Falling Off The Edge
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Comment from Ozpium
I think writing in the first person can be a daunting task at times, though that might just be me. I also find it harder to get into as it's not what I'm use to, but I got into this story with no problem at all. Five stars! :D
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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I think writing in the first person can be a daunting task at times, though that might just be me. I also find it harder to get into as it's not what I'm use to, but I got into this story with no problem at all. Five stars! :D
Comment Written 20-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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Thank you so much. Now it is biographical so difficult not to write in first person. All best. UllaTha
Comment from Jackreese
I did not read the first part of this, but I do know from some of your other work the type of relationship you had with your adoptive mother. I applaud you for even in going and for the lawyer to blurt that out in front of all those people is just wrong. I would've caused a scene. Looking forward to the next part.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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I did not read the first part of this, but I do know from some of your other work the type of relationship you had with your adoptive mother. I applaud you for even in going and for the lawyer to blurt that out in front of all those people is just wrong. I would've caused a scene. Looking forward to the next part.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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Thank you so much for a great review and applause to you for remembering about my adoptive mother from my other story. More to follow. All the best. Ulla
Comment from Jeffers63
thank you I am hooked I really need to read the rest of this interesting life story that you are telling so well. I like the language you are using and ease in which us readers can read. The story is personal I know so it makes is more compelling. I hope you have some peace now.
Regards
Jeffers63
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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thank you I am hooked I really need to read the rest of this interesting life story that you are telling so well. I like the language you are using and ease in which us readers can read. The story is personal I know so it makes is more compelling. I hope you have some peace now.
Regards
Jeffers63
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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Thanks a lot for this very kind review. Oh, I have peace thank you. More to follow soon. All the best. Ulla
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Ulla. Let me apologize for missing so much of your b ook. I have been hospitalized with pnuemonia and jsut got back home a few days ago. I am doing my best to catch up.
Your writing continues to be not onlym captivating but well written also.
"while the Vicar's voice droned on, my thoughts went back to a time of late nights when my adoptive mother had called me and repeatedly told me how she regretted that she had ever adopted me. I could hear her calm voice when she said, "listen, you never know what you get, and I see some traits in you that are all your own, but which defy everything I've ever believed in." (I know how you must have felt...believe me)
Some nerve ot the man to discuss the will etc openly at the services. Ugh!
Bless you, my friend. Keep going. Bob
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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Hi, Ulla. Let me apologize for missing so much of your b ook. I have been hospitalized with pnuemonia and jsut got back home a few days ago. I am doing my best to catch up.
Your writing continues to be not onlym captivating but well written also.
"while the Vicar's voice droned on, my thoughts went back to a time of late nights when my adoptive mother had called me and repeatedly told me how she regretted that she had ever adopted me. I could hear her calm voice when she said, "listen, you never know what you get, and I see some traits in you that are all your own, but which defy everything I've ever believed in." (I know how you must have felt...believe me)
Some nerve ot the man to discuss the will etc openly at the services. Ugh!
Bless you, my friend. Keep going. Bob
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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Bob, I am so sorry to hear that you've been in hospital. I hope you are OK again? That's pretty nasty to come down with pneumonia. I was thinking it was a while since I'd seen you posting.
I can imagine you do know what I am talking about with regards to my adoptive mother she was a nasty piece of work. More is to follow soon and looking forward to more of your writing. Please be well. All the best. Ulla:))
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Thanks so much, Ulla. I am coming back slowly but surely. Bob
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I am glad to hear it. Ulla:))
Comment from Curly Girly
Your adoptive mother said cruel things to you that should never have been said to any child. Some real mothers talk to their own children like this and the kids are expected to deal with it and get over it. I can see that comments coming from an adoptive parent are far worse. For one thing, an adopted child is emotionally weaker and in need of far more reassurance than other kids.
If your late mother's lawyer attacked you like that at her funeral--then that was really rude and extremely unkind.
I hope you managed to inherit something. After all the pain, some money would be helpful--better than nothing. And ... I would like to see that nasty lawyer beaten down!
Nicole
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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Your adoptive mother said cruel things to you that should never have been said to any child. Some real mothers talk to their own children like this and the kids are expected to deal with it and get over it. I can see that comments coming from an adoptive parent are far worse. For one thing, an adopted child is emotionally weaker and in need of far more reassurance than other kids.
If your late mother's lawyer attacked you like that at her funeral--then that was really rude and extremely unkind.
I hope you managed to inherit something. After all the pain, some money would be helpful--better than nothing. And ... I would like to see that nasty lawyer beaten down!
