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Comment from apky
You still entertain all it takes, Michael. This indeed made me grin and look back to my own childhood - which was pretty dull and boring and full of rules and protocol and - euk! - Standhaftigkeit (steadfastness)
Told you it was boring, didn't I.
~Apky
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You still entertain all it takes, Michael. This indeed made me grin and look back to my own childhood - which was pretty dull and boring and full of rules and protocol and - euk! - Standhaftigkeit (steadfastness)
Told you it was boring, didn't I.
~Apky
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
Comment from Pantygynt
This certainly covers the topic selected. Nothing could be more of a change than being kidnapped even if it was by your own mother. You have picked up on the main feature of film, that it is the picture not the script that carries the story. Consequently, unlike a theatrical script that doesn't work the same way, the stage directions a quite detailed when set alongside the dialogue or rather, the narration.
You have taken this idea to amusing lengths with the accompanying picture of the puppy sleeping peacefully in the cats arms -- a perfect piece of dognapping.
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This certainly covers the topic selected. Nothing could be more of a change than being kidnapped even if it was by your own mother. You have picked up on the main feature of film, that it is the picture not the script that carries the story. Consequently, unlike a theatrical script that doesn't work the same way, the stage directions a quite detailed when set alongside the dialogue or rather, the narration.
You have taken this idea to amusing lengths with the accompanying picture of the puppy sleeping peacefully in the cats arms -- a perfect piece of dognapping.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
Comment from Sankey
Loved this mate. FS is playing up again...Anyway...Mainly because I have read your biography a long time ago. One teeny spag... In your intro....grips of her illness wom[e](a)n.
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Loved this mate. FS is playing up again...Anyway...Mainly because I have read your biography a long time ago. One teeny spag... In your intro....grips of her illness wom[e](a)n.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written script, telling the but g change in your life that made you who you are today. If you should have stayed in the other circumstances you might have been totally different.
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A very well-written script, telling the but g change in your life that made you who you are today. If you should have stayed in the other circumstances you might have been totally different.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Mikey,
You don't get much more of a change than that! I remember a few things from a really early age, too, that I'm told I can't possibly remember. Now I often wonder, since that seed of doubt has been planted, if they are my memories or if I'm remembering the stories I've been told all my life.
I love the dialogue and entertaining qualities of this piece. (Are you sure you aren't up for more than just a few laughs?) The script is well thought out and well executed. Nice job with the backstory and characterization.
I can truly see how this moment in your life has impacted who you are today. Thanks for sharing!
Kim
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Hi Mikey,
You don't get much more of a change than that! I remember a few things from a really early age, too, that I'm told I can't possibly remember. Now I often wonder, since that seed of doubt has been planted, if they are my memories or if I'm remembering the stories I've been told all my life.
I love the dialogue and entertaining qualities of this piece. (Are you sure you aren't up for more than just a few laughs?) The script is well thought out and well executed. Nice job with the backstory and characterization.
I can truly see how this moment in your life has impacted who you are today. Thanks for sharing!
Kim
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
Comment from nordicgirl
Michael,
As mu h as I enjoyed your last script, I have to say, this one is much more compelling. I know this is a true story, but you mske it come toife like you never have before.
This feels like a true glimpse inside. Fascinating. More, more. More!! NG
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Michael,
As mu h as I enjoyed your last script, I have to say, this one is much more compelling. I know this is a true story, but you mske it come toife like you never have before.
This feels like a true glimpse inside. Fascinating. More, more. More!! NG
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
Comment from Kerry Foley
Michael, that was a very cool and interesting Prose. It had a great story. Truly happy your kidnapping turned out to be a blessing in disguise. What was made it so real to visualise was the way you wrote this as a script; It was very detailed to perfection. I enjoyed reading it. I also learned a bit as far as scripts go, Thanks for sharing your story. ~Kerry~
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Michael, that was a very cool and interesting Prose. It had a great story. Truly happy your kidnapping turned out to be a blessing in disguise. What was made it so real to visualise was the way you wrote this as a script; It was very detailed to perfection. I enjoyed reading it. I also learned a bit as far as scripts go, Thanks for sharing your story. ~Kerry~
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
Comment from Dean Kuch
Interesting, Michael. I have a sneaking suspicion that you didn't need to embellish this tale of dysfunctional family life. It is clearly written as if you'd actually lived the experience, which I'm gathering you did.
I noticed just one error while reading the entire script.
I will note it for you below:
Aunt Ann
Hollywood. That's rightwere where we're going ya know. It's right down the street. That boy right there was born to entertain. You're fools if you don't take advantage of that.
A colorful, sometimes cantankerous cast of characters, with just one tiny mistake.
I'd call that good writing...
~Dean
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Interesting, Michael. I have a sneaking suspicion that you didn't need to embellish this tale of dysfunctional family life. It is clearly written as if you'd actually lived the experience, which I'm gathering you did.
I noticed just one error while reading the entire script.
I will note it for you below:
Aunt Ann
Hollywood. That's right
A colorful, sometimes cantankerous cast of characters, with just one tiny mistake.
I'd call that good writing...
~Dean
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Dean read this script and he did all the different voices... it was awesome.
Excellent script and a very interesting story by the time the end came I wanted more. :( Do you have a complete story buried in your portfolio?
hugs, brother,
Sister Gypsy
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Dean read this script and he did all the different voices... it was awesome.
Excellent script and a very interesting story by the time the end came I wanted more. :( Do you have a complete story buried in your portfolio?
hugs, brother,
Sister Gypsy
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Wow I am loving all the stories I have read so far and this is excellent the way you did a play. Loved the set up and lay out.
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Wow I am loving all the stories I have read so far and this is excellent the way you did a play. Loved the set up and lay out.
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2017