Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

Loved the author notes detailing the origin. It makes the read so much more interesting. It almost gives it a sense of being real. Never heard of the lamia, but now I won't forget it.

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015

Thanks, DALLAS, I appreciate it!

I've seen just one movie that deals with the Lamia myth. It's titled, "Drag Me to Hell", if you're into movies. If you liked a really good scare with coupled with a few laughs, then you'd really like the movie.

Thanks so much again for your review. :}

~Dean

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

I had not heard this one before. Hera certainly did have a hard time keeping track of Zeus and all his mistresses. It must have been a full time job just trying to keep up with him.

You certainly do know how to spin the tail--just when I thought it was all over, it was only beginning. hee hee yourself.

Good scaring.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015

Poor Hera, right? And people thought Elvis was a player. Thanks a bunch for the complimentary review, debi. I really appreciate it. :)

~Dean

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Oh yes I have heard the tales and you did such a wonderful job of bringing it to life...breathing breath into it so to speak.
Had me going till I saw the clock.
Nice addition to the book.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015

Thank you very much, Barb. I really appreciate the feedback, my friend.

~Dean :}

Comment from Crennan87

Exceptional

This is terrifying! I absolutely loved how this horror happened to him, but thankfully it was only a dream...or perhaps not...
It was such a great cliffhanger that left me wanting, yet satisfied. You truly have a gift.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015

Thanks for the wonderful comments and six stars, Crennan, I sincerely appreciate it. Flash fiction is so difficult to write. But when you're doing horror flash fiction it's doubly difficult because you're also trying to scare the pants off folks, LOL. If it's not done right, it just won't work.

Thanks so much again. I'm really glad that you enjoyed the story. :} ~Dean

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Dean, you would be proud of me. I made it all the way through this.. It was not as scary as your usual fare.
Blessings, Patricia

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015

I am proud of you, Patricia, LOL. You're right, it's more of an irony piece than anything else, I suppose. Not too horrible, heh-heh.

Thanks for reading it, and for your thoughtful comments as well. :)

~Dean

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Sometimes it doesn't pay to go to sleep. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a terrorizing read. There is very good imagery.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015

Thank you, Charlie. Yeah, I'd have to agree with you, especially in many of my stories, heh-heh.

Thanks a bunch for the comments, buddy. :) ~Dean

reply by c_lucas on 26-Mar-2015

You're welcome, Dean. Charlie

Comment from juliesibs

Excellent

Okay, guy. You have rocked this one. The image is one of the creepiest I have seen and a good representation of the Lamia. The story is a tense filled read. The ending, with 12:00 flashing.... Masterful. I'm just sorry its a short read.

Great job Dean,
Julie

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015

Thanks, Julie, I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. Flash fiction is very challenging to write and make it work. That's why I took on the challenge of doing an entire book filled with stories just like this one. I should help me learn to tighten up my prose.

I very much appreciate the feedback, thanks again. :}

~Dean

Comment from GregoryCody

Excellent

Oooh. I love this. So creepy. It's weird, it's prose but so poetic with the alliteration and assonance in such lines as;

Closet cracks, pain brain, grinning ghoul.

So time went back?

Love the close. So eerie. I wonder why she chose Frank?

I wish I had a six. This is so awesome. Such a story packed into so few words. Concise. Like Hemingway. GREAT.



Btw Sorry I've taken so long to review. I have a newborn of course. He's been taking up my time of course. But I'll be back reviewing full force soon. I miss reading your work.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015

Hey, no worries, Gregory. Hopefully the little guy is doing well, and your newborn son, too (LOL).

Thanks for the awesome review. I really appreciate it. ~Dean :}

Comment from write hand blue

Excellent

Hi Dean, this is an interesting one you have written here.

First you give the time as 12:01 am, then you effectively describe a ghoulish attack. But it's the slow creak of the closet door, and, the time illustrated by a flashing red 12:00 that captures the attention.

Have you considered publishing an audio version of your short stories and poems?

Truck drivers listening would NEVER fall asleep at the wheel. They wouldn't dare. LOL.

Would love to be able to illustrate my work with moving images... :) Mel.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015

Thanks, Mel, and it's ironic that you should mention the audio thing.

