Tiny Terrors
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The First Cut is the Deepest"A collection of short horror fiction
68 total reviews
Comment from GWHARGIS
I love the way you write, as you know, but this was too real for me. I love suspense and the implied horror. I just don't like the gore. I do think your writing and presentation are impeccable. Gretchen
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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I love the way you write, as you know, but this was too real for me. I love suspense and the implied horror. I just don't like the gore. I do think your writing and presentation are impeccable. Gretchen
Comment Written 14-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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It was gruesomely graphic for a reason, Gretchen. I wanted people to loathe and despise this Puppeteer character, and based on the feedback I've received thus far, I believe I succeeded in doing that.
I appreciate the review. ~Dean
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Dean,
Oh man, what a story! You do a great job of bring the gore to the page in this piece, buddy, whew!
Nice work developing the setting in such a small space...love flash fiction.
Haunting ending with the guy seeing the flash as he gets it from the hubby in the end...again, whew!
Best of luck with this solid entry, Bill
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Hi Dean,
Oh man, what a story! You do a great job of bring the gore to the page in this piece, buddy, whew!
Nice work developing the setting in such a small space...love flash fiction.
Haunting ending with the guy seeing the flash as he gets it from the hubby in the end...again, whew!
Best of luck with this solid entry, Bill
Comment Written 14-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Thank for the complimentary review, Bill. I just lost the contest by a single vote. I am glad you enjoyed it, however. It seems my fans rarely vote in these contests, for whatever reason.
Que sera, sera...
~Dean
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I am familiar with the syndrome...great reviews but few votes...like you say...
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Yeah, I never have understood it. I probably never will.
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Ah, those mysteries of life...
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Ah, those mysteries of life...
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M-m-m-m-mmmmm...
Comment from sibhus
Holy sick, demented, twisted writing, but hey, I like it. Hmmm, wonder what that says about me. Great details in this brutal flash that is so cool. Stark and nasty, but sooo good, Dean. See, if I had made this contest you would have beaten with change to spare. Good stuff, Dean and good luck. Like you need it you sick puppy you.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Holy sick, demented, twisted writing, but hey, I like it. Hmmm, wonder what that says about me. Great details in this brutal flash that is so cool. Stark and nasty, but sooo good, Dean. See, if I had made this contest you would have beaten with change to spare. Good stuff, Dean and good luck. Like you need it you sick puppy you.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Yeah, well... I made a contest and I don't think I've received a single entry yet. So, you're better off saving your five bucks.
Thanks for the great review, my friend. :)
Comment from lakeport
The first cut is the deepest, indeed the pictures are gruesome and so is the story of a very sick man, Good luck at the contest, God bless you, Lakeport.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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The first cut is the deepest, indeed the pictures are gruesome and so is the story of a very sick man, Good luck at the contest, God bless you, Lakeport.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Thanks, Lakeport. I appreciate the review. I'm losing again by a single vote, with less than fifteen minutes to go. It doesn't look good.
Have a great day. ~Dean
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you are very welcome, I don't know about these contest, I guess I will never win.Lakeport.
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Yes, you will. Just don't give up. It took me almost two years before I won my first contest here.
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thank you very much, lakeport.
Comment from juliesibs
Oh yea, definitely high on my creep meter. Being a horror from way, way, back, your writing is engaging, it makes the read lean toward the book for a more intense read.
Love it. Julie
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Oh yea, definitely high on my creep meter. Being a horror from way, way, back, your writing is engaging, it makes the read lean toward the book for a more intense read.
Love it. Julie
Comment Written 14-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Thanks, Julie. That is very kind of you to say. The story isn't doing as well in the contest as I'd hoped, but it seemed to be well received. I am considering doing an entire series of horror flash fiction tales. What do you think?
Anyhow, thank you again very much, and take care. :)
~Dean
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I love flash fiction, horror is my thing. I love that tingle and page turning fear, that tells you, 'see' what happens next. Also, flash is short enough to give the reader the thrill, without the wait of reading page after page. If you enjoy a shorter read, flash is wonderful.
I would definitely, and I do creep on your page, read a flash from you.
