In mine own eyes
Perfectly true (LOL)28 total reviews
Comment from bob cullen
That was a fun read and sadly one we can all relate too. That's why we don't have any mirrors in our house. A blindness to reality is sometimes a blessing.
But the alternative also applies. Once we reach this age we can all afford plastic surgeons.
As poetry, I loved it. The rhyming was great and it entertained by bring a smile to this old face
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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That was a fun read and sadly one we can all relate too. That's why we don't have any mirrors in our house. A blindness to reality is sometimes a blessing.
But the alternative also applies. Once we reach this age we can all afford plastic surgeons.
As poetry, I loved it. The rhyming was great and it entertained by bring a smile to this old face
Comment Written 18-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Hi Bob, i am glad you enjoyed my poem on not being so perfect Nearly LOL No it was all in good fun and I still own a mirror Ha Ha Cheers for your time and review
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Sorry, I thought I had given it five stars. It really was a typographical error. Apologies again
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Sorry, I thought I had given it five stars. It really was a typographical error. Apologies again
Comment from sage17611
This is a nice description of an aging woman and the changes that has invaded her. I think that with age, we all see or feel new things and can't believe these things are happening to us. We are still young in our minds, but the body aches and the mirror say otherwise. This is a well written poem that should do well in the contest, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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This is a nice description of an aging woman and the changes that has invaded her. I think that with age, we all see or feel new things and can't believe these things are happening to us. We are still young in our minds, but the body aches and the mirror say otherwise. This is a well written poem that should do well in the contest, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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Hi sage17611 .My grateful thanks for your time to read and review my poem, a little self indulgent LOL and yes the mirror tells no lies and thank the Lord for Hair dye Ha Ha . Cheers to you and have a lovely day
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Hi sage17611 .My grateful thanks for your time to read and review my poem, a little self indulgent LOL and yes the mirror tells no lies and thank the Lord for Hair dye Ha Ha . Cheers to you and have a lovely day
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Hi sage17611 .My grateful thanks for your time to read and review my poem, a little self indulgent LOL and yes the mirror tells no lies and thank the Lord for Hair dye Ha Ha . Cheers to you and have a lovely day
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Hi sage17611 .My grateful thanks for your time to read and review my poem, a little self indulgent LOL and yes the mirror tells no lies and thank the Lord for Hair dye Ha Ha . Cheers to you and have a lovely day
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Hi sage17611 .My grateful thanks for your time to read and review my poem, a little self indulgent LOL and yes the mirror tells no lies and thank the Lord for Hair dye Ha Ha . Cheers to you and have a lovely day
Comment from winnona
I think you met the challenge of the contest well. the words were well chosen and flowed together combing well to send the message to the reader. It is terrible getting old I look in the mirror and wonder what happened.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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I think you met the challenge of the contest well. the words were well chosen and flowed together combing well to send the message to the reader. It is terrible getting old I look in the mirror and wonder what happened.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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Hi winonna, Many thanks for stopping by to read and review my poem so nicely . Put the morror away LOL Cheers my friend
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Hi winonna, Many thanks for stopping by to read and review my poem so nicely . Put the morror away LOL Cheers my friend
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Hi winonna, Many thanks for stopping by to read and review my poem so nicely . Put the morror away LOL Cheers my friend
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Hi winonna, Many thanks for stopping by to read and review my poem so nicely . Put the morror away LOL Cheers my friend
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Hi winonna, Many thanks for stopping by to read and review my poem so nicely . Put the morror away LOL Cheers my friend
Comment from l.raven
Hey You, LMBO...I love this...every line...sounds like everyone I know...male and female...great rhythm and rhyme sweet girl...and the picture was me...welllllllll...those were the days my friend...LOL... very clever and very well written...love xxoo Linda
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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Hey You, LMBO...I love this...every line...sounds like everyone I know...male and female...great rhythm and rhyme sweet girl...and the picture was me...welllllllll...those were the days my friend...LOL... very clever and very well written...love xxoo Linda
Comment Written 17-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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Hi Linda Thanks for your great review and I am glad you LMBO we would say LMAO so I assume acronyms are used everywhere LOL . Don't you still look like the girl in red , I do Hmmmmm In mine own eyes Ha Ha, Cheers for your support xx
