Perennials of War
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Comment from judiverse
Shana not wanting to accept the clothes Anderson provided for her--that must have been difficult for her. She is very firm about wanting to do the right thing. I loved the scene with Anderson becoming so attracted to her that he "takes his eyes off the ball," so to speak. I thought it worked really well, although we don't catch Shana's reaction. She surely would have noticed. Good strategy to change the subject to food. You show Shana as being so overwhelmed about being stalked and intimidated by the Russians that surely is preventing her from considering any romance. judi
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Shana not wanting to accept the clothes Anderson provided for her--that must have been difficult for her. She is very firm about wanting to do the right thing. I loved the scene with Anderson becoming so attracted to her that he "takes his eyes off the ball," so to speak. I thought it worked really well, although we don't catch Shana's reaction. She surely would have noticed. Good strategy to change the subject to food. You show Shana as being so overwhelmed about being stalked and intimidated by the Russians that surely is preventing her from considering any romance. judi
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the generous review.
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You're welcome. Such a wonderful story. judi
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I enjoy the mix of genres you play with you create a much fuller piece this way. I love your writing and find it very addictive. You have immense talent and a gift for writing characters realistically, well done Meia x
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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I enjoy the mix of genres you play with you create a much fuller piece this way. I love your writing and find it very addictive. You have immense talent and a gift for writing characters realistically, well done Meia x
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your very kind words.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Shana tries to talk with Anderson; in a soothing a environment they played and enjoyed; I liked the thematic plot progression and enjoyed the realistic dialogues and a caring ending.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Shana tries to talk with Anderson; in a soothing a environment they played and enjoyed; I liked the thematic plot progression and enjoyed the realistic dialogues and a caring ending.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sasha
I was wondering if Anderson would develop feelings for Shana. You did a great job with this chapter and left the reader wanting to know how Shana feels about Anderson. I am sure that will not develop soon, but his kindness is hard to ignore. I look forward to the next chapter. I didn't see anything that needed fixing or changing.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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I was wondering if Anderson would develop feelings for Shana. You did a great job with this chapter and left the reader wanting to know how Shana feels about Anderson. I am sure that will not develop soon, but his kindness is hard to ignore. I look forward to the next chapter. I didn't see anything that needed fixing or changing.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your kind review. If I get them together too soon, my story ends and I still have a lot to say. LOL
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Of course, you need to progress slowly or, as you say, without the slow progression of their love, you will still have a lot more to write about and
Comment from Ric Myworld
I know it's coming, that Shana and Anderson won't be able to control their attraction. Of course, as I figured, you weren't about to let it happen first time out and without playing it for all it's worth. LOL! Great job, and thanks for another fine chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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I know it's coming, that Shana and Anderson won't be able to control their attraction. Of course, as I figured, you weren't about to let it happen first time out and without playing it for all it's worth. LOL! Great job, and thanks for another fine chapter. :-)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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If it happens, my novel come to an ends. I have plenty more to say. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Hello Barbara,
Anderson has feelings for Shana, but they've a few problems to sort out - a good descriptive chapter, putting the reader there at the scene, which I so enjoyed.
Well-penned, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Hello Barbara,
Anderson has feelings for Shana, but they've a few problems to sort out - a good descriptive chapter, putting the reader there at the scene, which I so enjoyed.
Well-penned, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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It will happen all in good time. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend you left it just as things were warming up you are building the story well and I am enjoying very much cannot wait for the next part regards Jill
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Hello my friend you left it just as things were warming up you are building the story well and I am enjoying very much cannot wait for the next part regards Jill
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Barbara,
Nice extension of the chapter here. Setting out their stalls but Anderson isn't even fooling himself! lol
Turning toward him, Shana said, "You don't need to leave."
"I'm not. I really do have some things I need to attend to." - this exchange rea a little awkwardly. Philip's response would normally be to something like 'You don't need to leave on my account'
"Helen, could you heat our dinners. - should probably have a question mark here.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Hi Barbara,
Nice extension of the chapter here. Setting out their stalls but Anderson isn't even fooling himself! lol
Turning toward him, Shana said, "You don't need to leave."
"I'm not. I really do have some things I need to attend to." - this exchange rea a little awkwardly. Philip's response would normally be to something like 'You don't need to leave on my account'
"Helen, could you heat our dinners. - should probably have a question mark here.
All the best
G
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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I have made the changes. Thank you for the kind review and the catches.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Barbara - having not read this story I am jumping in the deep end here with this post. I would say that it read well, the dialogue was easy and real. The budding attraction wonderful. No issues I could see, just smooth well penned writing that kept me entertained.
Thanks for sharing.
m
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Dear Barbara - having not read this story I am jumping in the deep end here with this post. I would say that it read well, the dialogue was easy and real. The budding attraction wonderful. No issues I could see, just smooth well penned writing that kept me entertained.
Thanks for sharing.
m
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the generous review. I'm happy you took time to read.
Comment from apky
From all the posts I've read of this story, the chapter is my best, possibly because I'm getting into the story finally. I like the way you get the reader to know that Anderson is developing feelings for Shana. It's subtle but unmistakable - the way it should be, in my humble writerly opinion. I'm sure to read the next post.
Apky
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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From all the posts I've read of this story, the chapter is my best, possibly because I'm getting into the story finally. I like the way you get the reader to know that Anderson is developing feelings for Shana. It's subtle but unmistakable - the way it should be, in my humble writerly opinion. I'm sure to read the next post.
Apky
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Thank you. If they get together the story is complete. I like to take things slow. Thank you for the kind review.