Act of Endurance
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Comment from Harper J
Amazing poem that is well written . It has a sinister feel to it .one that is from another time .
It is medieval, it is Victorian . It is modern but yet it is from a different error.
It is arty and mysterious . I just wish I had six stars for this one .
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
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Amazing poem that is well written . It has a sinister feel to it .one that is from another time .
It is medieval, it is Victorian . It is modern but yet it is from a different error.
It is arty and mysterious . I just wish I had six stars for this one .
Comment Written 21-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
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Appreciate the thought about that rate. Glad aspects in this write were found captivating to interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from SLMorrical
This is very good. To lose a mate whether by break up or death its devastating. To think of yourself as one and lonely is always the first thing one thinks. The one can as strong as the two. There are many ones who are okay being one. This was an easy flowing read. Well done. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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This is very good. To lose a mate whether by break up or death its devastating. To think of yourself as one and lonely is always the first thing one thinks. The one can as strong as the two. There are many ones who are okay being one. This was an easy flowing read. Well done. Keep writing.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Glad aspects of this particular write were found appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from kiwijenny
This flowed in a seemingly un flowing way. But the jerky read portrayed the loneliness felt
Lonely widow is disjointed now her love is gone
Well penned poignant in sadness
God bless
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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This flowed in a seemingly un flowing way. But the jerky read portrayed the loneliness felt
Lonely widow is disjointed now her love is gone
Well penned poignant in sadness
God bless
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Interesting viewpoint I will investigate. Happy even though flaws you were able to assemble its intent. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching remarks.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is life, so strange, change is inevitable, she retired from job, now again living alone, in a widow lonesome living, poet looks at the frame; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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This is life, so strange, change is inevitable, she retired from job, now again living alone, in a widow lonesome living, poet looks at the frame; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Appreciate your thoughts about this particular write. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from kahpot
Wonderful and I like the form this is written in, and you certainly have the "lonely" part down, I love the returning to her fortress as when we are alone, Home is our security and place of safety, very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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Wonderful and I like the form this is written in, and you certainly have the "lonely" part down, I love the returning to her fortress as when we are alone, Home is our security and place of safety, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 25-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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Glad aspects of this write were found appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
Comment from meeshu
this is an ode to the longing and forlorned. I love your language and versification. well penned, TPAC.................meeshu
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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this is an ode to the longing and forlorned. I love your language and versification. well penned, TPAC.................meeshu
Comment Written 25-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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I see you have fire as well. Glad aspects of this write were found appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from sydney brown
This poem is really good. I take it as a lady getting older and rocking back and forth for her coming years. It really is amazing, as it makes me scared to get older
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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This poem is really good. I take it as a lady getting older and rocking back and forth for her coming years. It really is amazing, as it makes me scared to get older
Comment Written 25-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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The write tells a story about a member of the human family. Those who find themselves in this exact sutuation and other who never associate their reality as such. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching remarks.
Comment from phill doran
Hello once more
These are all pretty good. It is difficult to comment on such a unique style. So I will not try, other than to say these are almost abstract and a joy to read aloud - teh images are 'daubed' rather than painted.
I do enjoy your style.
Cheers
phill
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Hello once more
These are all pretty good. It is difficult to comment on such a unique style. So I will not try, other than to say these are almost abstract and a joy to read aloud - teh images are 'daubed' rather than painted.
I do enjoy your style.
Cheers
phill
Comment Written 22-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Again. I'm glad some features of this write was pleasing to you. I get a kick out of my tried efforts at storytelling in these writes. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting words.
Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
I get the gist of this poem, but it is hard to read and follow the words, for example "gong" which I think should be "dawn".
With some assistance in translation, it could be a very beautiful poem.
Good luck.
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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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I get the gist of this poem, but it is hard to read and follow the words, for example "gong" which I think should be "dawn".
With some assistance in translation, it could be a very beautiful poem.
Good luck.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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I do suffer grammer flaws and thanks to reviews as your I hope to address those pits. Thanking you for your generous rate and splendid views.
Comment from Old Soldier
Interesting form. Can only say I got it. Nice story. Thanks for sharing and keep writing and reading. ......................................
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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Interesting form. Can only say I got it. Nice story. Thanks for sharing and keep writing and reading. ......................................
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Comment Written 22-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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At least you got something ftom it. I'm finding myself like a drunk walking in the dark. Maybe a few more kicks I might get it. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.