Christine's Poems
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Comment from MacMhuirich
Nicely written for the contest, I love that the last word in each line leads to the next line and keeps the poem going round and round, well done. I enjoyed reading your poem, best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Nicely written for the contest, I love that the last word in each line leads to the next line and keeps the poem going round and round, well done. I enjoyed reading your poem, best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Thanks so much John for picking up my intended ending/ beginning for this. I hoped it would work and appreciate your saying so. Also thanks for your review and best wishes and I am pleased you enjoyed this.
Comment from William Ross
A great naani on trust in friendships without trust there is no friendship, no love no togetherness. great thought and write on trust between friends. good luck on this.
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reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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A great naani on trust in friendships without trust there is no friendship, no love no togetherness. great thought and write on trust between friends. good luck on this.
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Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Hi William. apologies if this is a second reply I thought I sent a reply to your review a few minutes ago. sometimes my computer or I Pad does weird things. anyway many thanks for your review and comments and good luck wishes, they arecall very much appreciated
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Comment from schatzling
Part II of my Review.
Since you corrected it almost immediately, I will give you that additional star back. It always pays to double check your work. Like I told my sons....Yes, there is spell check, but even the "wrong" word could be spelled correctly.....Know what I mean?(smile).
Anyway.....here is that additional star.....
I read your Naani.
Since English is my second language, I notice little things right away. The third word in your first line, for example, is missing the letter "d" at the end of it.....Friendship is BASED on.....not BASE on...
I would fix that if I were you....just a friendly suggestion.
Otherwise, your Naani is right on point. Since a Naani is only 20 to 25 words, those words are crucial. That slight error (if in somewhat a larger arena would not matter), in a much smaller arena, if you will, does matter a great deal. That is why there are only four stars instead of 5.
Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Part II of my Review.
Since you corrected it almost immediately, I will give you that additional star back. It always pays to double check your work. Like I told my sons....Yes, there is spell check, but even the "wrong" word could be spelled correctly.....Know what I mean?(smile).
Anyway.....here is that additional star.....
I read your Naani.
Since English is my second language, I notice little things right away. The third word in your first line, for example, is missing the letter "d" at the end of it.....Friendship is BASED on.....not BASE on...
I would fix that if I were you....just a friendly suggestion.
Otherwise, your Naani is right on point. Since a Naani is only 20 to 25 words, those words are crucial. That slight error (if in somewhat a larger arena would not matter), in a much smaller arena, if you will, does matter a great deal. That is why there are only four stars instead of 5.
Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 16-May-2016
reply by the author on 16-May-2016
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Hi schatzling. Thank you so much for your review and for picking up that mistake. my fault for not checking it correctly I did have based but must have misstyped,. so your 4 star is much appreciated anyway. I will correct this right now Cheers and thanks for your good luck
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Hi schatzling. Thank you so much for your review and for picking up that mistake. my fault for not checking it correctly I did have based but must have misstyped,. so your 4 star is much appreciated anyway. I will correct this right now Cheers and thanks for your good luck