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Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Love will keep us together"Words to pass on to my children
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Comment from Thomas Bowling
Touching poem. Can someone tell me why young people don't get married anymore? Did we damage them that much? Now they only shack up.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Touching poem. Can someone tell me why young people don't get married anymore? Did we damage them that much? Now they only shack up.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Thank you for your welcome comments in your review of my poem I appreciate it. Mary
Comment from RoostyNester
Your poem of falling in love, was very well done in style and rhyme. I enjoyed reading it and I totally agree with it. Love is everlasting.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Your poem of falling in love, was very well done in style and rhyme. I enjoyed reading it and I totally agree with it. Love is everlasting.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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I am so pleased you like my poem thank you for the review. Mary
Comment from krys123
Hello Mary;
-what you think of this part of your line of your 2nd verse 2nd line: "; this(our) love but has bitten." I just thought it was more directly associated with your love.
-Other than that I thought your poem beautifully written in both context, theme and format. Is your writing and rhythmic skills along with your rhyming adaptations are perfect and being composed excellently well.
-And your picture, by the way congratulations, is so effectively appropriate for enhancing the poem and be relative to the poem's effectiveness in creating the reader's association with your writing which prepares the reader for what is written and also grasps the reader's attention to read the poem.
-Good luck in the contest and take care and have a good one Mary.
Alex
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Hello Mary;
-what you think of this part of your line of your 2nd verse 2nd line: "; this(our) love but has bitten." I just thought it was more directly associated with your love.
-Other than that I thought your poem beautifully written in both context, theme and format. Is your writing and rhythmic skills along with your rhyming adaptations are perfect and being composed excellently well.
-And your picture, by the way congratulations, is so effectively appropriate for enhancing the poem and be relative to the poem's effectiveness in creating the reader's association with your writing which prepares the reader for what is written and also grasps the reader's attention to read the poem.
-Good luck in the contest and take care and have a good one Mary.
Alex
Comment Written 21-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Hi Alex I appreciate your review and suggestions, Mary
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You are very welcome Mary.
Alex
Comment from Bollie
This is a very lovely poem with great emotion and passion. The rhyming is really good and unforced and the syllable count is consistent throughout which allows the poem to flow effortlessly. I did notice a possible typo in the second stanza. Love will keep up (us) together. This is a really nice poem, keep up the good work. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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This is a very lovely poem with great emotion and passion. The rhyming is really good and unforced and the syllable count is consistent throughout which allows the poem to flow effortlessly. I did notice a possible typo in the second stanza. Love will keep up (us) together. This is a really nice poem, keep up the good work. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much for the excellent encouraging review, Mary
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You're very welcome, Mary. Have a wonderful day.
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You're very welcome, Mary. Have a wonderful day.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully. It is structurally solid with smooth, consistent rhyme and meter throughout. You tell the story of your love wonderfully and walk us through its progression over the years. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully. It is structurally solid with smooth, consistent rhyme and meter throughout. You tell the story of your love wonderfully and walk us through its progression over the years. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Thanks Monica I appreciate your review Mary
Comment from RGstar
Lovely tribute, Mary, not only to sacredness of marriage, but also to the one you love and being the right choice. Good to see you writing.
Have a great Sunday.
Best wishes,
RG
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Lovely tribute, Mary, not only to sacredness of marriage, but also to the one you love and being the right choice. Good to see you writing.
Have a great Sunday.
Best wishes,
RG
Comment Written 21-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Thanks for your lovely review and great comments, Mary
Comment from William Ross
Nicely done on the love poem, great rhyming and rhythm has a nice flow when read. great entry on the prompt, should do well, good luck and have a great day.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Nicely done on the love poem, great rhyming and rhythm has a nice flow when read. great entry on the prompt, should do well, good luck and have a great day.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much for your review Mary
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Love will certainly go a long way in keeping couples together as the years go by as this poem depicts.
Should make for a good contest entry for this prompt.
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Love will certainly go a long way in keeping couples together as the years go by as this poem depicts.
Should make for a good contest entry for this prompt.
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Thanks Cody for your encouraging review Mary
Comment from Domino 2
Lovely wedding photo, Mary.
Very sweet love poem incorporating your first 'smitten' meeting, through the marriage, and the special love you wish to continue 'for all time'.
Excellent rhymes.
Cheers, Ray xx
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Lovely wedding photo, Mary.
Very sweet love poem incorporating your first 'smitten' meeting, through the marriage, and the special love you wish to continue 'for all time'.
Excellent rhymes.
Cheers, Ray xx
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2016
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Thanks Ray for your excellent review and your comments about my poem much appreciated Mary