Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Dream Jaunt"a place to gather my poetic forms
46 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, the imagery this evokes is quite stunning, and I was so pleased with just how smoothly this rolled off the tongue. The rhyme scheme is positively delicious too, one I'll have to try sometime. *smile*
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Wow, the imagery this evokes is quite stunning, and I was so pleased with just how smoothly this rolled off the tongue. The rhyme scheme is positively delicious too, one I'll have to try sometime. *smile*
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Hi, Dawn! Thanks for your very kind and thoughtful my poem! ❤️ ❤️
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It was my pleasure. :)
Comment from RGstar
Even without knowing the rhyme scheme, you created good imagery heare. Elements of nature, nicely woven into poetry.
The oicture adds to the mystery and dimension of the write.
Well done.
My best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Even without knowing the rhyme scheme, you created good imagery heare. Elements of nature, nicely woven into poetry.
The oicture adds to the mystery and dimension of the write.
Well done.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Hi RG! Thank you for your very kind review of my poem!
Comment from mbroyles2
This is an excellent poem as we are transported to the land of dream beyond the heavens and the moon.
We get a glimpse of the king of dreams.
Excellent.
Michael
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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This is an excellent poem as we are transported to the land of dream beyond the heavens and the moon.
We get a glimpse of the king of dreams.
Excellent.
Michael
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Thanks for the kind words of review Michael! $
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Dreams can be good and bad. I've had so many bad ones I'd rather just not dream. If you ever want to come and get me I'd love to travel in a dream with you. Great job friend.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Dreams can be good and bad. I've had so many bad ones I'd rather just not dream. If you ever want to come and get me I'd love to travel in a dream with you. Great job friend.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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I'll come get you one of these days!
Comment from MsPetra
I loved your poem. I particularly liked the first stanza. You nailed it with that. I can't think of anything that needs improvement. I have only words of encouragement. Keep writing! I am looking to reading and reviewing more of your work.
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I loved your poem. I particularly liked the first stanza. You nailed it with that. I can't think of anything that needs improvement. I have only words of encouragement. Keep writing! I am looking to reading and reviewing more of your work.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I like this rhyme scheme, it flowed well for this poem, Jeni, and I enjoyed the poem. It flowed and rhymed beautifully as does all you poetry. Well done, my friend. :) Sandra
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I like this rhyme scheme, it flowed well for this poem, Jeni, and I enjoyed the poem. It flowed and rhymed beautifully as does all you poetry. Well done, my friend. :) Sandra
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
Comment from William Ross
Nice, I like the rhyme pattern you used on this poem about dreaming. has good meter, reads well. nicely done. thanks for the share and have a great day.
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Nice, I like the rhyme pattern you used on this poem about dreaming. has good meter, reads well. nicely done. thanks for the share and have a great day.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
Comment from robina1978
Beautiful artwork that complements your poem perfectly. Not many poets use envelope rhyme, but it is a lovely form. I just did not know what jaunt means. About clouds, northern lights. Like the wordplay in our beds that Spring.
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Beautiful artwork that complements your poem perfectly. Not many poets use envelope rhyme, but it is a lovely form. I just did not know what jaunt means. About clouds, northern lights. Like the wordplay in our beds that Spring.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I think you want to end with a period, not comma. This is a delightful poem to read and review. I especially like this stanza, my friend:
Our eyes met sights spectacular ~
illuminated tapestry ~
maids spinning wheels of poetry
spoke in a dream vernacular~Debbie
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I think you want to end with a period, not comma. This is a delightful poem to read and review. I especially like this stanza, my friend:
Our eyes met sights spectacular ~
illuminated tapestry ~
maids spinning wheels of poetry
spoke in a dream vernacular~Debbie
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
Comment from winnona
Another well-written poem. Your words flowed well line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader.Beautiful artwork and background color which completed the piece well.
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Another well-written poem. Your words flowed well line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader.Beautiful artwork and background color which completed the piece well.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
