Saying Goodbye First Day of School
a poem dedicated to all parents15 total reviews
Comment from ronnie k
This can only bring to mind the word CUTE, a child will lead the way, the assuring shown in this gem says to me over and over CUTE.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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This can only bring to mind the word CUTE, a child will lead the way, the assuring shown in this gem says to me over and over CUTE.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Oh, ronnie, there is no word of praise I detest more, but thanks for sharing.
Comment from Cindy Warren
Yep, it's harder on Mom than it is on kids. My first day of school it didn't even dawn on me that it might be hard for my mother. I learned that when my kids went. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Yep, it's harder on Mom than it is on kids. My first day of school it didn't even dawn on me that it might be hard for my mother. I learned that when my kids went. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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I am delighted you can relate so well to my poem. Thanks for sharing.
Comment from Heidi M
So many parents can relate to this sentiment. Nice job getting it told clearly with the 5-7-5 syllable pattern. So often the children are much better off emotionally than the parent who is sending them!
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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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So many parents can relate to this sentiment. Nice job getting it told clearly with the 5-7-5 syllable pattern. So often the children are much better off emotionally than the parent who is sending them!
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Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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You make some keen observations here. Thank you for sharing my poem and your kind praise.
Comment from rspoet
An excellent senryu for the contest
with exact syllables at 5-7-5
What parent hasn't experienced that moment
though some may be glad
to finally have some peace and quiet lol
Excellent picture to match
Best wishes in the contest
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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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An excellent senryu for the contest
with exact syllables at 5-7-5
What parent hasn't experienced that moment
though some may be glad
to finally have some peace and quiet lol
Excellent picture to match
Best wishes in the contest
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much, rspoet, for sharing my poem and your thoughtful feedback.
Comment from Cedar
This one brought back a few old memories. The object of writing Senryu is to include human emotions, this one certainly does that. Good luck in the contest. Bill
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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This one brought back a few old memories. The object of writing Senryu is to include human emotions, this one certainly does that. Good luck in the contest. Bill
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much, Bill, for your high praise and sensational rating. I was looking through old photographs and one of first day at school brought back all the heartache.