Comment from AnnaLinda

Excellent

Craig,

I thought you were not doing the challenge?
You've got some really impressive rhymes in
this and fantastic imagery as well.

I am now an expert on the beach and so
when I say that you have captured the
atmosphere of the entire beach scene so
very well in this challenging form...you
know you "done good" lol

To answer your question:

"Do white capped walls, the smell of brine,
raise up your heart? They sure lift mine"

YES...each line is so well crafted...congratulations.

Linda

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

I don't recall saying that, Linda. If I did I must have been drunk, or hallucinating - and since I rarely drink... lol

Thanks for the lovely, complimentary review. It's almost as uplifting as a day at the beach :)

Craig

reply by AnnaLinda on 28-May-2016

;)

Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

The salt air hanging in the breeze,
escarpment ringed with green pine trees-
warm summer days that I adore
down at the shore.

escarpment? No wonder it took an hour! Awesome word usage in that second line there above! lol
Great job, Craig... Love it!
I could use a beach vacay!
;)
C

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

50 minutes, to be exact - but I spent ages frigging around with the silly editor (not that you can tell)!

Thanks for the great review, Cat. Grab your towel and sunnies - I'll meet you at Bondi!

:-)

reply by I am Cat on 28-May-2016

Can I put that in my GPS? ;)
Yeah, it took forever for me to find the perfect artwork... ugh. ;)

reply by the author on 28-May-2016

Try it - I'm betting you can ;-)

Comment from create4christ

Excellent

First of all, you picture is gorgeous! Of course, it's perfect for your poem. You follow the octogram structure very well, while still making rhymes and rhythms that are easy to read. Your description of the beach is nicely done. Good job.

Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

Thank you so much for the lovely review. Your kind comments are much appreciated :)

reply by create4christ on 28-May-2016

You're welcome

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

All these wonderful beach poems makes me want to jump on a plane and go to anywhere there is a blue ocean. This is a wonderful write as well. Keep em coming.

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

Thanks for the lovely review :)

reply by foxangie123 on 28-May-2016

Always welcome. Well deserved.

Comment from GoodHearted Woman

Excellent

This poem sure lifts my spirits--the bright yellow does a great job; it's like taking in big gulps of sunshine. I take it this is an octogram--and you had one hour to do it? Wow. I'm doubly impressed. Your rhymes and rhythm are perfect and roll me from one fun line to the next. Makes me feel like I'm there! Really glad I found this one!
GoodHearted Woman

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

Thanks so much GoodHearted Woman, for the lovely review. It's 2 days from winter where I am, and I'm longing for somewhere warm LOL

reply by GoodHearted Woman on 28-May-2016

I'm in Wyoming USA and longing for somewhere warm too! It sure isn't here! Marcia

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

CD,

What a fun and happy poem about the beach and the things you see, feel and experience there! It made my heart happy! The colors, image and font choices were all just icing on the cake. Great work! And under an hour? I hate you.

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

Hahah Robyn! Did you see Steve's - he's claiming 15 minutes - the %^#&*!

I've given up trying to beat the speed freaks, if I can manage it within the hour, I consider it good enough lol
Craig

Comment from enitsalemap

Excellent

This poem is good. This form seems tricky and I am going to try my hand at it soon. I like the rhymes you have chosen. They fit your topic and move your "Story of the beach" along at a good pace. This makes me want to get my towel and head to the ocean.

 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

Well, if that what it makes you want to do, I'll call it a success :)

Thanks for the kind review, much appreciated!

Craig

reply by enitsalemap on 28-May-2016

I'm on my way...thanks

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Well done, CD. The Octogram form looks fine. I stumbled on the iambic in line 9, but just had to read it differently. Good rhymes and a nice tribute to all those beach days we remember so well.

Steve

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 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

Thanks for the kind remarks, Steve. Much appreciated :) Craig

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

I absolutely love your Octogram, Craig. This is perfectly written and the sentiment and imagery returns many nice memories to me.

Super job with this and it's a fine, fine poem.

Nicely done!

Gloria

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 Comment Written 28-May-2016

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reply by the author on 28-May-2016

Wow Gloria, you were so fast! You reviewed it before I'd even had time to post a message it was done LOL

Thank you so much for the lovely comments :)