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I try not to offend anyone with my arse...LOL...I mean I like it...but I think I still look like that girl...with my glasses off that is...cheers to you as well...and you are so welcome....love Linda xxoo
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully. The rhyme and meter are solid throughout making for an enjoyable read. I think you covered just about everything that can go to the dog on a woman with age LOL. We have to laugh about it as time is the one thing that can't be stopped for anyone. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully. The rhyme and meter are solid throughout making for an enjoyable read. I think you covered just about everything that can go to the dog on a woman with age LOL. We have to laugh about it as time is the one thing that can't be stopped for anyone. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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Hi Mystic Angel 7777 .Yes only we could stop time I looked good in a bikini Ha Ha ( sad thing is I still wear one love the sun ) Was a fun write and I am pleased that it made you laugh Cheers for your best wishes
Comment from mkflood
lol..oh i can relate..my teeth in the jar? well it is mine and i have the receipt to prove it. as a man my firm butt moved around to my gut. the funny thing is i work on the phone and i do talk to many folks our age and they would make a comment about how they are old and gray and i don't understand. when they find out how old i am i hear comments like "you don't sound that old". i would respond " if you seen my face which look like a roadmap you would think differently" however, in my own mind i still feel young. i can get down into a indian squat and get back up quickly without groaning. this one dude who is 10yrs younger than me talk to others about how Viagra is great. then he turns to me and asked for my opinion. i looked at him and said " i don't know why your asking me. i aint gotta take that stuff..mine dog is just fine. just because I'm old don't mean I'm down for the count. so yeah i do have fun when i pass by some gray hair girls(i live in florida so there is plenty) walking their dog or just getting their exercise and ill hang my head out the window whistle and say "how is it going hot stuff?" some would look at me strange but some will grin. lol. i want to personally thank you for selecting my work. it does work well together and is an honor to have it included with yours. if ya get the time check out any of my music illustrated videos on YouTube.com under the account name mkflood. i make sure that all 800 illustrations and cartoons are available to you writers. many have stories that is started but waiting for a writer to take it from there. course many writers will bounce an idea off of me and i blow their minds ill illustrate what they imagine.. i have worked with writers outside of fan story as well..wink. great job on the story and thanks again.,mkflood
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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lol..oh i can relate..my teeth in the jar? well it is mine and i have the receipt to prove it. as a man my firm butt moved around to my gut. the funny thing is i work on the phone and i do talk to many folks our age and they would make a comment about how they are old and gray and i don't understand. when they find out how old i am i hear comments like "you don't sound that old". i would respond " if you seen my face which look like a roadmap you would think differently" however, in my own mind i still feel young. i can get down into a indian squat and get back up quickly without groaning. this one dude who is 10yrs younger than me talk to others about how Viagra is great. then he turns to me and asked for my opinion. i looked at him and said " i don't know why your asking me. i aint gotta take that stuff..mine dog is just fine. just because I'm old don't mean I'm down for the count. so yeah i do have fun when i pass by some gray hair girls(i live in florida so there is plenty) walking their dog or just getting their exercise and ill hang my head out the window whistle and say "how is it going hot stuff?" some would look at me strange but some will grin. lol. i want to personally thank you for selecting my work. it does work well together and is an honor to have it included with yours. if ya get the time check out any of my music illustrated videos on YouTube.com under the account name mkflood. i make sure that all 800 illustrations and cartoons are available to you writers. many have stories that is started but waiting for a writer to take it from there. course many writers will bounce an idea off of me and i blow their minds ill illustrate what they imagine.. i have worked with writers outside of fan story as well..wink. great job on the story and thanks again.,mkflood
Comment Written 17-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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Hi mkflood. Wow thanks for such a great response and keep driving and whistling. Yes we are only as old as we want to be. I do still wear a bikini and have a 'seniors card ' LOL too bad . As soon as I saw you image I knew this was the one for my tongue in cheek poem. So thanks for putting in on FS so we can use it. Red is my favourite colour also. I still go to gym and try to keep fit occasional bone groan but overall pretty good. Cheers for your information on you site also I appreciate your review Cheers
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I have almost 800 illustrations available to you writers. many are started stories to help those have writers block to continue it on. folks would ask me am I a artist/ nope I would reply, I'm a illustrator and cartoonist. I draw a story that the viewer can immediately understand the concept of the story..you are welcomed to have fair game on any of them..wink
Comment from Pantygynt
"Oh would some power the giftie gie us
To see ourselves as ithers see us"
As Robert Burns once famously wrote. Well it seems that some power has givern you just that gift as you take a pretty long and critical look at yourself in this poem.
