2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "haiku (last light of day)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
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Comment from seaglass
I have often compared a lake's surface to a mirror so this metaphor makes perfect sense to me. The structure in the last line is clever
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I have often compared a lake's surface to a mirror so this metaphor makes perfect sense to me. The structure in the last line is clever
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
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Thank you very much, you are very kind. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my haiku.
Comment from Unspoken94
As I was reading this the third time (I do that for all reads) I tried to
imagine what it must be like to witness this remarkable moment: When
the light begins to darken and the light disappears on the lake with a
two sided mirror. Nice touch in arranging the last line. -Bill
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As I was reading this the third time (I do that for all reads) I tried to
imagine what it must be like to witness this remarkable moment: When
the light begins to darken and the light disappears on the lake with a
two sided mirror. Nice touch in arranging the last line. -Bill
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
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Thank you Bill :) very much, you are very kind. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my haiku.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Some really good imagery in this piece. the denouement in the final line is well realised and fits the piece well.
Nice presentation too.
All the best
GMG
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Hi there,
Some really good imagery in this piece. the denouement in the final line is well realised and fits the piece well.
Nice presentation too.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
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Thank you very much, you are very kind. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my haiku.
Comment from Annette Gulliver
Your haiku describes the scene of the last light of day perfectly, as images are reflected on water, just like a two sided mirror.
Annette
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Your haiku describes the scene of the last light of day perfectly, as images are reflected on water, just like a two sided mirror.
Annette
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
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Hello :) I really appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku-Thank you!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Gypsy,
what a great haiku I love the last line of your haiku very original
two sided mirror.
I see you are writing a number of haiku (s)
Gert
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Hi Gypsy,
what a great haiku I love the last line of your haiku very original
two sided mirror.
I see you are writing a number of haiku (s)
Gert
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
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Hello :) I really appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku-Thank you!
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You are welcome Gypsy
Gert
Comment from MelB
Hi Gypsy, good use of alliteration. Great imagery with cobalt blue lake. I like the different fonts used in two sided mirror. A very nice Haiku.
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Hi Gypsy, good use of alliteration. Great imagery with cobalt blue lake. I like the different fonts used in two sided mirror. A very nice Haiku.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
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Hello :) I really appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku-Thank you!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A sunset reflection on a blue lake is a beautiful sight. It is always beautiful to watch the sun rise or set. A happy new year to you and your family.
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A sunset reflection on a blue lake is a beautiful sight. It is always beautiful to watch the sun rise or set. A happy new year to you and your family.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
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Hello :) I really appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku-Thank you! Happy New Year!
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, MariVal
= Another great haiku.
= I like how you formatted this.
= Makes you almost see the reflection on the water.
= Nicely penned and presented. (*<*)
* HAPPY NEW YEAR - 2016! *
Cheers & Blessings...
Keep Smilin'... Jackie/Jax (*>*)
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Hi, MariVal
= Another great haiku.
= I like how you formatted this.
= Makes you almost see the reflection on the water.
= Nicely penned and presented. (*<*)
* HAPPY NEW YEAR - 2016! *
Cheers & Blessings...
Keep Smilin'... Jackie/Jax (*>*)
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
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Hello :) I really appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku-Thank you!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your haiku. I like the way you wrote the last line with the curving font. Good job with the format. I see no changes. Thanks for sharing.
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I enjoyed your haiku. I like the way you wrote the last line with the curving font. Good job with the format. I see no changes. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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Hello :) I really appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku-Thank you!
Comment from pbroussard209
this is a great haiku, I love the imagery of the water and sunset sky. I hope you had a wonderful Christmas and that the New Year will bring much happiness and love to you.
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this is a great haiku, I love the imagery of the water and sunset sky. I hope you had a wonderful Christmas and that the New Year will bring much happiness and love to you.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
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Hello :) I had a wonderful Christmas with my family, one that I will remember with joy. I really appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku-Thank you!