An internet audio book company by the name of EarFiction just bought a years rights to my story published here first titled, "The Ripper's Shack", to be made into an audio story. So, I guess you and the good people at EarFiction thought of it before I ever did, LOL.

I very much appreciate your review, Mel. Thanks again. :}

~Dean

reply by write hand blue on 26-Mar-2015

My pleasure Dean.

You don't surprise me. How about Warner Brothers, M.G.M. etc? Or perhaps 'Hammer Horror' if it's still going.

Maybe I can stretch the irony to a film deal. LOL.

It would give me great pleasure to see one of your tales on the big screen.

:) Mel.

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015

Well actually, you can see one of my stories brought to life on the big screen, Mel. Well, on television anyhow, and most televisions today are pretty big, LOL.

Are you familiar with the old Steven Spielberg series, Amazing Stories? Back before the series went public, a request for ideas from co creators Joshua Brand and John Falsey were sent out to struggling writers of horror and science fiction stories. I submitted an idea and it was accepted. It is from season one, episode #4. It's titled "Mummy Daddy", and it aired on October 27, 1985.

Basically, it's about an actor named Harold (my real name, Harold Dean Cook II) -- played by Tom Harrison -- who is still in costume and dressed as a mummy as he races off set because of an emergency phone call from his pregnant wife, Wanda (my wife's name at the time, and she was pregnant with our first son) She is in labor and ready to deliver at the hospital.

So, Harold rushes off through a primeval Southern swamp to reach his wife. But the locals believe in the eerie legend of Ra Amin Ka, and when they encounter the panicked, bandaged performer, they are think that he is the real deal and try to kill him.

Here's the episode, if you're interested. You can view it on your computer. It's just a bit over 29 minutes in length.

Enjoy, and thanks again, Mel!...~Dean ;)

reply by write hand blue on 28-Mar-2015

Hi Dean. Thanks for the download. I have no recollection of this series being shown on TV over here in the UK.

This story of two mummies has your hallmark or style even though it is a few years old. You gave it a fine twist at the end with the real mummy starting to be unwrapped. Edited nicely to leave the viewer in suspense.

I noticed the humour more on the second viewing and would give it a good rating for entertainment value.

This I thought would have been your lead into the script writing business. Have you got Steven Spielberg's mobile number? LOL.

You had him make a film of a story you wrote. I'm most impressed.

Thank you for sharing that with me.

Kind regards :) Mel.

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015

Well, I did have to sell my soul to the...oh, never mind that. Heh-heh ;)

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hi, DeanO (Let me know when you get the book....I mailed it Monday the 23rd. Now for this little gem you have penned. I love the content...scary shit as usual from you. You do use some strong-assed verbs throughout...that's good and actually essential, especially in your line of writing. LOL

Suggestions: " tearing into him. (leave this off...it's overkill after the preceding phraseology.

And: I would cease and desist from triple or double spacing as you always do unless it is poetry. Just looks more like a book or short story that way instead of having a tendency to shout the contents at the reader. (just a suggestion remember...LOL)

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015

Yay, Bob! I checked and your book just arrived! I'm stoked to start reading it, and thanks for what you wrote inside. I loved the dedication to your wife, Lynie. That's so true, isn't it? We sure couldn't do it without their patience and understanding of why it is we feel compelled to do what we do.

I made some corrections based upon your suggestions. Thank you for those as well.

Much obliged, Bob, and thanks so much again. That cover looks marvelous!, heh-heh...
~Dean :)

reply by Mastery on 26-Mar-2015

Yeah! Glad you liked it. The cover is great except I didn't notice the wedding ring on him until i actually got the book! Yikes! (also found some edits screwed up, but they assure me the new rung will be corrected with edit changes done where needed. Shit happens, ya know. LOL..Bob

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015

I never noticed the wedding band either, Bob. Yikes is right! What will Mo think if she gets wind of that, heh-heh...?

Thanks again, brother. They'll get the kinks straightened out eventually. It still looks fantastic. :) ~Dean

reply by Mastery on 27-Mar-2015

I think so too. LOL