Julie
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Thanks, Julie. That's good enough for me. :)
Comment from fimarie78
Very powerful writing. The idea of the puppeteer is very interesting. I have to admit I did feel queasy when he inserts his hand into the gash in her left breast! The idea of the puppeteer becoming aroused in the scenario works well. Then the revelation that 'she' was related to the policeman? Just a small thong- what was the flash at the end? thanks Fiona
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Very powerful writing. The idea of the puppeteer is very interesting. I have to admit I did feel queasy when he inserts his hand into the gash in her left breast! The idea of the puppeteer becoming aroused in the scenario works well. Then the revelation that 'she' was related to the policeman? Just a small thong- what was the flash at the end? thanks Fiona
Comment Written 14-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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The policemen was the poor dead girl's husband, Fiona. Remember the family photo the killer knocks over picturing the couple? He came home from work and caught him in the act, slaughtering his wife. The flash at the ending was the muzzle of the cops gun as he shot the Puppeteer.
Thanks so much for the review!
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I got the photo reference- that she was the cops wife, but don't know enough about guns to realise the flash. Thanks for enlightening me.
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Hah...yeah. When they fire, there's a muzzle flash, Fiona. I had lots of practice in the US Marine Corps.
Comment from Jay Squires
Hey, Dean! This is probably the most complete, emotionally satisfying, piece of flash fiction I've read.
It is complete for the things you left out:
She is in HER bathtub.
The policeman is in his own home.
The photo knocked over is of A policeman getting the award
And only in the next to the last line does everything come together.
You totally did it, Dean! And still you weren't smart enough to wait for Midnight Saturday to post.
You'd have gotten a 6 from me, dummy! LOL, Great stuff!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Hey, Dean! This is probably the most complete, emotionally satisfying, piece of flash fiction I've read.
It is complete for the things you left out:
She is in HER bathtub.
The policeman is in his own home.
The photo knocked over is of A policeman getting the award
And only in the next to the last line does everything come together.
You totally did it, Dean! And still you weren't smart enough to wait for Midnight Saturday to post.
You'd have gotten a 6 from me, dummy! LOL, Great stuff!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Hah-ha... Oh well, Jay. The fact that you enjoyed it is reward enough for me. I took on this challenge because, A) I feel horror flash fiction is one of the most difficult forms of prose to write, and get it right. And, B). I wasn't doing anything better at the time anyhow, so I figured, what the heck, why not enter a contest, see what happens? LOL...
Thanks so much for the fantastic feedback, my friend. The praise means a lot coming from you. :)
~Dean
Comment from victor 66
Well, Dean... you did it again. I can't imagine another entry that's better than this one. I wish you luck in the series as well. You put a great deal of effort and talent into very conscientiously written work. Take care, my friend.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Well, Dean... you did it again. I can't imagine another entry that's better than this one. I wish you luck in the series as well. You put a great deal of effort and talent into very conscientiously written work. Take care, my friend.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Thanks very much, Victor, I'm really glad you think so, my friend. Now, if only more voters did I wouldn't be behind in this thing, LOL.
I really appreciate the fantastic rating and comments. You're too kind. :)
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The thing is, Dean, if I really had my finger on the pulse of the FS readers, I might win a few more contests than I do. However, that still doesn't take anything away from your writing. Good, is good. There's always a next time, and I know you'll be in the mix. "The difference between the winners and the losers is, the winners just keep showing up."
Comment from lancellot
Yes, this is classic Dean horror, filled with accurate details that make the scene vivid and real in the evil that people can do. And a happy ending too. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Yes, this is classic Dean horror, filled with accurate details that make the scene vivid and real in the evil that people can do. And a happy ending too. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Thanks a bunch, Lance. I appreciate it, my friend. :)
Comment from evilynne
That is absolutely horrific and gross. I don't usually read stuff like this, but I am absolutely mesmerized by your grossness. Your writing is perfect and spellbinding. Evi
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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That is absolutely horrific and gross. I don't usually read stuff like this, but I am absolutely mesmerized by your grossness. Your writing is perfect and spellbinding. Evi
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Thanks, Evi, and I usually don't write stuff like this, LOL. I wanted it to be graphic because I wanted the reader to feel disgust and revulsion so they would have no pity at all for the Puppeteer character when he is gunned down at the end by the dead woman's police officer hubby. I think I got the disgust and revulsion part down...
I really appreciate your outstanding comments and six star rating, Evi. Have a great weekend, my friend. :)
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You got it exactly right! Have nice weekend, Mater of Grossness! Evi
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You too, Evi. :)