Life's Observations and Reflections
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Dreads and Tatts"This is my prologue for the NaPoWriMo 2016 (30 Poe
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Comment from melyuki
Hi there Marijke, another grand poem you've created my friend. Love the story line.. don't judge a book by its cover.. oh so true. The poem flows really well and the rhyming throughout works perfectly. Each stanza paints an image in my mind and I can see that young man so easily through your well chosen words to describe his appearance.. Too bad he didn't have a twin brother to offer you a seat also..
great poem and a pleasure to read.. totally agree with your thoughts Marijke.
Just noted in stanza beginning .. when I got home and settled down... the last line might need a 'to' adding to it.. and the way he'd been kind (to) me.
Going full steam ahead with your observations my friend. looking forward to the next ... lots of excited smiles, hugs mel xxx
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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Hi there Marijke, another grand poem you've created my friend. Love the story line.. don't judge a book by its cover.. oh so true. The poem flows really well and the rhyming throughout works perfectly. Each stanza paints an image in my mind and I can see that young man so easily through your well chosen words to describe his appearance.. Too bad he didn't have a twin brother to offer you a seat also..
great poem and a pleasure to read.. totally agree with your thoughts Marijke.
Just noted in stanza beginning .. when I got home and settled down... the last line might need a 'to' adding to it.. and the way he'd been kind (to) me.
Going full steam ahead with your observations my friend. looking forward to the next ... lots of excited smiles, hugs mel xxx
Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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Hi Mel. Thank you for your great support and your encouraging and supportive comments, and your generous and kind review and ratings. You, never thought top look for a twin brother.. Thanks again, Mel, and I look forward to your next work of art. Warmest regards and best wishes, with miles of happy smiles.... Marijke :o) xxxx
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your poem. The lines flowed smoothly, and the story and message are super. I liked the use of rhyme, too. Your picture is perfect for your words. Together the picture and words make an enjoyable read of how we should all look past outward appearances and be more compassionate to each other. Good job and thanks for sharing and caring. The young man would be proud you wrote this after your shared experience.
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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I enjoyed your poem. The lines flowed smoothly, and the story and message are super. I liked the use of rhyme, too. Your picture is perfect for your words. Together the picture and words make an enjoyable read of how we should all look past outward appearances and be more compassionate to each other. Good job and thanks for sharing and caring. The young man would be proud you wrote this after your shared experience.
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Jannypan, for those observations and your generous review and rating. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
That is so true, you never can tell who the really kind and thoughtful are by their appearance. Just for chuckles--I'm in a wheelchair so I always have a seat. I enjoyed your poem, my friend~Debbie
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That is so true, you never can tell who the really kind and thoughtful are by their appearance. Just for chuckles--I'm in a wheelchair so I always have a seat. I enjoyed your poem, my friend~Debbie
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
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Hi Debbie, thank you so much for your kind review and generous rating. There are some benefits to being in a wheelchair, I guess... I like your sense of humour! Warmest regards, Marijke :o)