Contest Entry and Winners
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Distraught!"Short Stories
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Comment from K. Lorraine
I really enjoyed the dialogue mostly story. The dialogue was natural and well written.
The plot was wonderful and the execution of the story was good.
You set the scene well and the story flowed nicely throughout...
You held my interest and that's not an easy task since my mind wanders if the story wanders...
The best entry so far.
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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I really enjoyed the dialogue mostly story. The dialogue was natural and well written.
The plot was wonderful and the execution of the story was good.
You set the scene well and the story flowed nicely throughout...
You held my interest and that's not an easy task since my mind wanders if the story wanders...
The best entry so far.
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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Thank you very much for your comments and for taking the time to read my entry. I've been away from writing for a while so I appreciate that my return and new postings are well accepted. thanks again//Have a great day!
Comment from Cindy Warren
I guess adults need to listen to their kids a bit more. Good thing they decided to humor Randy. They might never have found the Wilson kid. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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I guess adults need to listen to their kids a bit more. Good thing they decided to humor Randy. They might never have found the Wilson kid. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to read my entry. appreciate it very much. Have a freat day
Comment from Debbie Noland
I like your creative take on the "kidnapped" prompt. The plot line involving a troubled boy who helps crack a kidnapping case is unusual and heartening. You choose words carefully and well with the use of effective dialogue that allows us to understand character and action in place of so much narration.The three-scene structure maintains interest and enables suspense to be created. The characters are developed well considering the relatively few words allowed. Good job.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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I like your creative take on the "kidnapped" prompt. The plot line involving a troubled boy who helps crack a kidnapping case is unusual and heartening. You choose words carefully and well with the use of effective dialogue that allows us to understand character and action in place of so much narration.The three-scene structure maintains interest and enables suspense to be created. The characters are developed well considering the relatively few words allowed. Good job.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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thank you so much for your kind comments and input on my story. I appreciate it very much. Have a great day
Comment from Eric1
This is a very interesting entry for this particular competition. Is it a true story? It is certainly well written with great realistic dialogue and a good ending, best of luck in the contest my friend.
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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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This is a very interesting entry for this particular competition. Is it a true story? It is certainly well written with great realistic dialogue and a good ending, best of luck in the contest my friend.
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Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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thank you for reading and appreciating my story....It's not a true story, buy many of the emotions involved have been real to the writer in other situations. Appreciate your comments. have a great day
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You are very welcome my friend
Comment from DionysusDeVille
Amazing how people write kids off as just exercising their imaginations but the most interesting thing is that kids, most times if unprovoked, have no real reason to lie about things they see. good read
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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Amazing how people write kids off as just exercising their imaginations but the most interesting thing is that kids, most times if unprovoked, have no real reason to lie about things they see. good read
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Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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thank you for seeing the purity of the child and understanding my viewpoint. Adults do tend to push aside a child's ideas as being unworthy/ Appreciate your comments. Have a great day