Sea Blue Sky
A spring sky canvas for our dreams47 total reviews
Comment from jonathan1
I am starting to love this style of poem. In my limited knowledge I think this is a good example. Well I enjoyed it. Strong imagery, a very captivating piece.
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
I am starting to love this style of poem. In my limited knowledge I think this is a good example. Well I enjoyed it. Strong imagery, a very captivating piece.
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Hi Jonathan,
Your encouraging words are so good to hear. Why don't you try the palindrome or mirror poem. They're more fun to tackle than you might think...
Have a wonderful Sunday,
Senyai
Comment from l.raven
HI Senyai, she can be as calming as the smoothest waters...and be as mad as the highest waves...but yes Spring brings everything back to life...it's beautiful.../very well written...and a beautiful picture...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
HI Senyai, she can be as calming as the smoothest waters...and be as mad as the highest waves...but yes Spring brings everything back to life...it's beautiful.../very well written...and a beautiful picture...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Hey Linda, good to hear from you. Yes, nature is to be respected with her fickle moods :)
Thank you for such encouraging words and kind thoughts.
Have a great Sunday, Senyai
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you are sooooow welcome Senyai...and you have a great evening...xxoo Linda
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a lovely palindrome,one of the best I have seen. A delightful spring poem as well as an excellent contest entry. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
This is a lovely palindrome,one of the best I have seen. A delightful spring poem as well as an excellent contest entry. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Thank you Debbie. You are most kind with your thoughts. Nice review. So appreciated and encouraging.
Senyai
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is a sweet poem of spring and the outdoors written as a palindrome. I wrote one of those but probably wouldn't again because they are so difficult, and seem to incur controversy. Obviously you worked hard on this one as it is not too short.. My very best wishes go with you for the competition, Giddy
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
This is a sweet poem of spring and the outdoors written as a palindrome. I wrote one of those but probably wouldn't again because they are so difficult, and seem to incur controversy. Obviously you worked hard on this one as it is not too short.. My very best wishes go with you for the competition, Giddy
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Thank you, Giddy. Yes, my first palindrome and I still have much to learn about the form. They are fun though and a challenge at the same time.
Thank you for the well wishes and kind words,
Senyai
Comment from Rookette
What a phenomenal job! This is such a difficult (impossible for me) form of poetry to write and you nailed it. Lovely job, articulated beautifully and I also like your author notes. How right you are!! xoLeslie
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
What a phenomenal job! This is such a difficult (impossible for me) form of poetry to write and you nailed it. Lovely job, articulated beautifully and I also like your author notes. How right you are!! xoLeslie
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Thank you, Leslie. I am happy you liked the palindrome. My first. Try one, they are more fun than I thought they would be.
Your excellent review and kind words made my day :)
Senyai
Comment from Berta Dickerson
Senyai,
I love your show of spring. Your words were chosen so carefully I missed the palindrome at first. It was in the centering shape that gave me pause to look again.
Beautiful. Your words speak to hundreds of moments in hundreds of lives.
Berta
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
Senyai,
I love your show of spring. Your words were chosen so carefully I missed the palindrome at first. It was in the centering shape that gave me pause to look again.
Beautiful. Your words speak to hundreds of moments in hundreds of lives.
Berta
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Oh, thank you Berta. Your kind words and review are so encouraging. My first palindrome so I'm learning but still have a long way to go.
Thanks again,
Senyai :)
Comment from poetsteve15
I love it now, it has nice flow to it and it reads easier now.
If I could I would change this to a six. You say you love to write it shows that thought out the poem I say most be in the right place for you. GB
you art work was very good it stayed true to the poem.GB and good luck
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
I love it now, it has nice flow to it and it reads easier now.
If I could I would change this to a six. You say you love to write it shows that thought out the poem I say most be in the right place for you. GB
you art work was very good it stayed true to the poem.GB and good luck
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Hi, Poetsteve. I took your suggestions and deleted the repeated word, "waiting." Thanks for the help. Appreciate the great review.
It does read better now. I would love a second look and your thoughts.
Senyai
Comment from robyn corum
Senyai,
While I really enjoyed the verbiage and imagery in the first part of your poem, I have to admit that the second (backwards) part of your poem did not flow so free and easy for me. It seemed stilted and as if it needed much more work. (sorry!) If I can help offer suggestions, let me know. Good luck in the contest~
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
Senyai,
While I really enjoyed the verbiage and imagery in the first part of your poem, I have to admit that the second (backwards) part of your poem did not flow so free and easy for me. It seemed stilted and as if it needed much more work. (sorry!) If I can help offer suggestions, let me know. Good luck in the contest~
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Thank you, Robyn, for your thoughts and suggestions. I will take a look for possible improvements.
Senyai :)
Comment from sage17611
You have written a very visual, descriptive poem about life under a beautiful view of the sky. Your poem is very well written, and has a nice flow forwards and backwards. The picture depicts the words in the poem nicely. Good job, good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
You have written a very visual, descriptive poem about life under a beautiful view of the sky. Your poem is very well written, and has a nice flow forwards and backwards. The picture depicts the words in the poem nicely. Good job, good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Sage, I appreciate you kind words and thoughts. Excellent review:)
Senyai
Comment from infinityyingyang
I really enjoyed the imagery of the poem. I found that palindromes can be difficult at times but you seemed to get your message and meaning across very nicely. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
I really enjoyed the imagery of the poem. I found that palindromes can be difficult at times but you seemed to get your message and meaning across very nicely. Well done.
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Thank you Infinity, for your thoughts and great review :)
Senyai