Comment from Lovinia

Excellent

Hi Craig

So romantic ... your wife/partner is a lucky gal. She must be a gem. :)) Great presentation and you certainly make your message clear ... you ARE ON FIRE!! "burning/scorched/flames/fire raging" provide extra impact making your poems sizzle. I've enjoyed your touches of alliteration and attention to the syllable count.

I've enjoyed your passion this fine sunny autumn day ... I hope the weather is kind to you. Hugs to you and the family and all the goats, alpacas, etc. lol Hugs - Lovi xoxox

 Comment Written 21-May-2016

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reply by the author on 21-May-2016

LOL the family all send you our thanks, bleats, clucks, woofs, etc Lovi :)

As for SWMBO, she's OK, she'll do for now (can you tell she's not reading this as I type?)

It's a gorgeous day here (one of not too many left for a while I'm afraid), so I'm off outside soon to make the most of it and do some painting.

Thanks for the lovely review,
Craig

reply by Lovinia on 22-May-2016

Cluck clucks and meow to you and yours. :))) I can tell ... trade her in when your want new and improved ... (I didn't really say that ... I'm on HER side). Haha! Lovi xoxo

Brr ... it does get chilly out there in the boondocks. Luckily we have a mild winter on the Central Coast ... today is more like spring. I'm imagining oil on canvas, though I guess the house needs painting also... the extension must be finished by now? Either way ... have a good one. Hugs - Lovi xoxo

reply by the author on 22-May-2016

I wish it was oil and canvas :)

reply by Lovinia on 22-May-2016

You could always paint graffiti on the walls ... or perhaps a Mona Lisa on the chimney stack. :)

reply by the author on 22-May-2016

I just paid a small fortune to have the entire place clad, I would be in BIG trouble if I "decorated" it haha

reply by Lovinia on 22-May-2016

LOL Not even a self-portrait? At least you don't have to paint cladding. I hope you used the right insulation ... cold days ahead. Perhaps you could 'paint' the barn? Hee hee!

reply by the author on 22-May-2016

Our insulation is at least three, and up to five levels of cladding. A minimum of vinyl on fibro on weatherboard haha. It's an old house (106 years), and was seriously showing it's age. At least it looks a lot better on the outside now. Guess what's next? lol

reply by Lovinia on 22-May-2016

LOL Now that's keeping up the insulation factor ... I bet it will be a lot warmer this winter. 106 years, my grandmother's house will be 116 years and built by her husband and his dad, a traditional weather board settlers cottage ... gosh my mother slept on an open veranda in the dead of very cold winters. I love the old homes with such history. Unfortunately we should have bought it and didn't years ago and it is in considerable ruin, with the back yard subdivided.

Hmm ... what's next? The house warming? LOL Insulate the chicken house? :) Guest houses for FanStory visitors? You're buying a packet of the new salty caramel Tim Tams to reward yourself? OH MY ... not some little Craigies and SWMBO's???????? YIKES!!!!!!! Good luck with whatever it is ... LOL Hugs Aunty (?) Lovi xoxox

reply by the author on 22-May-2016

LOL... the "little Craigies" range from early 20s to 30, and, since I discovered what caused them a while back, there won't be any more!

However... B&B for Fanstorians... now there's an idea. Oh wait, I think some South Australian beat me to it!

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

All three of your five-seven-five poems for this potlatch challenge are well written, Craig. Each focuses on passion, love, and even torment, which in many instances go hand in hand.
Oh, and there's the theme of fire, of course. Can't neglect to mention that.

 Comment Written 21-May-2016

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reply by the author on 21-May-2016

Indeed they do, Dean, indeed they do.

Many thanks for the kind review.

Craig

Comment from Dr. Nad

Excellent

The Inferno Is a delightful response to This week's challenge: Write a set of 5-7-5 about "fire". you have skillfully used fire as a metaphor in the relationship with your wife. Job well done. Thanks for sharing. May God bless you!

 Comment Written 21-May-2016

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reply by the author on 21-May-2016

Thank you for the lovely comments. Your encouragement is gratefully received :) Craig

reply by Dr. Nad on 22-May-2016

You are most welcome.
Embrace the love from above!

Comment from LisaD123

Excellent

This is a highly effective set of 5-7-5 poems. The imagery is carefully crafted and the theme of 'fire' is originally presented. The use of consonance replicates the harshness of fire. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-May-2016

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reply by the author on 21-May-2016

Thank you Lisa for the lovely review. Your comments are much appreciated :) Craig.

Comment from enitsalemap

Excellent

This love letter would burn a hole in the heart of any red blooded female. It is filled with loads of heat and fire references and follows the 5-7-5 form to perfection. This is a bonefide effort and your talent for words is evident.

 Comment Written 21-May-2016

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reply by the author on 21-May-2016

Thank you for the lovely review, I'm glad you enjoyed my challenge entry. Much appreciated, Craig.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

The fire of the heart can not be extinguished easily unless it was not real from the start. True live will endure anything for keeping the fire burning hot.

 Comment Written 21-May-2016

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reply by the author on 21-May-2016

Thanks Sandra. Indeed, it isn't easy to extinguish :)

Comment from Laurel Legion

Good

The use of fire in the symbolism for your poem sounds like it could imply a number of strong emotions besides longing. Especially with the word "raging," that gives the impression of aggression towards the object of the speaker's affection. Regardless though, the desperation from the poem is palpable in how you constructed this piece. Good job.

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 Comment Written 21-May-2016

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reply by the author on 21-May-2016

Thanks for the kind review, much appreciated.

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

This is lovely, CD :) You gave it a poetic feel, that I seemed to have left out. Oy vay. Romance sure took the theme of fire and made it lovely. I'm jealous I didn't think of this angle. Well done!

 Comment Written 21-May-2016

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reply by the author on 21-May-2016

Thanks, Joy :)

I'm kind of miffed at Gloria for taking the same theme and doing it so much better - but it is what it is!

Comment from jusylee72

Excellent

Fiery love poem. I truly enjoyed it. It is comforting in a blazing way. This format is hard to do but you did it so amazingly well. Judy

 Comment Written 21-May-2016

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reply by the author on 21-May-2016

Thanks, jusylee, for the lovely comments. Craig

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Wonderful suite, Craig. What I find most interesting is that a few of us have gone with love and fire and in my opinion that is the best. Love's flames will not die or be extinguished.

Terrific presentation too. I can feel the heat all the way from over here. :))

Gloria

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 Comment Written 21-May-2016

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reply by the author on 21-May-2016

Thanks so much Gloria. The two (love and fire) seem to fit hand-in-glove somehow, don't they?