Of Poets and Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Quatern: On Writing Poetry"NaPoWriMo 2016 Challenge (30 Poems in April)
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Comment from tfawcus
Your falling line has subtle changes in context throughout which make it a snug fit in the overall shape of the poem. I particularly liked the third variation:
"My pleasure's to write poetry,
revealing secret sides of me."
I'm always a bit uneasy when the article is dropped in front of a noun for what seems like just the fulfillment of scansion, as in 'which springs from well inside of me'. I can see that 'wells' is probably not appropriate. Perhaps 'sprung from a well inside of me' or 'drawn from a well inside of me'.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Your falling line has subtle changes in context throughout which make it a snug fit in the overall shape of the poem. I particularly liked the third variation:
"My pleasure's to write poetry,
revealing secret sides of me."
I'm always a bit uneasy when the article is dropped in front of a noun for what seems like just the fulfillment of scansion, as in 'which springs from well inside of me'. I can see that 'wells' is probably not appropriate. Perhaps 'sprung from a well inside of me' or 'drawn from a well inside of me'.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Hi Tony,
I really appreciate your suggestions on this quatern. My intention with the spring and well is for them both to be allusions to water, as that is the image connection I'm attempting to drive through the poem. I'll take another look :) Thank you for taking the time to read and offer input. Have a wonderful evening.
Kim
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A great informative quatern poem well constructed with good rhyming structure. Undetstandable wording with no hidden messages that need to be analized
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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A great informative quatern poem well constructed with good rhyming structure. Undetstandable wording with no hidden messages that need to be analized
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Hi Sandra!
Thank you so much for the great review. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
Kim
Comment from Leineco
What a wonderful declaration for the midway point in the book!
It is not that we are required - but simply that we love to :-)
Some may rhyme
or synchronize
their drum beats
Some may soar
on lilting winds
or surf
twixt up and down drafts;
some make shapes
and some are quiet sighs
but all have the same intentions
to share the voice
of their inner "I"
:-)
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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What a wonderful declaration for the midway point in the book!
It is not that we are required - but simply that we love to :-)
Some may rhyme
or synchronize
their drum beats
Some may soar
on lilting winds
or surf
twixt up and down drafts;
some make shapes
and some are quiet sighs
but all have the same intentions
to share the voice
of their inner "I"
:-)
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Hi Leineco!
WOW! You reward me with poetry in a review. I love it! :) Is that one of yours? It's a beauty! Thank you for sharing. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
Kim
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your poem very much. I like the awesome picture and color scheme. The colors do not take away from your well chosen words. I like the format for this work. It is fitting [I was going to say it works]. The author notes are very informative. This is a great example, complete with notes, for someone [me] who would like to learn this format.
Good job and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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I enjoyed your poem very much. I like the awesome picture and color scheme. The colors do not take away from your well chosen words. I like the format for this work. It is fitting [I was going to say it works]. The author notes are very informative. This is a great example, complete with notes, for someone [me] who would like to learn this format.
Good job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Hi Janny!
I attempted my first quatern, I think it was in December, or possibly sometime last fall. I have really grown to love this style. :) The trick is to pick a strong repeating line and build around it. Make sure your first word is one that will be easy to lead into from another line when it is the 2nd, 3rd, and 4th line positions in the stanzas, but strong enough to be the first word in the poem. I appreciate all of your fantastic comments.
Kim
Good luck with trying one! I can't wait to see you try one.
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ha ha, I can't wait either. Jan
Comment from reconciled
My Geisler that's another good one there.
Hello Hot Springs...-smile- ...you know your warm showers are the best part of this place. love Michael
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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My Geisler that's another good one there.
Hello Hot Springs...-smile- ...you know your warm showers are the best part of this place. love Michael
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Hi Michael,
Thank you for the warm and enthusiastic review. :) I appreciate you dropping in to 'immerse' yourself in my poetry :)
*Hugs*
Kim
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sorry about Brownie...-headshake-...some cookies aint Girl scouts...-frown-
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Very well constructed quatern.
"Rainbow smiles" "droplets on a page", loved the way you phrased different aspects of the piece.
rhyme and flow were spot on
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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Very well constructed quatern.
"Rainbow smiles" "droplets on a page", loved the way you phrased different aspects of the piece.
rhyme and flow were spot on
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Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Hi Barb,
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. I appreciate the kind comments and notes of particular phrases that worked well for you. :)
Kim
Comment from brownies
No one is stopping you from writing poetry. You have permission. Now write about something with more depth and for the masses. Good job with the verse and rhyme, even though you want to shy away from that :)
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No one is stopping you from writing poetry. You have permission. Now write about something with more depth and for the masses. Good job with the verse and rhyme, even though you want to shy away from that :)
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Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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Hi, I don't think we've met, brownies.
This was actually written for a purpose, and I'll thank you to respect that I'll write about the topics that I wish. I appreciate your time, if not the tone of your comment. Have a nice day.
Kim