Anyway not to worry it appears you are aware of your physical shortcomings and the important thing is you are doing something about it. It is when one lets go and no longer bothers at all that the trouble starts.
Good steady meter here throughout, iambic heptameters! Now I wonder if that is the clue to the identity of this faded beauty.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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"Oh would some power the giftie gie us
To see ourselves as ithers see us"
As Robert Burns once famously wrote. Well it seems that some power has givern you just that gift as you take a pretty long and critical look at yourself in this poem.
Anyway not to worry it appears you are aware of your physical shortcomings and the important thing is you are doing something about it. It is when one lets go and no longer bothers at all that the trouble starts.
Good steady meter here throughout, iambic heptameters! Now I wonder if that is the clue to the identity of this faded beauty.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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Hi Pantygynt. Thank you so much for your review and I do admire Robbie Burns he had a way with words and I am always ready to admit too my failings although I did employ some extra failings seen in many and hope to be forgiven for my little exaggerations. ( I may have a seniors card but still wear a bikini and dont give a hoot LOL) Fun to write and I hope not too faded HaHa Cheers
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Growing old is a great, great gift, one denied to to many. Your words are expressive and the arrangement with the artwork fits well. Thanks for sharing and good luck in this contest.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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Growing old is a great, great gift, one denied to to many. Your words are expressive and the arrangement with the artwork fits well. Thanks for sharing and good luck in this contest.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill
Comment Written 17-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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Hi Bill, yes one must appreciate growing older something not afforded to many so I say make the best of it and I had fun with this one and appreciate the great response so thank you for your time and reciew Cheers
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Hi Bill, yes one must appreciate growing older something not afforded to many so I say make the best of it and I had fun with this one and appreciate the great response so thank you for your time and reciew Cheers
Comment from Heather Knight
This is a hilarious poem full of self-deprecating fun. I have enjoyed reading it very much.
Apart from that the rhyme is perfect and the picture you've chosen very appropriate.
Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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This is a hilarious poem full of self-deprecating fun. I have enjoyed reading it very much.
Apart from that the rhyme is perfect and the picture you've chosen very appropriate.
Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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Hi MJ So glad you liked it I had fun writing it and it is all true weeeel some of it LOL and yes I loved the image too and couldn't go past it , my warped sense of humour haha Cheers for your feedback and good luck wishes
Comment from liz burgoyne
Ha! I can totally relate to your poem. You said it well and put a smile on my face that will last all day. Check the first line of the fourth stanza. I think there may be a typo. Have a great day :)
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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Ha! I can totally relate to your poem. You said it well and put a smile on my face that will last all day. Check the first line of the fourth stanza. I think there may be a typo. Have a great day :)
Comment Written 17-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2016
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Hi Liz and thanks so much for your review and picking up my typo and I have changed it now musn't have had on my glasses LOL Cheers for your help and support. Now its off to bed for me it is 2.15 am and I should have put this ways hours ago but I am enjoying quiet time and not really sleepy yet but it will be morning before I get some sleep so you have a great day also. Cheers