of death in the US, and that they think this is linked to the dope crisis, opioids and others. Strongly felt emotions show here. Excellent post.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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And thanks for your wonderful review and time.
Dr Ricky 1024
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
"And, I like to thank you for reviewing My Story..
"From the Bottom...
"Of My...
"Donated Heart to Chaz."
Bless your soul Ricky. You have been through so much. I am so proud of you. Kindest regards and well done Meia x
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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"And, I like to thank you for reviewing My Story..
"From the Bottom...
"Of My...
"Donated Heart to Chaz."
Bless your soul Ricky. You have been through so much. I am so proud of you. Kindest regards and well done Meia x
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Why thank you miss me after stopping by the house is suffering again and I hope you didn't suffer too much this time my poetry has been known to bring reviewers to tears I've been told dr. Ricky 1024
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Ricky, this is a terrible tragedy related from beyond the grave. You write using your son Jay's words. It is so very sad that a young life was snuffed out in such a way. The Horrible Bed - you used a strong metaphor here for the grave. The whole story tells us how it happened and the consequences. You as a father still mourn the death of your son. God Bless and stay strong. Warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Hi Ricky, this is a terrible tragedy related from beyond the grave. You write using your son Jay's words. It is so very sad that a young life was snuffed out in such a way. The Horrible Bed - you used a strong metaphor here for the grave. The whole story tells us how it happened and the consequences. You as a father still mourn the death of your son. God Bless and stay strong. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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My older brother David lost his daughter Kimberly during the Hurricane Sandy episode she had acquired breathing related problem in the apparently the storm had something to do with it and her when she passed out cause she couldn't find her device to help her breathe her stupid boyfriend decided to try instead of call 912 get immediate help driver to a hospital almost 10 miles away where she of course passed away on the ride over she was very very young and she was only about 2726 the point is that we should mourn and never forget and my brother David doesn't seem to realize that he almost acts like she never existed Lee blocked her out for his own personal reasons thanks for this review dr. Ricky 1024
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning, Ricky: I love the colors that you chose for this post. The photo is always the perfect picture for all of your poems about Jason, your son. Thank you for sharing this story with us. It is very sad and heart wrenching. Please have a great Sunday!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Good morning, Ricky: I love the colors that you chose for this post. The photo is always the perfect picture for all of your poems about Jason, your son. Thank you for sharing this story with us. It is very sad and heart wrenching. Please have a great Sunday!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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U-22 you're in on this blessed Sabbath Sunday at 4:53 a.m. I'm sitting here watching a horror movie reviewing your work and others and getting ready to start one of my own I just did one from the true and Erie contest so I can but I can only wait religiously on Sunday so I have to figure out where I'm going to go with that and then write it I love doing it the first week of the month cuz I give a testimony and then I also get to add my beautiful poetry it's like to gift at 1 for our savior in his son Jesus Christ and of course I say these words in the name of Jesus Christ amen Ricky
Comment from c_lucas
If someone wants to commit suicide, don't take others alone. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. There is very good imagery.
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"I mist (must) have flipped my lid."
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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If someone wants to commit suicide, don't take others alone. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. There is very good imagery.
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"I mist (must) have flipped my lid."
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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And thanks for your wonderful review and time.
again.
Ricky
Comment from Dean Kuch
"Now as My Body rests in that bed."
"That Horrible bed!" ... good metaphor used here in relation to a grave. Very emotive.
"Lying in a Vegetative State of Being...
"Not?"
"Lord God, is this My last Shot?"
"My final finale?"
"Is this all that's left of Me?"
"Look!"
"They have all kinds of tubes hooked up to Me?" ...
"I can't remember anything
Can't tell if this is true or dream
Deep down inside I feel the scream
This terrible silence stops me
Now that the world is through with me
I'm waking up, I cannot see
That there's not much left of me
Nothing is real but pain now
Hold my breath as I wish for death
Oh please, God, wake me
Back in the womb it's much too real
In pumps life that I must feel
But can't look forward to reveal
Look to the time when I'll live
Fed through the tube that sticks in me
Just like an antique novelty
Tied to machines that make me be
Cut this life off from me
Hold my breath as I wish for death
Oh please, God, wake me
Now the world is gone, I'm just one
Oh God, help me Hold my breath as I wish for death
Oh please, God, help me
Darkness
Imprisoning me
All that I see
Absolute horror
I cannot live
I cannot die
Trapped in myself
Body my holding cell
Car crash
Has taken my sight
Taken my speech
Taken my hearing
Taken my arms
Taken my legs
Taken my soul
Left me with life in hell" ~ Metallica's "One", with slight alterations.
