2017 JAPANESE POETRY
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "haiku (where lilies blossom)"A collection of Japanese poetry
23 total reviews
Comment from Sis Cat
Ah, Gypsy, this is a fine, vivid haiku. I can picture the locusts gathering at a shallow spring among growing lilies. Your satori is ingenious and clever. Your words are well chosen to paint a picture and a mood.
Thank you for sharing your haiku. It provided me with a rest stop for my morning.
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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Ah, Gypsy, this is a fine, vivid haiku. I can picture the locusts gathering at a shallow spring among growing lilies. Your satori is ingenious and clever. Your words are well chosen to paint a picture and a mood.
Thank you for sharing your haiku. It provided me with a rest stop for my morning.
: )
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words. Thank you sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment from Rasmine
I have a memory of when I ran away at sixteen. I was walking on a short bridge, there was a pond where frogs, dragonflies, and locusts plus many other life forms resided. I felt like just a small part of creation.
Thank you, for sharing this.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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I have a memory of when I ran away at sixteen. I was walking on a short bridge, there was a pond where frogs, dragonflies, and locusts plus many other life forms resided. I felt like just a small part of creation.
Thank you, for sharing this.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Oh yes well done again my friend you make haiku look easy but the art is to capture a moment just right and paint the scene with words you done this , is beautiful regards Jill
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Oh yes well done again my friend you make haiku look easy but the art is to capture a moment just right and paint the scene with words you done this , is beautiful regards Jill
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Ric Myworld
Oh, those Lilies on the pond, they've grown so full and spread to cover all the open space. Now, I can't find a spot to place my bait. Childhood memories of a boy on the water's bank. Sometimes it's amazing to me how so few words can dredge up so many thoughts hidden deep beneath the surface of our minds. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Oh, those Lilies on the pond, they've grown so full and spread to cover all the open space. Now, I can't find a spot to place my bait. Childhood memories of a boy on the water's bank. Sometimes it's amazing to me how so few words can dredge up so many thoughts hidden deep beneath the surface of our minds. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I never thought of it this way before. I guess you could say lily pads are kind of like people rest stops in reverse. Instead of stopping at a watering hole, frogs stop at a dry spot.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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I never thought of it this way before. I guess you could say lily pads are kind of like people rest stops in reverse. Instead of stopping at a watering hole, frogs stop at a dry spot.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from MizKat
Hi Gypsy,
The picture of the lilies that you put up are beautiful.
What you wrote about them was interesting too.
Thanks for sharing them with me and others.
Kat
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Hi Gypsy,
The picture of the lilies that you put up are beautiful.
What you wrote about them was interesting too.
Thanks for sharing them with me and others.
Kat
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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thank you
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You're welcome. Kat
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Gypsy Excellent and well composed easy to read with a great Satori rest stop I like this and has all the hallmarks of a well written and thoughtout Haiku Nice Cheers Christine
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Hi Gypsy Excellent and well composed easy to read with a great Satori rest stop I like this and has all the hallmarks of a well written and thoughtout Haiku Nice Cheers Christine
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Cheers,
Gypsy
Comment from Mustang Patty
Thank you so much for sharing your well penned haiku about the blossoms of lilies. Your presentation enhances the words well. Within the lines of the poem, we are reminded to stop and enjoy the scenery.
~patty~
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for sharing your well penned haiku about the blossoms of lilies. Your presentation enhances the words well. Within the lines of the poem, we are reminded to stop and enjoy the scenery.
~patty~
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Grasshopper2
Ah, Gypsy,
A haiku about one of my cousins! Locusts are highly mobile and usually fly with the wind at a speed of about 15 to 20 kilometers per hour (9.3 to 12.4 mph). Swarms can travel 5 to 130 km or more in a day. Locust swarms can vary from less than one square kilometer to several hundred square kilometers with 40 to 80 million individuals per square kilometer. An adult locust can consume its weight (several grams) in fresh food per day. For every million locusts, they eat one ton of food.
A fun read.
Grasshopper
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Ah, Gypsy,
A haiku about one of my cousins! Locusts are highly mobile and usually fly with the wind at a speed of about 15 to 20 kilometers per hour (9.3 to 12.4 mph). Swarms can travel 5 to 130 km or more in a day. Locust swarms can vary from less than one square kilometer to several hundred square kilometers with 40 to 80 million individuals per square kilometer. An adult locust can consume its weight (several grams) in fresh food per day. For every million locusts, they eat one ton of food.
A fun read.
Grasshopper
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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You know a lot about your cousins ... LOL
Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Gypsy Blue Rose, this is a good Haiku poem. Lilies are a beautiful flower and this piece allows for emotion of the reader at the thought of the poor flower getting devoured by hungry locusts...or will they? Are the locusts just resting before their journey onwards leaving lilies left to blossom. The plot thickens....you got me thinking now. Thanks for the thought. ~DD
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Gypsy Blue Rose, this is a good Haiku poem. Lilies are a beautiful flower and this piece allows for emotion of the reader at the thought of the poor flower getting devoured by hungry locusts...or will they? Are the locusts just resting before their journey onwards leaving lilies left to blossom. The plot thickens....you got me thinking now. Thanks for the thought. ~DD
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy