Comment from Dumbledor

Excellent

Enjoyed this poem a lot. It sums up the mess of what is touted as progress, but is actually, damaging the earth, and the human beings, that inhabit her. Some great images of the natural environment, and the writers obvious love of being out and about in Nature is shown very clearly. Nice use of the Hawaiian term''mauka'', very poetic and musical. Enjoyed.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018

Thank you very much for the kind remarks. I'm tempted to say it's no contest between the city and the bush, yet some of my own offspring prefer the cafe scene to the countryside (where did I go wrong?) Much appreciated :) Craig

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

Nicely done. Your interesting new word is incorporated nicely.
I think your near and not so near rhymes work very well.
Well done and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon

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 Comment Written 18-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018

Thanks, Sharon, for confirming what I hoped - that the rhymes aren't too "off". That's useful knowledge :) Much appreciated - Craig

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Hello CDRichards!

I thoroughly enjoyed your poem. My son moved to the mountains of Colorado for just the reasons you write = very relatable. I read your piece aloud, and it flows very well. No need to worry about your few "near rhymes;" they are just fine.

Best Wishes,
diane

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 Comment Written 18-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018

Thanks you very much, Diane, for the supportive comments. I'm glad to hear the end-rhymes weren't too grating. Well done to your son :) Cheers, Craig