Miscellaneous Poems Vol 2
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Maybe not all authors are the best and bring the most perfect work to read. But each one have something to say. If one is arrogant enough to judge another, they should bring sonething more valuable to the table.
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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Maybe not all authors are the best and bring the most perfect work to read. But each one have something to say. If one is arrogant enough to judge another, they should bring sonething more valuable to the table.
Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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Hi Sandra - this piece wasn't trying to be critical of any author on Fanstory. We are all learners of our craft, no matter how seriously or not we take it. Thanks for reviewing :)
Comment from --Turtle.
I read through this arrogance contest entry. Really, really enjoyed it. It has words that are written. Good luck with the contest.
In all seriousness, this piece captured my attention 1st off because of the wit and sarcasm concerning a type of review that boggles my brain. (If everyone followed the logic, no one would ever get a review worth getting... to bother earning all that money to get, for any of the reviews to even mean anything.)
Nice mix throughout the acrostic of seriousness and sarcasm. It worked well on me.
Reviewing takes time, and time's money(,)? you know--
(Not positive about suggesting a comma, but I want to say it's an added modifier that makes more sense with the comma, but that I'm not sure about it having to be there... just sure I kind of wanted it there. especially because it's almost a direct addresment, as well as an unofficial rhetorical question in some ways.)
Gotta run, it's been fun... hope your piece of crap won.
(lol, this was a greatly amusing line. My favorite of this poem.)
Cash flow is the go(al)?, though I'll have you know
(suggesting only for consideration... I give my thoughts as they happen, but don't expect them to have to happen. )
Everybody can tell when you're fluffing.
(I wish! (psst, I don't think everybody can tell... I really, really don't.) I think many might be able to... but Everybody... that's pushing it. Still, the line is effective in the theory that it's pretty obvious. A great way to end this acrostic)
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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I read through this arrogance contest entry. Really, really enjoyed it. It has words that are written. Good luck with the contest.
In all seriousness, this piece captured my attention 1st off because of the wit and sarcasm concerning a type of review that boggles my brain. (If everyone followed the logic, no one would ever get a review worth getting... to bother earning all that money to get, for any of the reviews to even mean anything.)
Nice mix throughout the acrostic of seriousness and sarcasm. It worked well on me.
Reviewing takes time, and time's money(,)? you know--
(Not positive about suggesting a comma, but I want to say it's an added modifier that makes more sense with the comma, but that I'm not sure about it having to be there... just sure I kind of wanted it there. especially because it's almost a direct addresment, as well as an unofficial rhetorical question in some ways.)
Gotta run, it's been fun... hope your piece of crap won.
(lol, this was a greatly amusing line. My favorite of this poem.)
Cash flow is the go(al)?, though I'll have you know
(suggesting only for consideration... I give my thoughts as they happen, but don't expect them to have to happen. )
Everybody can tell when you're fluffing.
(I wish! (psst, I don't think everybody can tell... I really, really don't.) I think many might be able to... but Everybody... that's pushing it. Still, the line is effective in the theory that it's pretty obvious. A great way to end this acrostic)
Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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"Gotta run" is my favorite line too. I think I'll use that for my next review :)
Love your opening of this review, by the way.
Thank you for taking the time to leave some thoughtful comments, this time and every time.
: D
I have to laugh, it was pretty early this morning (that might be a yogi berraism) but I stumbled into reading this acrostic by an odd path. I was peeking at the reviews of someone I was curious about if they were still reviewing with the same questionable phrasing, and this title caught my eye, and I was compelled to click on it.
After I hit send on my own review, I was thinking to myself... it will be interesting to see who wrote this acrostic, the tone is right up my alley, I wonder if ... thought about it for a few seconds and said to myself, Duh!
Love when that happens though.
And because I took the odd path to get to the acrostic, via another's comments, I was able to appreciate a bit of irony along with the enjoyable acrostic.
Comment from William Ross
A good write on arrogance, great job on some of the writers and reviewers on fanstory. their are some pretty arrogant on their writing as well as reviewing. good luck on this, have a good day
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A good write on arrogance, great job on some of the writers and reviewers on fanstory. their are some pretty arrogant on their writing as well as reviewing. good luck on this, have a good day
Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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Thanks, William, for the kind review. All of us can be arrogant at times, I guess. It would be nice to be immune :)
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, that meme sounds like a wonderful idea. Sarcasm has a good use and if there were a font then people wouldn't good enthusiastic words for sarcasm. Having said that I love the sarcasm in this piece.
