The Life of Hunter Grace
Based on True Events18 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
This happened to a friends coach ...he sadly killed himself and his wife and children after his deals went belly up
Sad sad sad and so wrong
God bless for your story poem...well penned
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This happened to a friends coach ...he sadly killed himself and his wife and children after his deals went belly up
Sad sad sad and so wrong
God bless for your story poem...well penned
Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from acerisestory
Yours is a sad story -- and well told, Alice. I can only imagine how many people this happened to after the economic downturn. Sounds like he was living very well (maybe too well) for a while. Suicide was the only way out.
Your words flow well -- with perfect rhyming. I wonder why you didn't make four-line stanzas? It might be an easier read, although the way you've written it is really fine.
Well done! Take care. Alana
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Yours is a sad story -- and well told, Alice. I can only imagine how many people this happened to after the economic downturn. Sounds like he was living very well (maybe too well) for a while. Suicide was the only way out.
Your words flow well -- with perfect rhyming. I wonder why you didn't make four-line stanzas? It might be an easier read, although the way you've written it is really fine.
Well done! Take care. Alana
Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from MelB
Such a sad tale of a man who died and no one seems to know what happened. There was great flow and rhyme. This keeps the reader intrigued and tells the story well.
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Such a sad tale of a man who died and no one seems to know what happened. There was great flow and rhyme. This keeps the reader intrigued and tells the story well.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Alice,
Wow, what a sad tale this is. The perfect photo to give that eerie feeling of how Hunter may have met his demise.
Well written--such smooth read.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
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Hi, Alice,
Wow, what a sad tale this is. The perfect photo to give that eerie feeling of how Hunter may have met his demise.
Well written--such smooth read.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from JeanneHP
If this was a contest entry, you would have won. A sad true story put into poetry. You did a good job with the wording and rhyming, and was a pleasure to read. Jeanne :-)
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If this was a contest entry, you would have won. A sad true story put into poetry. You did a good job with the wording and rhyming, and was a pleasure to read. Jeanne :-)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from adewpearl
good use of abcb rhyming
good alliteration in phrasing like basement bar
he couldn't bare to tell his girl - bear
a tragic story representative of the story of too many people defeated by corporations, banks and econonomic forces beyond their control
Brooke
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good use of abcb rhyming
good alliteration in phrasing like basement bar
he couldn't bare to tell his girl - bear
a tragic story representative of the story of too many people defeated by corporations, banks and econonomic forces beyond their control
Brooke
Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from fastdigits
A tale of life told in poetic rhyme, that
flows down the screen, much like the
water at the river's edge, here today,
gone tomorrow
Well done
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A tale of life told in poetic rhyme, that
flows down the screen, much like the
water at the river's edge, here today,
gone tomorrow
Well done
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Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
Comment from pbroussard209
The inspiration we writers find in songs amaze me. The last chapter I was working on in my book had me singing "American Pie" by Don Mclean. This was a great poem/story. and yes I could hear Bob Dylan singing about Hunter as well.
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The inspiration we writers find in songs amaze me. The last chapter I was working on in my book had me singing "American Pie" by Don Mclean. This was a great poem/story. and yes I could hear Bob Dylan singing about Hunter as well.
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Comment Written 08-Jan-2015
