A Book of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Pirate of Dreams"Assorted poems of love
31 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Yes, I did enjoy your poem. The artwork is perfect. I like how you carried the theme throughout. Good job on the use of 'sailing' word references. I see no changes. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Yes, I did enjoy your poem. The artwork is perfect. I like how you carried the theme throughout. Good job on the use of 'sailing' word references. I see no changes. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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JP, Thanks hon for the read and the review. I am so far behind but I promise I will catch up...sooner or later..lol
Always,
Missy
Comment from scongrove
Beautiful words, Missy. I also loved the photo you posted with this. You definitely have a gift with words. This flowed so perfect and brought images in my head as I read along. Another wonderful piece of art painted with words.
Shana :)
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Beautiful words, Missy. I also loved the photo you posted with this. You definitely have a gift with words. This flowed so perfect and brought images in my head as I read along. Another wonderful piece of art painted with words.
Shana :)
Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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I am smiling reading this Shana. Thanks sug for the fine review :)
Always,
Missy
Comment from Linda Engel
This is pleasing and lovers everywhere will relate. I always enjoy the theme of lovers apart wanting and waiting for the time when they will be re-united. Love is a powerful bond. Well done and you choose a gorgeous photo.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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This is pleasing and lovers everywhere will relate. I always enjoy the theme of lovers apart wanting and waiting for the time when they will be re-united. Love is a powerful bond. Well done and you choose a gorgeous photo.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Thanks Linda for the great review. I thoroughly appreciate your sentiments.
Always,
Missy
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Well, Missy--you had me at "pirate."
You've penned a sentimental and wonderful love poem here. Your writing just keeps getting better.
"Tall dark and mysterious, a pirate of dreams,
You sail through my mind on the breath of my love"
(Wonderfully descriptive and very romantic.)
Perhaps Alejandro took possession of your keyboard? LOL
Well done, Missy!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Well, Missy--you had me at "pirate."
You've penned a sentimental and wonderful love poem here. Your writing just keeps getting better.
"Tall dark and mysterious, a pirate of dreams,
You sail through my mind on the breath of my love"
(Wonderfully descriptive and very romantic.)
Perhaps Alejandro took possession of your keyboard? LOL
Well done, Missy!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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LOL G. I am smilin my ass off now. Thanks for the great review and you may be right about Alejandro. lol.
Missy
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He's a sneaky ghost. Glad you're smiling!
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Hello good friend. Another very passionate and romantic post, I enjoyed. It was well written and shared a beautiful scene.
I would suggest a little larger font, I struggled to read it. Have a great day!
Loyd
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Hello good friend. Another very passionate and romantic post, I enjoyed. It was well written and shared a beautiful scene.
I would suggest a little larger font, I struggled to read it. Have a great day!
Loyd
Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Your wish is my command, kind sir :)
Thank you my sweet friend for this lovely review. I'm delighted to see you back :)
Always,
Missy
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Thanks and you are very welcome, Loyd
Comment from Brian Terry
bit more than
'a lil something'
This is, perhaps, the most enchanting of your work ( at least what I've seen).
The first two stanzas are particulary fine'
Brian
I've got over my block and am able to finish the Katya story at long last
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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bit more than
'a lil something'
This is, perhaps, the most enchanting of your work ( at least what I've seen).
The first two stanzas are particulary fine'
Brian
I've got over my block and am able to finish the Katya story at long last
Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Thank you Brian. This review is a Lil magic for me :)
Always,
Missy
Comment from lightink
Oh my! This is a beautiful metaphor! It's just lovely! The innocent youthful joy of this poem radiates from the lines!
I adored this image:
"pirate of dreams,
You sail through my mind on the breath of my love"
Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Oh my! This is a beautiful metaphor! It's just lovely! The innocent youthful joy of this poem radiates from the lines!
I adored this image:
"pirate of dreams,
You sail through my mind on the breath of my love"
Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Thanks LL for the very encouraging review. I am delighted you found it pleasing :)
Always,
Missy
Comment from TAB_that's me
You always do so well with your love poetry writing Missy. It has feeling as well as imagery. Thanks so for sharing.
Teresa
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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You always do so well with your love poetry writing Missy. It has feeling as well as imagery. Thanks so for sharing.
Teresa
Comment Written 04-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Hey T, I am glad you liked it. Very glad.
Always,
Missy
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Missy. I am so sorry that I haven't been around much lately mate. I am battling an internet connection that won't stay connected for more than two minutes at a time.
I loved this little piece of romance. Beautifully written and so very touching. I've missed your beautiful work. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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G'day Missy. I am so sorry that I haven't been around much lately mate. I am battling an internet connection that won't stay connected for more than two minutes at a time.
I loved this little piece of romance. Beautifully written and so very touching. I've missed your beautiful work. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 04-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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I have missed you, you lil stinker. I hope all is well with you and you are able to get home. I know you miss Your lady and children.
Thanks for stopping by and leaving this lovely review :)
Missy
Comment from mfowler
This is a good one, Missy.
It has an original metaphoric thrust in the pirate of dreams and you utilise it perfectly throughout to communicate your message. I think shorter poems like this get lost if the imagery chops and changes, but here you've used it to your advantage. Really liked:
a pirate of dreams,
You sail through my mind on the breath of my love
Your course straight, heart true
My love the only treasure you seek
There is a crispness in your language for most of the poem as you've not used any unnecessary descriptive words, articles or 'filler phrases'. The final verse is fine but needs a tiny bit of tweaking to be consistent with the rest of the poem.
Suggest:
I gaze at the stars, your compass,
knowing you are on your way home to me
Your journey over
Punctuation is a tiny issue here. Look back at verse 2 and you've done it perfectly. Line 1 ends in a comma as line 2 is a run on thought, but you've not put a full stop at the end of the line. That's perfect in free verse. The end of line implies the end of thought.
I believe the convention is that you either punctuate as you would a normal paragraph or use line breaks as periods. Not 100% sure. Everyone on here seems to have their own thoughts.
Anyways, I think your poem is excellent and the tiny tweaks are purely cosmetic.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
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This is a good one, Missy.
It has an original metaphoric thrust in the pirate of dreams and you utilise it perfectly throughout to communicate your message. I think shorter poems like this get lost if the imagery chops and changes, but here you've used it to your advantage. Really liked:
a pirate of dreams,
You sail through my mind on the breath of my love
Your course straight, heart true
My love the only treasure you seek
There is a crispness in your language for most of the poem as you've not used any unnecessary descriptive words, articles or 'filler phrases'. The final verse is fine but needs a tiny bit of tweaking to be consistent with the rest of the poem.
Suggest:
I gaze at the stars, your compass,
knowing you are on your way home to me
Your journey over
Punctuation is a tiny issue here. Look back at verse 2 and you've done it perfectly. Line 1 ends in a comma as line 2 is a run on thought, but you've not put a full stop at the end of the line. That's perfect in free verse. The end of line implies the end of thought.
I believe the convention is that you either punctuate as you would a normal paragraph or use line breaks as periods. Not 100% sure. Everyone on here seems to have their own thoughts.
Anyways, I think your poem is excellent and the tiny tweaks are purely cosmetic.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
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Done...Thank you, Mark. I really appreciate all the time you take with me :)
Always,
Missy
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Hiya
I think it would pay to watch what the top free versers do with punctuation. A lot of people are as confused as me as the styles vary. When you find the style that suits you then adapt it and make it your own. I'm sure consistency is the secret to it all.
Maybe, I'll take my own advice.
Mark