Nicole
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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Hi Nicole, Yeah, she was a nasty piece of work my adoptive mother. There was a time she got to me but that is long gone. More to follow soon.I hope all is well at your end. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment from Sasha
Very, very nice work with this one. No confusion, clear imagery and filled with excellent emotional tension. Even though this is only part 2, I am enjoying this immensely. I look forward to the next installment.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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Very, very nice work with this one. No confusion, clear imagery and filled with excellent emotional tension. Even though this is only part 2, I am enjoying this immensely. I look forward to the next installment.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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Thanks a lot Sasha. I am so pleased that you like it. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment from Bryana
Dear Ulla, I have to give you credit that in spite of all the problems you attended the funeral. It's very difficult for me to understand an adoptive mother saying that to a child. She probably didn't adopt you for love, maybe for tax reasons.
Have a wonderful weekend my friend.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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Dear Ulla, I have to give you credit that in spite of all the problems you attended the funeral. It's very difficult for me to understand an adoptive mother saying that to a child. She probably didn't adopt you for love, maybe for tax reasons.
Have a wonderful weekend my friend.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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Thank you so much, Bryana. She was indeed something else my adoptive mother. Tax didn't come into it. You don;t get rewarded for adopting in Denmark. All the best. Ulla
Comment from Sun
Wow, great story. It is very well-written, I had not seen whether it was fiction or non-fiction before reading it. It makes sense that it is biographical non-fiction, there is so much depth to the character.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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Wow, great story. It is very well-written, I had not seen whether it was fiction or non-fiction before reading it. It makes sense that it is biographical non-fiction, there is so much depth to the character.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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Thank you so much for a great review. all best. Ulla
Comment from Tessa Kay
Great cliffhanger. What a horrible man, shouting this at a funeral. Some people have no sense of decency.
-The small hairs - cut 'small'. Don't think you need the adjective.
-stood on end, (comma) telling me...
-The organ started to fade away, - cut 'started to' (good to cut 'started to' or 'began to' as much as you can and only leave where absolutely necessary. It makes for tighter writing)
-facing the congregation. She looked out towards all of us, - both kind of saying the same. I would leave out 'she looked out towards all of us'
- I faded out not able to listen to the nonsense and my thoughts began to wander. - fading out and thoughts wandering express the same. Cut the first part up to 'my thoughts'?
-congregation, I didn't recognise, - who I didn't recognise..
-voice rang out, (comma) calling my name.
Once you have it all together and send it to a professional editor, this should make for a really good story to publish. Keep up the good work. :)
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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Great cliffhanger. What a horrible man, shouting this at a funeral. Some people have no sense of decency.
-The small hairs - cut 'small'. Don't think you need the adjective.
-stood on end, (comma) telling me...
-The organ started to fade away, - cut 'started to' (good to cut 'started to' or 'began to' as much as you can and only leave where absolutely necessary. It makes for tighter writing)
-facing the congregation. She looked out towards all of us, - both kind of saying the same. I would leave out 'she looked out towards all of us'
- I faded out not able to listen to the nonsense and my thoughts began to wander. - fading out and thoughts wandering express the same. Cut the first part up to 'my thoughts'?
-congregation, I didn't recognise, - who I didn't recognise..
-voice rang out, (comma) calling my name.
Once you have it all together and send it to a professional editor, this should make for a really good story to publish. Keep up the good work. :)
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
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Hi Tessa, yeah the whole story was something else. Thanks so much for your encouragement. I would love to do that but where do I go? I have no idea how to go about the publishing. Any suggestions? All the best. Ulla:))
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Read Cumbrianlass's post on self-publishing. That'll give you hints. And then it's down to reading up on the internet. Createspace sounds good, but I'm not there yet myself, so I can't speak from experience.
Start with Av's article. :)
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Thanks a lot for this Tessa, I have read the article which is very informative. I am going to bookcase it so I can go back reading. I'm not ready either, far from it, but I like to collect as much info as I can. Ulla:))
Comment from foxangie123
I hope that you don't get sick of me saying what a fantastic authoress you are because it is the factual truth. You have an amazing gift indeed. Much enjoyed dear.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2016
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I hope that you don't get sick of me saying what a fantastic authoress you are because it is the factual truth. You have an amazing gift indeed. Much enjoyed dear.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2016
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Thanks a lot again Angie. No I don't get sick of hearing you saying that, All the best Ulla:))
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I'm glad. It's the truth. Your amazing.