Comment from smbau

Excellent

Awesome story...very descriptively real of both characters and events. Excellent flow of events and finally leaving us in suspense. Read would think that veiled lady is the mother of all... who knows. I like the words choose, easy to read. You connected you story from one event to the other very well.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017

thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I hope you will follow the story to its conclusion. I just posted the last part this morning,

~patty~

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Hello, Patty, :)

I really liked these parts: Their actions had driven her to the lowest of lows. As she had sat in the mental hospital all those years ago, she swore she would never have any interactions with them again (this brings back memories of my ultra-dysfunctional family and the reason why I stay away). It was only out of duty to Jane that she was allowing herself to be in the same room with them again. They were poison to her system."What happened was NOT my fault. The smile on her face was beatific and full of malice.

I have a suggestion. When you switch the thoughts of the characters maybe you could separate it; it gets a little confusing.

A really cool story -- can't wait for the next part.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017

Hi Rasmine; thank you so much for continuing to read along as the saga continues. The conclusion should be posted sometime this weekend,

~patty~

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

Suddenly, all eyes were looking at the front of the room. A murmur could be heard as they all wondered what was going on. Did Kathy have something special planned? As the light dawned in Sylvia's mind, she swore to herself that Kathy knew what was coming...
Oh damn I want to read the rest so much but I know some would moan and say it was too long but they are not committed to reading and reviewing if they don't want to read on..simply fabulous I will wait with anticipation for the next part kindest regards and well done Meia x

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017

Hi Meia; thank you so much for the lovely review. The conclusion should be posted sometime this weekend. My pen is being awfully stubborn this morning!

~patty~

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Exceptional

A well-written chapter, Patty - I'm enjoying the story.
It's so sad that a family can be so unkind to each other - life is far too short to carry on in such a way.
Well done to Kathy for standing up for herself.

I reckon there's to be "a twist in the tail" of this story, Patty - a surprise.

Margaret

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017

Hi Margaret; thank you so much for reviewing this long chapter. I appreciate your words of encouragement.

I think you will enjoy the conclusion, too. I should have it posted sometime this weekend.

I hope you enjoy your weekend,

~patty~

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes my friend this is very well written I believe I know what the surprise is but I wont spoil it for other readers I have thought it all along I enjoyed well done my friend regards Jill

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017

Hi Jill; thank you so much for the lovely review. I think you may be right about the conclusion. I will be posting the end of the story sometime this weekend - my pen is still struggling,

~patty~

Comment from Lindagail Hall

Excellent

I love this story, and hope you'll publish it, it gets ones heart pumping. I'm struck by the fact that sadly families are toxic towards one and other, I WANT more lol. I love Kathys strength that she's learning she can use to pull these awful sisters to question themselves. To leave it on a cliff top was correct thing to do, don't ever apologise for the length of the episode. I believe we use our instincts and if followed won't let you down. Now I'm left thinking who is this women in the wheelchair, is she a long lost sister the sign of an excellent writer is leaving the reader in suspense you've done a fantastic ob truely one can see the hard work you have put into this chapter as of the previous ones.
Have are at week end relaxing. Loved it.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for this lovely review. I'm glad you are enjoying the saga of the Hamlin family. I just may turn this into a much longer story at some point. It seems that there is so much left to explore!

The conclusion should be posted sometime this weekend.

~patty~

reply by Lindagail Hall on 17-Jun-2017

Can't wait, you should make this into a book I reckon it would sell, and I don't say that for no reason, it's a excellent story I even get into a story within a few pages or I can't read it.
I was thinking about the word room what about Vestble as that's where folks would gather here in uk for funerals etc. You could add eye contact and go into the characters traits just thinking that's all.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Another well-written instalment.

I helped her because neither of you even tried to be there." - you don't need the closing speech marks here as she is still talking in the next paragraph.

Did Kathy have something special planned. - needs a question mark here.

Please don't tell me the mum is still alive... lol

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017

Hi G; thank you so much for continuing to read along with this saga. I appreciate your help with the nits - I have gone back and done the edits.

The conclusion should be posted sometime this weekend - my pen is still struggling,

~patty~

Comment from Sankey

Excellent

This was a great read. Not one spag anywhere. I forget what side of the pond you are on...some of the Americans do not like us saying..."had had": hehe as in the following.She knew she had had the right

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017

thank you so much for continuing to read along. I'm glad you are enjoying the saga of the Hamlin family.

I love using 'had had,' it just hammers home the point!

The conclusion will be posted sometime this weekend,

~patty~

reply by Sankey on 17-Jun-2017

Great work. I have a bit of a rant/poem coming up generated from a damned awful review I had recently. Stay tuned.

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Well, well, well Patty: This chapter of the story was very tasty and interesting. I am so proud of Kathy for standing up to her sister-in laws. They are so petty and their accusations are so childish. It is a god thing that Patty did not back down from them, they would have really enjoyed ruining this day for her.

This stranger that was wheeled in is somewhat obvious. I believe/am guessing that it is Kathy's mother-in-law. I kind-a thought about this at the beginning of your story, "What if this is all a set up by the mother-in-law just to see who would show up at her funeral service and what would happen there."

If it is not her, I will be very surprised so I am eager to read the next part of this story.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017

Hi Tier; thank you so much for continuing to read along with the saga. I'm glad you enjoyed this fourth installment. I think you will like the conclusion - which I plan to post sometime this weekend.

Have a nice weekend yourself!

~patty~

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Maybe Jane is not dead, but just testing the women to see who was sincere and who was a fraud? That would be really fun. LOL! But whatever it is, I can't stand not knowing, so hurry up! :)

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017

Hi Phyllis; thank you so much for continuing to read the saga of the Hamlin family. I'm so glad you have enjoyed it.

The conclusion should be posted sometime this weekend - my pen is still struggling,

~patty~