I sincerely hope that one day God will heal your pain.
~Dean
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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"Now as My Body rests in that bed."
"That Horrible bed!" ... good metaphor used here in relation to a grave. Very emotive.
"Lying in a Vegetative State of Being...
"Not?"
"Lord God, is this My last Shot?"
"My final finale?"
"Is this all that's left of Me?"
"Look!"
"They have all kinds of tubes hooked up to Me?" ...
"I can't remember anything
Can't tell if this is true or dream
Deep down inside I feel the scream
This terrible silence stops me
Now that the world is through with me
I'm waking up, I cannot see
That there's not much left of me
Nothing is real but pain now
Hold my breath as I wish for death
Oh please, God, wake me
Back in the womb it's much too real
In pumps life that I must feel
But can't look forward to reveal
Look to the time when I'll live
Fed through the tube that sticks in me
Just like an antique novelty
Tied to machines that make me be
Cut this life off from me
Hold my breath as I wish for death
Oh please, God, wake me
Now the world is gone, I'm just one
Oh God, help me Hold my breath as I wish for death
Oh please, God, help me
Darkness
Imprisoning me
All that I see
Absolute horror
I cannot live
I cannot die
Trapped in myself
Body my holding cell
Car crash
Has taken my sight
Taken my speech
Taken my hearing
Taken my arms
Taken my legs
Taken my soul
Left me with life in hell" ~ Metallica's "One", with slight alterations.
I sincerely hope that one day God will heal your pain.
~Dean
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Can a rubber band once broken be mended again Kenna tweet from a tree snapped from a branch be reattached Kenna song sung and created on it records disc again be played Without a lisp of course not thanks for this kind thoughts and review dr. Ricci 1024
Comment from mermaids
I like how this poem is written from Jason's viewpoint. When he is in the room, hooked up to tubes, he sees the effect of his death on his family. You show in your poem the ripple effect of losing someone you love, the people around him suffer. Excellent poem that reflects real life.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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I like how this poem is written from Jason's viewpoint. When he is in the room, hooked up to tubes, he sees the effect of his death on his family. You show in your poem the ripple effect of losing someone you love, the people around him suffer. Excellent poem that reflects real life.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Hard but too real. My Dear
Ricky....
Comment from robyn corum
Ricky,
Bless your sweet soul, Ricky, but you can drive yourself crazy trying to figure out what your son may have been thinking and feeling in those last days/hours/minutes. I hope you finally find some peace. Thanks
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Ricky,
Bless your sweet soul, Ricky, but you can drive yourself crazy trying to figure out what your son may have been thinking and feeling in those last days/hours/minutes. I hope you finally find some peace. Thanks
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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I hope so thanks for your kind words Robin there's always talk to Ricky 1024
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Keep these coming dear friend and keep telling others about the tissue donation which is a great way to pay tribute to a memory
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Keep these coming dear friend and keep telling others about the tissue donation which is a great way to pay tribute to a memory
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Barbara this site has been only given a small taste of my abilities I've written 90% more and it's all stored at home and over 700 books hundreds of thousands of poems are all waiting some day for me to publishing and when I do this world will realize why I consider myself two and two who's who's the greatest right on this planet ever talk to Ricky 1024
Comment from royowen
It seems every day some poor innocent gets killed by some half-witted dropkick. The dropkick survives, and some poor soul, generally apprentice is left to "carry the can" of suffering, while the perpetrator gets off Scott free, but then I don't really think they really do! And I don't think anyone truly gets over it! Well done, as usual, beautifully written, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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It seems every day some poor innocent gets killed by some half-witted dropkick. The dropkick survives, and some poor soul, generally apprentice is left to "carry the can" of suffering, while the perpetrator gets off Scott free, but then I don't really think they really do! And I don't think anyone truly gets over it! Well done, as usual, beautifully written, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Thanks Roy and the driver of the Mustang Brian Cole who only lived one block from the accident and two blocks from my house since his mother was connected to Township administrator Sports apartments at local high school the only punishment the judge said he was able to give him was 8 months loss of license there was no ticket even involved even though between all the lies on the police report through the lawyer Brian is family and then person in charge of investigating even lied to the pole since it only move 7 in can crack he was doing 35 and it was an hour possibly more more speed since the kid never did less then 85MPH.
And, thanks for your review.
Dr Ricky 1024.
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Ah, but God knows, that's worse.
