Mushroom Circles
ABAB quatrains68 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very intriguing image.
-Well penned poem, Tony, that
combines the mushrooms with
the faerie folk and fey.
-The progression and flow of the poem is excellent.
-Good imagery, rhyme, and alliteration:
"Their dormancy of dreams undone by dance"
"All those who enter in are trapped by fey"
-I don't know if you are familiar with W.J.Debi's story
"The Piper." I am learning about the faerie folk and fey.
It is written very well and she gives background for each chapter.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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-Very intriguing image.
-Well penned poem, Tony, that
combines the mushrooms with
the faerie folk and fey.
-The progression and flow of the poem is excellent.
-Good imagery, rhyme, and alliteration:
"Their dormancy of dreams undone by dance"
"All those who enter in are trapped by fey"
-I don't know if you are familiar with W.J.Debi's story
"The Piper." I am learning about the faerie folk and fey.
It is written very well and she gives background for each chapter.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much for this six star award and for the tip about WJ's story, Pam. I must have a look at it. Best wishes, Tony
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You are welcome for the stars and the tip.
Comment from dragonpoet
I like this nod to Celtic folklore/pagan religion. It is good that you supply a magic reason for this circle of mushrooms and explain what happens in a fairy circle.
I have found the if you remove and tree and its stump that mushrooms grow around where the stump was for a few years.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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I like this nod to Celtic folklore/pagan religion. It is good that you supply a magic reason for this circle of mushrooms and explain what happens in a fairy circle.
I have found the if you remove and tree and its stump that mushrooms grow around where the stump was for a few years.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, Joan, for your review and the six star award. Much appreciated. I didn't know that about tree stumps. Interesting! Best wishes, Tony
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You're very welcome.
Joan
Comment from gsuarez
I love the element of mysticism in your writing, "Beware all those who step within this ring." Rhyme and rhythm were also very much on point.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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I love the element of mysticism in your writing, "Beware all those who step within this ring." Rhyme and rhythm were also very much on point.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, gsuarez, for your review and comment about the mysticism. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from estory
I think this form is perfect for your theme. the rhymed quatrains give it that dance movement of repeating steps. The language is nicely stitched in the meter, and the pastoral romantic images really capture that sense of magic, the mystery of the moment of young love. The curtain's drawn. lovely ending. Sensual image in the mushrooms. nice job constructing this. estory
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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I think this form is perfect for your theme. the rhymed quatrains give it that dance movement of repeating steps. The language is nicely stitched in the meter, and the pastoral romantic images really capture that sense of magic, the mystery of the moment of young love. The curtain's drawn. lovely ending. Sensual image in the mushrooms. nice job constructing this. estory
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, estory, for your review and comments about the dance rhythm and romantic imagery. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Halfree
Like the poem but had some probs with the use of lambent, suspect that might have driven some readers to the dictionary. All in all, nice poem. The last verse, masterful and an excellent closing. Still debating between 5 and 6...lambent thing keeps popping into my mind.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Like the poem but had some probs with the use of lambent, suspect that might have driven some readers to the dictionary. All in all, nice poem. The last verse, masterful and an excellent closing. Still debating between 5 and 6...lambent thing keeps popping into my mind.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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I appreciate your review and kind words. I thought lambent, gleaming or flickering with a soft radiance, an apt description of leaves at or shortly after dawn with the sunlight playing on them. Still, as you say, not a particularly common word these days. Best wishes, Tony.
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Do like the poem...lambent and all.
Comment from Survivor48
In all honesty, ABAB rhyming poem are hard for me, but I am very good at AA BB poem. I give you credit for having excellent flow with this type of rhyming poems. overall, exceptional job!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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In all honesty, ABAB rhyming poem are hard for me, but I am very good at AA BB poem. I give you credit for having excellent flow with this type of rhyming poems. overall, exceptional job!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Many thanks for your kind words. Most affirming and appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
An excellent poem as always, Tony. Wonderful abab rhymes as well. I love the 2 short sentences in the last line. They bring the poem to a wonderful close~Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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An excellent poem as always, Tony. Wonderful abab rhymes as well. I love the 2 short sentences in the last line. They bring the poem to a wonderful close~Debbie
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, Debbie, for your kind words and comment about the closing lines. Most affirming and appreciated. Best wishes, Tony - Edit Reply
Comment from Marvin Calloway
I always wondered about those mushrooms-in-the-round. Are they poisonous? I wonder if they cause hallucinations.
You've accurately described those I find in my front yard.
Marv
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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I always wondered about those mushrooms-in-the-round. Are they poisonous? I wonder if they cause hallucinations.
You've accurately described those I find in my front yard.
Marv
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, Marvin, for your kind words. Most affirming and appreciated. I think that several different kinds of fungi grow in rings, some edible and some not so. I imagine that eating them is more dangerous than stepping inside the circle! Best wishes, Tony - Edit Reply
Comment from country ranch writer
Beware of all mushrooms many are deadly and cause much pain and death if one par takes in the eating or drinking of the liquor of the beast.it is death for shore
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Beware of all mushrooms many are deadly and cause much pain and death if one par takes in the eating or drinking of the liquor of the beast.it is death for shore
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, CRW, for your review and comments. I think that several different kinds of fungi grow in rings, some edible and some not so. I imagine that eating them is more dangerous than stepping inside the circle! Best wishes, Tony
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Thanks for you kind support
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The magic of mushrooms and the power of the witching hour! A great fantasy write filled with mystery of folklore, another superb write, best wishes, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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The magic of mushrooms and the power of the witching hour! A great fantasy write filled with mystery of folklore, another superb write, best wishes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, Dolly, for your kind words. Most affirming and appreciated. I think that several different kinds of fungi grow in rings, some edible and some not so. I imagine that eating them is more dangerous than stepping inside the circle! Best wishes, Tony