Comment from estory

Excellent

I thought it was a nice whimsical piece, a bit of fun. the last line raised the eyebrows. short and sweet, simple and a nice twist at the end estory

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review and comments for my watermelon haiku, estory. I appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem's satori..
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi IndianaIrish,

I liked the poem that you wrote which was very nice to read. I'm happy that your poem was recognized and also that you received the All Time Best for it.
Thanks for sharing this with us. I loved reading it.

Kat

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review and comments for my watermelon haiku, Kat. I appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem. You're so sweet!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

reply by MizKat on 20-Apr-2017

Hi Karyn,

Your poem was really great and I really enjoyed reading it. I'll be looking for more of your wonderful work.

Kat

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

So many types of haiku. This is also nature though as the kigo would be watermelon (summer). Good 5-8-4 syllable count. I wish you well in the contest.

teresa

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review and comments for my watermelon haiku, Teresa. I appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Hitcher

Excellent

Now those are the teachers we all hoped to get as a children and the ones we hope our own kids get today: ) Another great haiku Indy, the visuals were fun and the memories conjured up... to cool for school, ha ha.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review and comments for my watermelon haiku, Hitch. I appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem's imagery.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from nuthead

Excellent

Your haiku presents a great visual of kids spitting watermelon seeds at a school picnic, nothing new but still a good warm-day thing to do. It's the teacher joining in this gig that sets it apart. Cool. And fun!


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kids watermelon
seed-spitting match at school picnic
teacher joins in

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review and comments for my watermelon haiku, Shirley. I appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem's satori.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Karyn, what a fun haiku you've written here. The setting, itself is the stuff that fun us made of: a school picnic, a bunch of kids, sweaty, full of pride and competitiveness, trying to out seed-spit the world. And the biggest kid of all--or is he a wet-blanket to the kids, the teacher joins in. I like this haiku, Karyn. I think the judges will agree.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review and comments for my watermelon haiku, Jay. I appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the imagery in poem. Most watermelons are seed-free these days...what do the kids spit they can without getting into trouble? LOL
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

reply by Jay Squires on 20-Apr-2017

That little seedless fact could be a whole new, and comic, poem.

Comment from bhogg

Excellent

Being a man of the South, I had to smile. The imagery of spitting watermelon seeds is certainly real to me. Good luck in your contest! Bill

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thank you, Bill, for your kind review and comments for my watermelon haiku. I appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts, and I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for your encouraging response, and I'm pleased it made you smile.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

Hello IndianaIrish, A fun poem. Your haiku is filled with vivid imagery, especially:

seed-spitting match at school picnic
teacher joins in

(Some teachers will always be a child at heart.)

Your poem made me smile. As this is a contest entry, I wish you luck.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thank you, LateBloomer, for your kind review and comments for my watermelon haiku. I appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts, and I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem and its imagery. I'm also pleased it made you smile.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from sheena121

Excellent

An amusing poem which I can imagine happening, one thing however, I think the 3rd line should have 5 syllables and you have 4 as joins is only 1 syllable. Good luck in the contest though.
Best wishes.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thanks for your time to review and share your comments for my watermelon haiku, Sheena. Appreciate your comment regarding the third line's syllable count, but it's okay. Haiku doesn't have to be a strict 5-7-5 syllable count. The rule is 17 or less Syllables. Thanks.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Mame

Excellent

This is a change from the 'usual'. I didn't realize that Haiku doesn't need to be about nature and this is rather like a'breath of fresh air. Great selection of plain words to make a scene vibrant and real.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thank you, Mame, for your kind review and comments for my watermelon haiku. I appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts, and I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for your encouraging response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)