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Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh my goodness, what a tale retold and the personification is very well done. Using the single words at the end, made a great ending strong
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Oh my goodness, what a tale retold and the personification is very well done. Using the single words at the end, made a great ending strong
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Michael. :) You know I do not believe I've ever actually read "Moby Dick". You have personified his voice well in this one but truthfully, it leaves me thinking so what? Where is the passion that this whale must have felt when he was hunted and stalked? Just a thought mate. Good luck. xoxo deborah
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Hi Michael. :) You know I do not believe I've ever actually read "Moby Dick". You have personified his voice well in this one but truthfully, it leaves me thinking so what? Where is the passion that this whale must have felt when he was hunted and stalked? Just a thought mate. Good luck. xoxo deborah
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017
Comment from robyn corum
who is this Ahab
this so-called
and would be captain?
master of floating sticks
and fluttering linens
Michael,
This was a great example of this type of poetry. A worthy piece for all to consider as they compose their own images in poetry. Are you sure you aren't part whale? You seem to understand them really well....
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who is this Ahab
this so-called
and would be captain?
master of floating sticks
and fluttering linens
Michael,
This was a great example of this type of poetry. A worthy piece for all to consider as they compose their own images in poetry. Are you sure you aren't part whale? You seem to understand them really well....
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017
Comment from nordicgirl
This is so entertaining. Moby Dick`s view of the whole deal. I sense a little anti whaling undertone too, am I right? LOVED this. Great work. A really cool idea for your club. I'll have to check out some more. NG
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This is so entertaining. Moby Dick`s view of the whole deal. I sense a little anti whaling undertone too, am I right? LOVED this. Great work. A really cool idea for your club. I'll have to check out some more. NG
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017
Comment from country ranch writer
Moly Dick is pissed because the Captain wants to kill him and tells him to back off or he will regret it. A whale of that magnitude trying to understand a madman!
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Moly Dick is pissed because the Captain wants to kill him and tells him to back off or he will regret it. A whale of that magnitude trying to understand a madman!
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017
Comment from damommy
This is beautifully written. I saw the entire story through Moby Dick's eyes. You made it seem very real. It's sad that gentle creatures are hunted down like this.
I love the presentation.
(I don't think whales have gills)
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This is beautifully written. I saw the entire story through Moby Dick's eyes. You made it seem very real. It's sad that gentle creatures are hunted down like this.
I love the presentation.
(I don't think whales have gills)
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017
Comment from Sasha
It took me nearly two years to read Moby Dick, but I view it as one of the best books I have read. Your personification of Moby Dick is excellent and I enjoyed how you presented the story from his POV. This is a superb submission for the in the Fabulous Free Versers Club challenge.
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It took me nearly two years to read Moby Dick, but I view it as one of the best books I have read. Your personification of Moby Dick is excellent and I enjoyed how you presented the story from his POV. This is a superb submission for the in the Fabulous Free Versers Club challenge.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017
Comment from robina1978
I review this a second time as the first one got lost, my fault. I think the picture and subject you chose are original as we all know Moby Dick. Moby Dick tends to be peaceful, unless challenged. Then he will fight. War id there. You changed the story quite a bit. The legendary Davey Jones lies at the bottom of the sea-your legend drowned. Lots of alliteration and nice layout..
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I review this a second time as the first one got lost, my fault. I think the picture and subject you chose are original as we all know Moby Dick. Moby Dick tends to be peaceful, unless challenged. Then he will fight. War id there. You changed the story quite a bit. The legendary Davey Jones lies at the bottom of the sea-your legend drowned. Lots of alliteration and nice layout..
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017
Comment from Dean Kuch
According to Ishmael, the narrator of Moby Dick, Captain Ahab became obsessed with finding and killing this great white whale after it took his leg from him in an earlier encounter. As far as Ahab is concerned, Moby Dick is an infamous and dangerous threat to seamen, considered by Ahab as the incarnation of evil and a fated nemesis.
You tell us the objective of this driven and obsessed man through the eyes of the Great White Whale himself. While MD would like nothing better than to live in peace and harmony with those who do not wish to do him or his kind any harm, with the crew of the Pequod, it's just not possible.
Nice write, Michael.
~Dean
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According to Ishmael, the narrator of Moby Dick, Captain Ahab became obsessed with finding and killing this great white whale after it took his leg from him in an earlier encounter. As far as Ahab is concerned, Moby Dick is an infamous and dangerous threat to seamen, considered by Ahab as the incarnation of evil and a fated nemesis.
You tell us the objective of this driven and obsessed man through the eyes of the Great White Whale himself. While MD would like nothing better than to live in peace and harmony with those who do not wish to do him or his kind any harm, with the crew of the Pequod, it's just not possible.
Nice write, Michael.
~Dean
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Michael;
Thank you for sharing your poetic interpretation of how Moby Dick felt to be chased and hunted. I imagine that he was pretty mad, and the fate of the hunter was totally in his hands - so to speak.
I loved the feeling of this free verse and I admire your abilities to make the verse flow with a wonderful rhythm,
~patty~
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Hi, Michael;
Thank you for sharing your poetic interpretation of how Moby Dick felt to be chased and hunted. I imagine that he was pretty mad, and the fate of the hunter was totally in his hands - so to speak.
I loved the feeling of this free verse and I admire your abilities to make the verse flow with a wonderful rhythm,
~patty~
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017