In Her Lair
Kyrielle Sonnet33 total reviews
Comment from AlteredEgo
I enjoyed this very much. It was fun and refreshing. Its flow was flawless and the imagery appeling. The Dragon queen is in her lair. Very catchey. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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I enjoyed this very much. It was fun and refreshing. Its flow was flawless and the imagery appeling. The Dragon queen is in her lair. Very catchey. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Thank you for such an encouraging review. I like that you found it fun and refreshing, and that you enjoyed the imagery. I apprecaityou stopping by to read and review.
Comment from lightink
I loved this poem! I couldn't help but feel very close to this fierce mother! So much passion, fiery intensity, stark medieval inspiration fills this poem! I enjoyed it a lot!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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I loved this poem! I couldn't help but feel very close to this fierce mother! So much passion, fiery intensity, stark medieval inspiration fills this poem! I enjoyed it a lot!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Ooo, I like your review. I am happy to hear you made a connection with this fiery mother, and that you liked the poem a lot. Thank you so much for the encouragement.
Comment from padumachitta
Hi...what an intereseting style of peotry, thank you for the notes..
I like the poem for the content...I like dragons and reading about them and you gave this one life and personality.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Hi...what an intereseting style of peotry, thank you for the notes..
I like the poem for the content...I like dragons and reading about them and you gave this one life and personality.
padumachitta
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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I am happy to hear you like dragons. I don't know why, but I have always liked dragons, too. I am happy to hear you thought this one had personality. Thank you for the encrougement.
Comment from CD Richards
I really like this kyrielle sonnet. The medieval feel of it is enchanting, and matches so well with the subject matter. The artwork and colour scheme complement it nicely. As far as I can tell, you have followed the form perfectly (not that I'm really familiar with it). Very well done, thanks for sharing.
Craig.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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I really like this kyrielle sonnet. The medieval feel of it is enchanting, and matches so well with the subject matter. The artwork and colour scheme complement it nicely. As far as I can tell, you have followed the form perfectly (not that I'm really familiar with it). Very well done, thanks for sharing.
Craig.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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I am pleased that you liked this sonnet and found it enchanting. I appreciate the encouragement. Thank you.
Comment from Mastery
Very well done, debi. I particularly liked this stanza.. (so powerful)
"An evil monster, she must die.
Thus claims the human battle cry.
Oh, let them come if they so dare.
The dragon queen is in her lair."
Blessings, Bob
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Very well done, debi. I particularly liked this stanza.. (so powerful)
"An evil monster, she must die.
Thus claims the human battle cry.
Oh, let them come if they so dare.
The dragon queen is in her lair."
Blessings, Bob
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Bob. I specs it you dropping by to read and review. Thank you for pointing out the stanza you liked. Powerful, huh? I like that. Debi
Comment from crzypnter
W.J.DebI,
I think that this is a great mid evil theme of a Dragon mother that will protect her eggs to the end. Just as any mother in to day's time would do. I also thought the repeating line helped drive this one home. Great job
God bless
August
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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W.J.DebI,
I think that this is a great mid evil theme of a Dragon mother that will protect her eggs to the end. Just as any mother in to day's time would do. I also thought the repeating line helped drive this one home. Great job
God bless
August
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Thank you for the encrougement comments about the poem. I am happy you liked it.
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi i think I might be right in thinking that there was something very precious in question and the safety of which is very important. Nothing will touch this precious cargo...who ever dare. She is ready to defend her possession. There is a lot of determination and strength here.
This writing is straightforward and says what it intends to say , flowing simply and convincingly to the end.
Just curious, are you receiving my posts.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Hi i think I might be right in thinking that there was something very precious in question and the safety of which is very important. Nothing will touch this precious cargo...who ever dare. She is ready to defend her possession. There is a lot of determination and strength here.
This writing is straightforward and says what it intends to say , flowing simply and convincingly to the end.
Just curious, are you receiving my posts.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Thank you for the great review, Benny Beharry. Yes, you got the point. I like your comment about determination and strength. I appreciate the encouraging comments wovut the writing.
I have been extremely busy at work. One manager quit and another just took another job in the company so I have my line and two others to run. I hope they hire replacements soon! It really cuts into my writing and reviewing time.
Comment from Spitfire
This made me think of how fiercely mothers protect their children, while in the womb and out. Of course, there's nothing evil about that, yet she would kill if she had to.
A lovely flow to this.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015
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This made me think of how fiercely mothers protect their children, while in the womb and out. Of course, there's nothing evil about that, yet she would kill if she had to.
A lovely flow to this.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review, Shari. Yes, mothers are great protectors, and have every right to be. I think you are the only to pick up on that part of the story, or at least the only one to mention it. I appreciate you stopping by to read and give such interesting insights. Debi
Comment from BeasPeas
This is an extremely well written poem. Mysterious, interesting, described well. I particularly like these lines:
"A burst of flame. A wary glance.
No, nothing's left to circumstance."
Marilyn
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015
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This is an extremely well written poem. Mysterious, interesting, described well. I particularly like these lines:
"A burst of flame. A wary glance.
No, nothing's left to circumstance."
Marilyn
Comment Written 12-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015
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Hi Marilyn,
Thank you for the kind comments about the writing. I like your comments: Mysterious, instersting, described well. It is so encouraging. Thanks for pointing out the lines you liked best. It always helps to know wht worked.
Debi
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Great poem, debi. The entire poem works. Good job. Marilyn
Comment from krys123
Debi;
-Much like your palm because of the fact that I felt that they had a medieval feel to it. I thought of night sewer Dragon killers upon their steeds. You pictured the Dragon and her lair very well and the imagery was exquisitely expressive as it was very exponentially, vividly and demonstratively descriptive throughout the imagery.
-Use good use of enjambment throughout the writing.
-Excellent rhyming couplets in your rhyming quatrains that were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm to flow smoothly. Also the fact that your rhyming was neither force nor labor it was also helpful.
-Excellent rhythmic meter of iambic tetrameter And a cadence, timing and tempo that will help when making the reading clear, fluid and very easy.
-I just love the picture that you chosen the fire being gleamed in the dragon's eye. Which made the picture very relative and complementary to your writing.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
PS: a masterfully and wonderfully written piece of poetry.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015
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Debi;
-Much like your palm because of the fact that I felt that they had a medieval feel to it. I thought of night sewer Dragon killers upon their steeds. You pictured the Dragon and her lair very well and the imagery was exquisitely expressive as it was very exponentially, vividly and demonstratively descriptive throughout the imagery.
-Use good use of enjambment throughout the writing.
-Excellent rhyming couplets in your rhyming quatrains that were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm to flow smoothly. Also the fact that your rhyming was neither force nor labor it was also helpful.
-Excellent rhythmic meter of iambic tetrameter And a cadence, timing and tempo that will help when making the reading clear, fluid and very easy.
-I just love the picture that you chosen the fire being gleamed in the dragon's eye. Which made the picture very relative and complementary to your writing.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
PS: a masterfully and wonderfully written piece of poetry.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2015
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Hi Alex,
Thank you for the detailed review and all the encouraging comments. I was going for a medieval feel so I appreciate you mentioning that. It took awhile to find the right artwork, but this one did seem to fit. I liked the dark color and the fire in her eye as well. I especially like the comments in the p.s. section. Thank you!
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You are very welcome my dearest friend