I think you've risen to the challenge enormously well, and in fact I thought this was even worth reading it's so damned apt.
Best wishes to you in the contest. This is a good one.
Gloria
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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Ha, that meme sounds like a wonderful idea. Sarcasm has a good use and if there were a font then people wouldn't good enthusiastic words for sarcasm. Having said that I love the sarcasm in this piece.
I think you've risen to the challenge enormously well, and in fact I thought this was even worth reading it's so damned apt.
Best wishes to you in the contest. This is a good one.
Gloria
Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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Thank you for the lovely review, and the good wishes, Gloria :)
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi!
Well, this piece will be the talk of the town in the forums. It sounds like every other post in there. My guess is that making your poem Fan Story related will garner a good return in the voting booth. Quite clever. Your rhyme scheme is excellent and works brilliantly.
Good luck in the contest! :)
Kim
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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Hi!
Well, this piece will be the talk of the town in the forums. It sounds like every other post in there. My guess is that making your poem Fan Story related will garner a good return in the voting booth. Quite clever. Your rhyme scheme is excellent and works brilliantly.
Good luck in the contest! :)
Kim
Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 03-May-2016
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Thanks for the lovely review, much appreciated.
Comment from jusylee72
this poem is the essence of Arrogance, You definitely portrayed it and I hope that was you goal. Actually that was a brilliant way to say it. I just hope you are not the person behind the words in real life. I love reviewing. It helps we learn.
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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this poem is the essence of Arrogance, You definitely portrayed it and I hope that was you goal. Actually that was a brilliant way to say it. I just hope you are not the person behind the words in real life. I love reviewing. It helps we learn.
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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There's more than a little tongue-in-cheek intended. I hope I'm not that person too. Thanks for the kind review :)
Comment from mvbrooks
The pacing seems erratic and seems to be a stream-of-consciousness piece of writing. Might be strong if you go back and edit for pacing and for flow of ideas.
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reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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The pacing seems erratic and seems to be a stream-of-consciousness piece of writing. Might be strong if you go back and edit for pacing and for flow of ideas.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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LOL thanks. Do you mean it's the rhyme that's out, or the meter?
Comment from AnnaLinda
Poet,
I "gotta run, it's been fun...hope your piece of crap" WINS
Oh gee...Fluff or what? I like your outspoken piece for this
arrogant acrostic. Gee...whatever was your inspiration?
I like your colorful entry and by goodness, you have a lot
of cents on this...You are quite....mmm not arrogant, but
confident with your message. Good for you.
Well done...there's your basic 5 for you:)
Linda
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Poet,
I "gotta run, it's been fun...hope your piece of crap" WINS
Oh gee...Fluff or what? I like your outspoken piece for this
arrogant acrostic. Gee...whatever was your inspiration?
I like your colorful entry and by goodness, you have a lot
of cents on this...You are quite....mmm not arrogant, but
confident with your message. Good for you.
Well done...there's your basic 5 for you:)
Linda
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Oh what? It was worth at least an 8!!!!
Thanks Linda ;-)
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2 6's a 12...Just for you boldness alone:)
Mystery poet.
Comment from jane.fallon
Excellent. This made me laugh because you did a wonderful job of sounding arrogant. I'm sure that you're not at all arrogant. I especially liked the part about "I hope your piece of crap won" - hahaha lol
I love it. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Excellent. This made me laugh because you did a wonderful job of sounding arrogant. I'm sure that you're not at all arrogant. I especially liked the part about "I hope your piece of crap won" - hahaha lol
I love it. Well done.
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Oh don't be so sure! hehe
Thank you for the lovely review Jane, and the wonderful rating. Very much appreciated!
Comment from Julie Dascoli
This is very cool. I enjoyed the sarcasm too. I was trying to work out if you were talking to me personally lol. Great job. Cheers Julie D.
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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This is very cool. I enjoyed the sarcasm too. I was trying to work out if you were talking to me personally lol. Great job. Cheers Julie D.
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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LOL it's not directed at any one person specifically. Cheers :)
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phew! I was worried. lol just joking. J.D.