Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
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Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Dean. Some grand alliterations in this one and sound thoughts too. I've personally been on the back side of a vicious tongue. Hurts. really. Hurts. Great write my friend good luck. xoox Kiwi
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
Hi Dean. Some grand alliterations in this one and sound thoughts too. I've personally been on the back side of a vicious tongue. Hurts. really. Hurts. Great write my friend good luck. xoox Kiwi
Comment Written 29-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much for reading, Deborah.
I sincerely appreciate you weighing in with your thoughts and opinions on this haiku.
Take care,
~Dean :}
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Hello Dean, okay now I see what Gert was referring to when she mentioned you in her post about a harsh tongue.
This post is very effective in expressing the results of verbal abuse, especially to a child. I know that this kind of abuse hits like stone and definitely it leaves scars. I really appreciated the picture that you used. It shows us that harsh words rip and tear away, deeply in children and these are scars not usually visible but don't really go away. This kind of abuse can make you or break you so your post is a very important and strong message. Usually the abusers don't know and really don't care about what they are really doing to their victims.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
Hello Dean, okay now I see what Gert was referring to when she mentioned you in her post about a harsh tongue.
This post is very effective in expressing the results of verbal abuse, especially to a child. I know that this kind of abuse hits like stone and definitely it leaves scars. I really appreciated the picture that you used. It shows us that harsh words rip and tear away, deeply in children and these are scars not usually visible but don't really go away. This kind of abuse can make you or break you so your post is a very important and strong message. Usually the abusers don't know and really don't care about what they are really doing to their victims.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much for reading, Tier V. King.
I sincerely appreciate you weighing in with your thoughts and opinions on this haiku.
Take care,
~Dean :}
Comment from thonnigford09
Dean thx. I have forgotten to always be conscientious of thought and speech. I still feel the pain of words i may have spoken in vain. Nice artwork. I would recommend this. Theresa
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
Dean thx. I have forgotten to always be conscientious of thought and speech. I still feel the pain of words i may have spoken in vain. Nice artwork. I would recommend this. Theresa
Comment Written 29-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much for reading, Teresa, and for the six stars as well..
I very much appreciate you weighing in with your thoughts and opinions on this.
Take care,
~Dean :}
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Thx dean take care also
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Will do. :)
Comment from write hand blue
Nicely worded with eye catching detail. So true as well.
These kinds of thoughts shouldn't be expressed in words. I've had experience of this on the receiving end, as I'm sure most of us have. The effects can be lasting, as your poem indicates. Well presented in your unique way... ~Mel~
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
Nicely worded with eye catching detail. So true as well.
These kinds of thoughts shouldn't be expressed in words. I've had experience of this on the receiving end, as I'm sure most of us have. The effects can be lasting, as your poem indicates. Well presented in your unique way... ~Mel~
Comment Written 29-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much for reading, Mel.
I sincerely appreciate you weighing in with your thoughts and opinions on this haiku.
Take care,
~Dean :}
Comment from JanPerry
True lines of thinking encapsulated with a bit of gore as always.
A Child recognises the parent as a role model. The child can also scar the parent with nasty replies although the parent always has the upper hand.
Attractive visuals as usual.
Jan ;))
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
True lines of thinking encapsulated with a bit of gore as always.
A Child recognises the parent as a role model. The child can also scar the parent with nasty replies although the parent always has the upper hand.
Attractive visuals as usual.
Jan ;))
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much for reading, Jan.
I sincerely appreciate you weighing in with your thoughts and opinions on this haiku.
Take care,
~Dean :}
Comment from BOO ghost
Holy smokes! Batman. looks like, perhaps you used paint and added that creepy font, right? Erie. Wow! I wil not come out of the cellar for a week. This creeps me to the bone. Words can hurt you. kingo must be winter. Nice alliterations. Worth a six but BOO is short. Can give you a virtual 7, imaginary but is what it is worth. Words cut deep. Bloody. BO-tastic!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
Holy smokes! Batman. looks like, perhaps you used paint and added that creepy font, right? Erie. Wow! I wil not come out of the cellar for a week. This creeps me to the bone. Words can hurt you. kingo must be winter. Nice alliterations. Worth a six but BOO is short. Can give you a virtual 7, imaginary but is what it is worth. Words cut deep. Bloody. BO-tastic!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much for reading my haiku, Boo (hey...that rhymes!).
Yep, MicroSoft's Paint program, along with photobucket, is what I used to create and present this haiku. The sound effects are from YouTube.
I sincerely appreciate you weighing in with your thoughts and opinions on this haiku.
Take care,
~Spooky :}
Comment from Just2Write
So true.
A harsh word spoken without a second thought in a moment of frustration can last a lifetime for the listener. If what you are thinking isn't nice - Then don't give those thoughts a voice. A great message in your Haiku.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
So true.
A harsh word spoken without a second thought in a moment of frustration can last a lifetime for the listener. If what you are thinking isn't nice - Then don't give those thoughts a voice. A great message in your Haiku.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much for reading, Rose, and I hope you're feeling better.
I sincerely appreciate you weighing in with your thoughts and opinions on this haiku.
Take care,
~Dean :}
Comment from Gert sherwood
Alright Dean,
I agree how cruel sharp tongues and leave an intentional wound or horrible scars with a child
I've been there as you said,
left me even today with a frigid feeling.
Gert
Note a poem coming up about cruel words.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
Alright Dean,
I agree how cruel sharp tongues and leave an intentional wound or horrible scars with a child
I've been there as you said,
left me even today with a frigid feeling.
Gert
Note a poem coming up about cruel words.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thanks very much for reading, Gert.
I sincerely appreciate you weighing in with your thoughts and opinions on this haiku.
Take care,
~Dean :}
Comment from Heather Knight
This is so true. I have never agreed with the famous 'sticks and stones will break your bones, but words will never hurt you'.
I like the comparison to the frigid winter wind.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
This is so true. I have never agreed with the famous 'sticks and stones will break your bones, but words will never hurt you'.
I like the comparison to the frigid winter wind.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thank you very much for weighing in on this haiku with your thoughts, Maria. I deeply appreciate the positive feedback.
Take care.
~Dean :}
Comment from estory
The nicely twisted alliterations make this poem. I think it was a great choice for the 'w' sound because you get a sense of someone picking up an ax or something and heaving it, wielding it, over their shoulder. nice one estory
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
The nicely twisted alliterations make this poem. I think it was a great choice for the 'w' sound because you get a sense of someone picking up an ax or something and heaving it, wielding it, over their shoulder. nice one estory
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thank you very much for weighing in on this haiku with your thoughts, estory. I deeply appreciate the positive feedback.
Take care.
~Dean :}