Sundowns
Cradling Grandson Memory38 total reviews
Comment from lalajovanoski
very uniquely written and deep
This is such an amazingly written, finely composed piece. You are very talented. Thank you very much for sharing this, I truly enjoyed reading. I look forward to reading more from you!
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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very uniquely written and deep
This is such an amazingly written, finely composed piece. You are very talented. Thank you very much for sharing this, I truly enjoyed reading. I look forward to reading more from you!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reading my work and understanding my heart. Lovely.
Comment from Alan K Pease
This poem is very touching. I hope this does not mean that you have lost someone in your life. Lovely picture fitted to this poem of free verse.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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This poem is very touching. I hope this does not mean that you have lost someone in your life. Lovely picture fitted to this poem of free verse.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your caring and compassionate review.
Comment from Lynne
Beautiful imagery and the flow was easy.
Breathing in at sundown... the use of repetition was powerful in this work and made it that much more impactful. Wonderful job!
D
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Beautiful imagery and the flow was easy.
Breathing in at sundown... the use of repetition was powerful in this work and made it that much more impactful. Wonderful job!
D
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reading this work.
Comment from DreamtwithClarity
You write with a beautiful flow. I like your impassioned whisk of the virtual pen. You are fierce, graceful, and valiant. You show wisdom, knowledge, understanding, and empathy. I encourage you to keep on writing. Your writing is a blessing to the eyes and a calm to the heart. Thank you - D.O.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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You write with a beautiful flow. I like your impassioned whisk of the virtual pen. You are fierce, graceful, and valiant. You show wisdom, knowledge, understanding, and empathy. I encourage you to keep on writing. Your writing is a blessing to the eyes and a calm to the heart. Thank you - D.O.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for your lovely encouragement to write. Yes, I do, have lots of stuff waiting to be finished; never good enough it seems. Thank you so much.
Comment from wholechild
This is so beautifully poignant. I feel stuck in the moment between past and future, filled with loss but receiving the barest amount of comfort in the sunset and the child voice urging me to go on. Thank you for sharing.
Wholechild
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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This is so beautifully poignant. I feel stuck in the moment between past and future, filled with loss but receiving the barest amount of comfort in the sunset and the child voice urging me to go on. Thank you for sharing.
Wholechild
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reading this work.
Comment from Dawny53
Your writing is beautiful.. so full of emotion.. sadness, yet dealing with it as well.. I especially admire..the one linking my heart to the throbbing in my throat.. this is so well written, because that is exactly what full blown grief feels like.. I've felt it, as have we all.. that throbbing which you know is going to bring on the tears.. I'm so impressed with this poem, and so glad I stopped to read it..
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Your writing is beautiful.. so full of emotion.. sadness, yet dealing with it as well.. I especially admire..the one linking my heart to the throbbing in my throat.. this is so well written, because that is exactly what full blown grief feels like.. I've felt it, as have we all.. that throbbing which you know is going to bring on the tears.. I'm so impressed with this poem, and so glad I stopped to read it..
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Thank you for understanding so well. God be with you!
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Hello Amada. I enjoyed this poem and you took us to a place we have all been before. Many times we wonder how we made it through the day. Nice post, Loyd
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Hello Amada. I enjoyed this poem and you took us to a place we have all been before. Many times we wonder how we made it through the day. Nice post, Loyd
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reading this work.
Comment from Janet Foor
First of all, I'm so sorry for your loss. I can't imagine the sorrow and pain of loosing one of my grandchildren. Having said that, this is a beautiful poem full of lovely imagery and love. Wishing your blessings and peace.
Janet
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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First of all, I'm so sorry for your loss. I can't imagine the sorrow and pain of loosing one of my grandchildren. Having said that, this is a beautiful poem full of lovely imagery and love. Wishing your blessings and peace.
Janet
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your wishes of blessings and peace.
Comment from rjuselius
This is a beautiful piece of poetic art dear Amada! When I developed schizophrenia, the loss of my life and somewhat my freedom is excruciating. But I can't live in fear of what my mind will come up with.
I wish I could change time.
Thank you for sharing this delicate poem!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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This is a beautiful piece of poetic art dear Amada! When I developed schizophrenia, the loss of my life and somewhat my freedom is excruciating. But I can't live in fear of what my mind will come up with.
I wish I could change time.
Thank you for sharing this delicate poem!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Yes, wishing to change time, at least, just a minute of it. Thank you for reading my work.
Comment from krys123
Amada;
-Near and notable alliteration's: /"slow sunshine"/"swift sound comes straight"/"throbbing in my throat"/"slow down sniff in the sunset"/
-Direct and distinct imagery that is exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive throughout the writing.
-I sensed grief and the particularly expectations on growing old: "As I hear a whisper in his unique childlike, grown up voice: "Grandma, be still...slow down, sniff in the sunsets And you will find me." This could be a reference either to mother nature or our Lord being instilled in a sunset.
-I felt that there were many things going on in this poem that I haven't grasped it all.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Amada;
-Near and notable alliteration's: /"slow sunshine"/"swift sound comes straight"/"throbbing in my throat"/"slow down sniff in the sunset"/
-Direct and distinct imagery that is exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive throughout the writing.
-I sensed grief and the particularly expectations on growing old: "As I hear a whisper in his unique childlike, grown up voice: "Grandma, be still...slow down, sniff in the sunsets And you will find me." This could be a reference either to mother nature or our Lord being instilled in a sunset.
-I felt that there were many things going on in this poem that I haven't grasped it all.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reading this one. It refers to my only grandson tragic passing. Anthony, his name. Thank you for reviewing my work, it means a lot to me.
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You are so sincerely welcome, Amada.
Alex