Ain't That The Truth
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "senryu (stool pigeon)"Short poems poking fun at the human condition.
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Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in good 3/5/3 syllable count
good alliteration in criminal's car
good play on words with "duty" and doodie, or however one would spell that slang expression for poop
a witty play on words with a good satiric tone :-) Brooke
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Your poem is in good 3/5/3 syllable count
good alliteration in criminal's car
good play on words with "duty" and doodie, or however one would spell that slang expression for poop
a witty play on words with a good satiric tone :-) Brooke
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Brooke. I haven't a clue on how to spell it.
Comment from royowen
I love the "bird poop" on the windscreen, must be a giant pigeon, the beautiful thing about being "pooped on" is that it's like being naked, the great equaliser! A very clever senryu, the mind boggles at it's implications! Well done, blessing, Roy.
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I love the "bird poop" on the windscreen, must be a giant pigeon, the beautiful thing about being "pooped on" is that it's like being naked, the great equaliser! A very clever senryu, the mind boggles at it's implications! Well done, blessing, Roy.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
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Pigeon poop is an equal opportunity giver.
Comment from tfawcus
I don't know how you keep coming up with these little gems! This one is brilliant! Definitely a scatalogical success. Being hit by bird poo is considered lucky by some, but clearly not by the criminal classes.
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I don't know how you keep coming up with these little gems! This one is brilliant! Definitely a scatalogical success. Being hit by bird poo is considered lucky by some, but clearly not by the criminal classes.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Tony. Brilliant, huh? Now I've been hit with bird poo. LOL
Comment from IndianaIrish
Great play on words, Shari, to make your Senryu a perfect way to give me a huge smile today. The irony is clever and your signature creativity.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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Great play on words, Shari, to make your Senryu a perfect way to give me a huge smile today. The irony is clever and your signature creativity.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
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What a nice thing to say. Thanks, Karyn.
Comment from mikemagine
LOL! Yes, a trained - or programmed - computer pigeon would be very handy! Have it laser in on the perp's car...:-) I give you a virtual six!
Just an aside, when I was in the service, our platoon had this real 7%$#! of a drill instructor. Ah, but the bird - or the boid - got him! Probably ruined the jerk's Smokey, lol.
Every single one of us fought very hard to not laugh!
Bravo!
Mike
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LOL! Yes, a trained - or programmed - computer pigeon would be very handy! Have it laser in on the perp's car...:-) I give you a virtual six!
Just an aside, when I was in the service, our platoon had this real 7%$#! of a drill instructor. Ah, but the bird - or the boid - got him! Probably ruined the jerk's Smokey, lol.
Every single one of us fought very hard to not laugh!
Bravo!
Mike
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
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LOL. People get what they deserve. How did he react?? Thanks for the virtual six.
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LOL! Surprisingly, he didn't say much, and actually, he muttered. Ah, but his facial expression!! VERY PO'D! Jaw muscles bunched, corners of mouth turned down, eyes squinting like good ol' Clint:-)
Mike
Comment from Ben Colder
A jay got a real estate man one time when I was listing some property. Right on the bald head. LOL I liked to have burst a gut.
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A jay got a real estate man one time when I was listing some property. Right on the bald head. LOL I liked to have burst a gut.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
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Now that's funny. Guess the bird was attracted to something shiny.
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It really happened. I got him a tissue, but was fighting laughter.
Comment from Louise Michelle
LOLOLOL - hey Shari, as soon as I read the word stool I envisioned a poopy. I'm glad it's just that white stuff from a bird. How you play with words in such a delightful and refreshing way. I'll never look at bird poop on my car the same way, lol. Hugs, Lou
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LOLOLOL - hey Shari, as soon as I read the word stool I envisioned a poopy. I'm glad it's just that white stuff from a bird. How you play with words in such a delightful and refreshing way. I'll never look at bird poop on my car the same way, lol. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
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Inspiration for this: My grandson made a joke. A bird's duty is to do duty.
That is a horrible splotch on the car.
Comment from Breakneck Beryl
mildly amusing, but why 'criminal's' car? Do birds now only shit on criminals cars?! Surely, it should be the stool pigeon who is the criminal?!
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mildly amusing, but why 'criminal's' car? Do birds now only shit on criminals cars?! Surely, it should be the stool pigeon who is the criminal?!
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Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
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Stool pigeon also is slang for someone who narcs on criminals and helps lead the police to the quilty.
Comment from Wendyanne
Lol spitfire, lovely(?) artwork you have chosen to complement your well written senryu. Good old bird for marking the criminal's car.
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Lol spitfire, lovely(?) artwork you have chosen to complement your well written senryu. Good old bird for marking the criminal's car.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
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Helpful stoolie to have around. :-) Thanks, Wendy.
Comment from judiverse
This is clever. Great pun of stool pigeon. Serves the criminal right that it was a criminal's car he marked. Marks is a good word, too. Indicates a target in the criminal world. That's what we can expect this winter. I saw several crows on our grounds yesterday, and they love to mark up the downtown area. judi
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This is clever. Great pun of stool pigeon. Serves the criminal right that it was a criminal's car he marked. Marks is a good word, too. Indicates a target in the criminal world. That's what we can expect this winter. I saw several crows on our grounds yesterday, and they love to mark up the downtown area. judi
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
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Creepy pictures on google images of cars literally covered all over the rood and hood with bird poop. Yuch!
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That's going to be coming here, with the arrival of the crows. Not very pleasant to think about. judi