Comment from rod007

Excellent

I feel so sorry for poor Jeanie and hope she survives the ordeal with the axe man. She shouldn't have listened to the hunchback. It is never a good idea to take a shortcut thorough a cemetery, especially one that lurks in Dean Kuch's imagination. Well done, Dean.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

Heh-heh...No, you're absolutely right about that, Rod. It isn't.
Thank you very much for taking the time to R&R the story for me. And please, feel free to contribute a tiny tale of terror of your own to the book. You write horror, don't you, lol? It is a multi-authored book that anyone can contribute to. As long as the story is between 100-500 words, and horror/thriller flash or micro fiction, it's in there.

Thanks again! ~Dean

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

Dean, did I miss out on something? You want others to add too your book? I might give it a try, some of my nightmares might fit right in. This on was great. All flash, or is poetry okay? Take care, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

Sorry, Debbie, no poetry. Just flash or micro horror fiction prose. I'm trying to give those who still like to write the occasional story an outlet for their terror tales. So few write prose here, it seems.

I might create a multi-authored book of horror/dark poetry in the future. That's not a bad idea, actually...

Comment from Ridley Williams

Excellent

Hello Dean,

Oh, poor Jeanie, sometimes those short cuts can make for long delays!

I'm sure her head, however, will make a nice addition to the collection.

Hey everybody needs a hobby! Lol.

Nice job with the setup on this story; the conclusion leaves a chill. Brrrrrr!

Have a good one, Dean...Bill

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

Thanks, Bill.

You know what I always say? There's never anything wrong with getting a little head, heh-heh...

All the best, my friend, and thanks again! ~Dean ;)

reply by Ridley Williams on 30-Apr-2015

Ha ha ha ha- Little head...oh brother!

Thanks for the belly laugh...I needed that.

reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

:)

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

I didn't realize this was for a book. Maybe I can come up with something. Bet all those orange painted faces had the same expression too. Love the understatement of the last line.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

Thanks, Shari. Yep, it's a multi-authored book that any premium FanStory member can contribute to. I hope you'll give it a shot.
~Dean

Comment from Michaelk

Excellent

Another excellent tale. Raw, fast, and brutal, with the hunchback being the main hint that something was not right here. Excellent balance between description and leaving the readers imagination to run wild.
Moral of the story, never let the hunchback give you directions.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

You got that right, Michael.
Thanks for reading and reviewing the story for me. I truly appreciate it, my friend. ~Dean :}

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

More of a chiller this time than out and out horror. Good tone set for the piece. I read this yesterday and I am sure there was a different picture in here. A forest scene?

Anyway, chills hinted at by the humpback, slow build up and final chill are very effective.
Nicely done.
GMG

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

Yeah, I changed it up just a little, G-Man...the artwork anyhow. You're right, it's more thriller than pure horror.

Feel free to contribute your own story to the book. You know the drill, I'm sure. Just keep it between 100-500 words, and in the genre of horror or thriller. It is a multi-authored book, after all. Any member can now add their own stories. I think it makes it far more interesting that way

Much obliged...~Dean

Comment from evilynne

Exceptional

I don't mind and this is really scary, as usual. It is what nightmares are made of. These thoughts seem to come easy to you. Evi

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

They have since my near death experience in 2010, Evi. I can't say why, exactly, but why fight it? As always, I appreciate your interest in this tiny tales of terror series, and your exceptional six star review as well.

Hugs! ~Dean

Comment from Muffins

Exceptional

Jeanie's the kind of character a reader either wants to slap or shake. Her naive stupidity is irritating. Getting the reader to have such a strong reaction to a character after the first paragraph is amazing. The writer has taken the time to pick the right words and the wrong circumstances to make a character do something the reader is screaming at her/him not to do. Amazing!!!

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

Thank you very much, Muffins. I really appreciate the exceptional comments and six stars. You're far too kind (but keep 'em coming, heh-heh)
Yeah, it's the old horror movie no-no. Never listen to humpbacked strangers, and never go past an old cemetery deep in the woods near dark. And what do they do? They go anyway...
Much appreciated, my friend. ;)
~Dean

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi Dean, this is a brilliantly frightening addition to your wonderful book, It's a shame there aren't many other donors, but you are the best on here, perhaps they feel a bit intimidated lol.
Look forward to your new story my friend.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

There are far better writers here than yours truly, Eric. Thanks for your continued interest in the series, and for your kind comments...~Dean

reply by Eric1 on 30-Apr-2015

My pleasure and you are welcome Dean.

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Like the live action picture. Surprising you have had so little response to this. Story has an enjoyable, easy to follow story line. Maybe you should just write the whole thing yourself? Action flows smoothly and nothing wrong with a real good horror story. Write on.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

Thanks, Brett. Obviously, I enjoy a good campfire ghost story, and that's basically all these stories are, a bunch of writers sitting around, swapping spooky stories. Of course there's no fire, but who's splitting hairs here, besides, perhaps a character in these terror tales, heh-heh?
Much obliged for your interest and your kind comments.
~Dean :}