Mister Expert Explorer
50 word story38 total reviews
Comment from Chris Tee
This is definitely the winning story and it is an excellent piece of writing with the climax so suitable for horror. Well done and good luck in the contest.
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This is definitely the winning story and it is an excellent piece of writing with the climax so suitable for horror. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-May-2015
Comment from Spitfire
A lot of competition in this contest, Mikey. Ellipses indicate passage of time, so I think you are using them correctly here. Whew! That narrow escape! But how do you avoid a shark? Punch them in the snout, I've heard.
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A lot of competition in this contest, Mikey. Ellipses indicate passage of time, so I think you are using them correctly here. Whew! That narrow escape! But how do you avoid a shark? Punch them in the snout, I've heard.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from madhatter1977
You pack a lot into this 50 word story, Mikey. It's rich with bad luck for the protagonist. I could look up the definition of irony but have no wish to. Suffice to say your story-telling skills are superb and have improved so much. You're a lot better than me at it! Keep writing and it'd be nice to hear from you, Pete
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You pack a lot into this 50 word story, Mikey. It's rich with bad luck for the protagonist. I could look up the definition of irony but have no wish to. Suffice to say your story-telling skills are superb and have improved so much. You're a lot better than me at it! Keep writing and it'd be nice to hear from you, Pete
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
excellent
a great piece in 50 or less.
Isnt that the way it always happens.
Just when you think you are safe and then the rug gets pulled out from under you
Nice ending
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excellent
a great piece in 50 or less.
Isnt that the way it always happens.
Just when you think you are safe and then the rug gets pulled out from under you
Nice ending
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Just when you think the worst is over, there's always a shark, right, Mikey! LOL! THat's par for the course in my life lately... been attacked from all directions by sharks I thought were loving children.
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Just when you think the worst is over, there's always a shark, right, Mikey! LOL! THat's par for the course in my life lately... been attacked from all directions by sharks I thought were loving children.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from Zinnia48
Great story, Michael--as usual! I continue to admire how much you say with sparse, clipped language. Nothing is left but the essence of whatever story you are telling. Favorite line: Tide is talking now. Onomotopeia at its best! Caroline
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Great story, Michael--as usual! I continue to admire how much you say with sparse, clipped language. Nothing is left but the essence of whatever story you are telling. Favorite line: Tide is talking now. Onomotopeia at its best! Caroline
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from w.j.debi
Oh, my! You are able to get two complete frightening situations into your 50 words. It would be dreadful to drown trapped in a cave. You allow that moment of relief at having escaped, and then BAM here comes the next death threat. This has to be a contender in the contest. Good luck.
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Oh, my! You are able to get two complete frightening situations into your 50 words. It would be dreadful to drown trapped in a cave. You allow that moment of relief at having escaped, and then BAM here comes the next death threat. This has to be a contender in the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from Judy Couch
This follows the prompt well. You managed to tell a very scary story in only 50 words. He's still caught in the rock and now the shark has come. Terrifying.
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This follows the prompt well. You managed to tell a very scary story in only 50 words. He's still caught in the rock and now the shark has come. Terrifying.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from JM
Now this is a thriller!!!! I am terrified of SHARKS and DROWNING. These two powerful words invoke terror. Excellent story. You have my vote.
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Now this is a thriller!!!! I am terrified of SHARKS and DROWNING. These two powerful words invoke terror. Excellent story. You have my vote.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I like your poem. It is funny and clever.
-good rhythm
-action flows smoothly
-descriptive language used
-excellent format and picture
-excellent character development
-held the reader's interest
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I like your poem. It is funny and clever.
-good rhythm
-action flows smoothly
-descriptive language used
-excellent format and picture
-excellent character development
-held the reader's interest
Comment Written 04-May-2015